The Path of illusion [Law cultivation + Military System]

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I'm rewriting the first volume currently, once I'm done I'll delete these chapters and upload the new ones

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In this post-apocalyptic empire filled with mages and knights, Odin gets mythical powers on the path of illusion.

In the deep layers of the underground mine where slaves toiled for generations, Odin’s dreams were shattered by a haunting childhood incident. But when fate decides to intervene, his life changes forever after encountering The Wanderer and getting a tome called Ominira.

Odin, with his self-created cultivation class and military system roams the continent to fight for true freedom. Heard of crows and soldiers from the forgotten era follow his command as he fights against invading orcs, but they aren’t his only opponents.

What happened to this world a millennia ago? Who is responsible for the current state of the empire? What lies beyond the dark fog?Accompanied by his loyal companions and valiant followers, he will walk on trails left behind by the long-lost civilization to seek the truth and forge a future for humanity.

Follow Odin in his pursuit of freedom as he becomes The Monarch and brings salvation to the fallen realm,but will he gain freedom after that?

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Status: Hiatus
Year: 2023
Author: Herald Of Chaos

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Rating: 4.3/ 5.0
Followers: 42
Views: 10,924

Chapters(26 total)

What readers say about The Path of illusion [Law cultivation + Military System]

“Enter Odin, or 2709, embarking on a journey for freedom armed with the ever enigmatic "Ominira" tome. While the story is in its early stages, it has an incredible amount of potential. The author exhibits a flair for style, crafting vivid scenes with a touch…”
StrahdsillystrawRoyal Road5.0 / 5
“Odin - a slave - or as he's called, 2709, comes in contact with 'a wanderer', who gifts him a mysterious tome - the Ominira. A book of power. He then sets his sights on freeing himself, his sister, and all the slaves in the underground cavern. This sounds l…”
fantasyretreatRoyal Road4.0 / 5

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Community Reviews(3)

StrahdsillystrawRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Enter Odin, or 2709, embarking on a journey for freedom armed with the ever enigmatic "Ominira" tome. While the story is in its early stages, it has an incredible amount of potential. The author exhibits a flair for style, crafting vivid scenes with a touch of psychological depth; it's definitely their strong suit.
However, let's address the grammar. It requires refinement—dialogue structure is inconsistent, there are POV shifts, and occasional tense issues. The author's commitment to a rewrite is a positive step forward.
The narrative unfolds at a measured pace, dedicated to constructing a fantasy world and fleshing out characters. Yet, the absence of a discernible antagonist or impending conflict makes the protagonist's drive more difficult to relate to or understand. Introducing a formidable adversary would do a lot to introduce some much-needed tension.
In summary, 'Odin' holds promise with its captivating concept and stylistic approach. With attention to grammar and some strategic narrative development, the story has the potential to evolve into something spectacular. The author's intention to complete a rewrite gives me a lot of hope in that regard. Even before the polish it's going to receive, I consider this story to be an excellent read, and will continue to read even more as time permits. I can't wait to see how it improves in the future.
fantasyretreatRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Odin - a slave - or as he's called, 2709, comes in contact with 'a wanderer', who gifts him a mysterious tome - the Ominira. A book of power. He then sets his sights on freeing himself, his sister, and all the slaves in the underground cavern.
This sounds like a good concept for a story and I believe the author would do it justice as time goes on. However, the story is still a budding flower.
I won't beat about the bush on this one. The story has potential. But unfortunately potential alone isn't enough to make a story captivating. I say this because, while I see the potential in the story, it still needs a lot of work to grab hold of readers' attention.
When it comes to style, I could tell this is where the author put most of their effort. Descriptions leaned towards being flowery and held a mildly satisfying psychological tone. This would have been made more interesting if the Grammar was at least proofread.
Grammar, which is the backbone of all writing, holds a lot of importance in any story. Mind you, I don't pride myself as an English expert but I've read and written a lot of dialogue to have some experience in it.
The author needs to learn to structure their sentences better and work on dialogues. The dialogues aren't well structured. The use of quotation marks to denote speech was also not used well. The constant shift from 1st person to 3rd person was also a hassle, as well as the continuous change in POV. Don't let me even get started on the change in tenses.
The dialogue isn't as rich as it should be, and it shows that this is most likely a first draft of the story. The author did say that they would be rewriting the story, so there's hope yet.
The story itself hasn't gone very far. It's a slow-paced fantasy series and the author is taking his time to build the world and characters. However, there has been no mention of dark days ahead, no known evil that readers need to keep in mind, fantasizing about how the MC might, or will, need to overpower in the fu
septembersjudgeRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
"Path of Illusion" captivates from the outset, plunging the reader into a world bathed in mysticism and introspection. This narrative is not just a story; it's a philosophical exploration, a meditation on the nature of self, reality, and perception. Here's a closer look at this intricate tapestry of a tale:
Overall (4/5): This narrative is a compelling blend of atmospheric settings, emotional depth, and philosophical musings. While it holds the reader's attention with its unique premise and engaging plot, there are moments when the narrative density might challenge some.
Style (4.5/5): Rich in metaphor and symbolism, the writing style is a clear standout. The vivid descriptions create an immersive experience, and the nuanced portrayal of emotions strikes a chord. However, a touch of simplicity in certain sections could enhance the narrative flow.
Grammar (4.5/5): With fluid sentence structures, the prose flows seamlessly. A few minor inconsistencies exist, but they hardly detract from the overall reading experience.
Story (4/5): The plot, replete with twists and philosophical underpinnings, keeps one engaged. Its exploration of reality versus illusion is both thought-provoking and intriguing. Yet, certain segments could benefit from clearer exposition to fully unveil the richness of the narrative world.
Character (4/5): The protagonist, 2709, is a beacon of introspection, guiding us through his journey of self-discovery. The secondary characters, each layered and complex, enrich the narrative. While 2709's development is masterfully executed, some secondary characters could use a touch more depth.
In Conclusion: "Path of Illusion" is a commendable literary feat, weaving a narrative that challenges and entertains. The philosophical depth, combined with a compelling plot and well-fleshed characters, makes it a standout read. With minor refinements, this story has the potential to be a timeless classic in speculative fiction.