The Magi's Society

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Description

In a galaxy ruled by the iron fist and patronage of massive moon-sized ships called, The Barges, the main character Mevare (Mevi) is given to these Barges as a sacrifice for continued patronage and sustenance for her family. Being mistreated, ignored, and uneducated, Mevare must learn what living in service to the god-like Magi, who maintain and run The Barges, is like. The strange mysteries The Barges contain and emit, as they defy all laws of physics, reality, and allow the use of strange abilities normal people see as magic. The investigation and exploration of The Barges takes Mevare through many worlds, realms, and places within and without The Barges.

Posting one chapter every week, usually on Friday or Saturday

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2023
Author: Sullengar

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Rating: 4.6/ 5.0
Followers: 113
Views: 57,093

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D MicheaelsRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
I have been following the story as it progressed since about chapter 5/6. I wrote my review rather early and dissected some of my grievences with the style and grammar mostly. After seeing the newest chapters, and the improvement and development, I am redoing my review. But I will leave the old analysis in this review at the end if anyone wants to view it... Without further ado.
Character:
I believe the characters are the second best part of the story so far. While we only see the perspective of Kalesi (the main character's "mentor") once, it shows a pretty signifigant change in setting, mood, internal dialogue, and perspective. What I assumed was a left out and purposeless features of the main character and parts of the main plot, I realize might have been semi-intentional. The two characters, and the chapter style, are written in slightly different ways that can be noticable and change the setting and genre slightly. While the main character is still portayed as not knowing much, and used to allow the audience to learn about the enviornment, their mentor mentions things and thinks about topics that are only partially explained (or explained in simple manners). Presenting them in this way allows for the readers to anticipate when the main character will experience or interact with the new elements while still expanding on the universe and setting. Regardless the characters and their interactions are very different and seem to have a decent amount of consistency that I didn't think was there before. I also want to see a chapter from Naazir's point of view, that might be a spoiler if it happens later?
Grammar:
The grammar can still struggle sometimes. But there is very clear improvement from the first couple chapters to the latest ones. Either the style of writing is changing, or the writer is actually improving before our very eyes. Regardless, I can't fault them for the visible progress they made with their work. I can't give full marks, as there are still errors,