The Master and The Slave

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In Weyshers:The world comes crumbling down for Naya Nimmith, a princess, albeit naive. The same day that she came to face her farther's terribly cruel side, she also witnessed her mother murdering him. As a witness to the murder, her mother sells her to slavery.In Targia:Respected and adopted by the Royal family, a military trained slave finds love in the midst of war, only to witness her death. Following the war, Nesto Fashier is lost and only finds his way by living a life of servitude.COMPLETE.Edit: Next novel up:NUMB

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Status: Completed
Year: 2018
Author: MrZombie

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EvilGremlinRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Just a quick rating, because story really deserves some promotion.
Nice setting and some smart thoughts. Author really can write. Try it. Cannot say much yet because it's only beginning of a slow story, which is more about people's relationships than anything else.
ShyBoyRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
I wanted to like this story. But the style and grammar and descriptions were too off-putting. Too often "have" is used instead of "do", singular gets confused with plural, third person doesn't have an 's' when it should, present continuous is used without "be" (he eyeing), and many more.
Dialogues are clumsy. The mark of that is that names need to appear VERY frequently. There are dialogues where they appear in EVERY. SINGLE. LINE. Spoiler from first half of chapter 2. It's a dialogue between Nesto and Aymon. Even when one of them says the other's name... we still are told who it was.
Aymon let out a cough, "You should go there sometime and let me buy you a drink."
The kitchen becomes lively again as the maid begins their work.
"I don't know, I got too much work to do in the morning," Nesto said as he lifts the hot pot off the burning coal.
"I insist that we should go together, we can drink, sing, and met the beautiful woman there," Aymon said.
"Maybe some other times," Nesto said as he grabbed a jar of herbal teas grind.
"I will take that maybe, as a yes," Aymon said.
Nesto then scoops it out using a spoon and place it in the infuser. Nesto then places the infuser on top of the ceramic teapot and pour the hot water on it. The hot water mix with the teas grinds and flow down to the bottom. Nesto takes out the infuser, close the teapot with a ceramic lid.
"Hmm, tea... Can I have some?" Aymon ask.
"Of course," I said as I pour some into a cup for Aymon.
Nesto grabs the cup of tea and gave it to Aymon. Aymon takes a sip and lets out a pleasing moan.
"Your tea is the best, Nesto. I got a proposition for you, why don't you become my wife. I would love to have you," Aymon offers as he winks at Nesto.
"Sorry, but I'm not interested," Nesto declined.
Nesto heard some of the maids giggle as he declines Aymon offer.
"Oh, you truly break my heart, Nesto," Aymon joked as he overdramatically places a hand on his chest.
Nesto let out a small laugh. "Ladies, you still have a chanc