The Harmless Sweetie is Far From Harmless [CANCELLED, REWROTE IT IN ANOTHER BOOK}

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2021

Author

Hexenblume

• CHAPTER 2 - Oh god, his status
  Nov 29, 2021
• CHAPTER 1 - Oh god, spirits
  Nov 25, 2021
• PROLOGUE 2/2 - Oh god, she's not human
  Nov 24, 2021
• PROLOGUE 1/2 - Oh god she's getting reincarnated [REMADE]
  Nov 23, 2021

Reviews

Community Reviews(9)

• Capital StationRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  I thought with a title like this, the main character wouldn't find too much trouble. To my delight, there are a lot of interesting events! First off, I like that the main character (Clailip) tries so hard. Even when he's first learning offensive magic (and combines the dew and gust abilities) he's trying his best--and I love that in characters, even if they're not as kick-butt as all the others. Clailip's magic seems greater than the others, but in a subtle way.
  I also really liked the first appearance of the snake, and how it helped out. Definitley had me chuckling the entire time.
  Oh! I also liked the frequent use of golems. They're one of my favorite fantasy creatures, and they don't get enough love. (Also loved some of the abilities, like the mist spear).
  As for the grammar--there is a frequent misuse of present tense and past tense throughout. This could easily be fixed with an editor or proofreader, though. While it did distract me at a couple points in the story, I could march through and still have fun. If you enjoy sweet characters, and scenes that will have you guessing what happens next, I definitely recommend this.
• MOROSERoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Style: This story shines stylistically, with great, precise descriptions of the actions and spells being done. This sometimes goes into fairly elaborate detail, and gives the reader a clear sense of what is going on. It is an isekai with a system, and the portrayal of the system is also quite good. It is occasionally shown second-guessing itself and trying to process the situation, which is sometimes played for laughs. It also occasionally seems to have its own sense of humour, for instance by listing the MC's titles in a way that he disapproves of.
  Story: The story here is still beginning, but is portrayed quite effectively. The MC's relation to the history of this world, through his parents, is conveyed through his focus and curiosity around magic. While the story focuses on his journey, it also introduces several other characters who may play an important role.
  Grammar: The language in this is mostly very good, and the grammar is solid.
  Character: The MC is interesting, and the other characters will probably be fleshed out more as the story goes on. The MC gives the story an interesting flow through his curiosity about magic and his focused POV. However, there is a slight disconnect between the fairly competent and focused MC portrayed in much of the story, and the frequent characterisation of the MC as childish. This is partially intentional, but I felt like this could be clarified more.
• Consistent MilkRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Overall, a great beginning. I loved how the writer invested time in building the world slowly throughout the first two chapters. The best part was that the worldbuilding occurs alongside story progression instead of heavy expositions that serve no other purpose except giving information about the world.
  There were grammatical issues and writing style issues in the first two chapters, but the world and story progression outweighs those issues, at least for me. Highly recommend this for fantasy novel fans!
• FroginapondRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Good start to an interesting story.
  interested to see how this story develops, while only a few chapters have been released at this stage, so far the plot is engaging and grammatical errors are non-existent.
  I recommend giving the story a read of you are into reincarnation stories.
  Keep the story going! I would love to see how it turns out.
• AcusiontRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Overall, a good story that could just use some refinement.
  Style:
  The style is interesting, to say the least. Part of me likes how the author uses varied sentence lengths and different words that do not always come up in everyday conversation. However, some of the word choice can be odd at times, almost like the author plugged words into a thesaurus and just chose one that sounded good without thinking about how it worked in the sentence. There are also times that words are frequently repeated after one another, which just causes it to sound stale from time to time.
  There are also times that the author accidentally lapses into first person as well as present tense. The story at large is in third person, past tense, but there are a few goof ups where the author uses “I” instead of “she” or “he”, and frequent use of present tense. This doesn’t detract severely from the story, but it was noticeable.
  One other complaint I have is that there are times where the writing is borderline infodumping, which, while not a bad thing and is something I’m guilty of myself at times, drags down the writing and seems to go on and on. I appreciate the grand scope that the author has for the story, but I think some of the information given to the reader would be better sprinkled in throughout rather than just thrown at the reader all at once (for instance, going into how the MC’s family is bad at finances. It had no relevance to the story at hand and felt kind of out of place).
  Some parts also tend more towards telling rather than showing. For instance, the main character has something of an internal thought stating that they still look for their parents every morning. The way it’s written is kind of passive, and I think it would be better for the reader to experience that with the character rather than just told how they felt.
  One last thing I wanted to note is that a few chapters in, the POV changes from third to first person… then switches back to third a few chapters later. From wha
• JMMatheisRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  *Trying to be a no spoiler review*­­­
  ‘The Harmless Sweetie is Far From Harmless’ is an isekai with elements of LitRPG of whimsy, the first chapters delivering a sense of wonder and a look into the world that Hexenblume is creating. It is quite different in an intriguing way! One has to remember that this story is a work in progress, and some chapters have already had significant editing and reworking. Considering this, the tale is an interesting prospect to follow.
  Style
  This story is an Isekai in the classic sense, but with darker tones in the opening chapter. To my surprise, elements of LitRPG are also included when explaining the main character’s capabilities. I really like the creative process going on here, with the use of elementals and magic system and the different races that are being explored.
  Story
  The story itself follows the main character from their tough life in our world, through to their rebirth in the new, where things are quite different and challenging in their own right. There is a bit of experimenting in the use of POV that lends itself well to the story, despite needing to be honed a bit further, this has been pointed out by the author as being experimental. The core of the tale itself is solid, well thought out and it is an interesting read that is growing exponentially with every chapter.
  Character
  Characters come across as one-sided in early chapters, and they are clearly designed to be so. The main character has a type, and once their main skill is taken into account it makes a lot of sense. The earlier chapters help to build up the reader’s understanding of the characters, before things really start to get serious. There is a lot of head-room for them to grow within the story and should prove to be a great focal point.
  Grammar
  Grammar and structuring needs a little work, but the author is open to correction and is actively working to improve their writing and story craft, I take that as part of the process considering that English is the
• R. R. QuanRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  I've read... a lot of stories. Like a lot. And I can confidently say that this one is... different. New.
  Style: First off, the writing was readable. That's all I can really say about it. There was a mix and mash of past and present tenses in some places, and there was an issue with head hopping - I'm pretty sure the head hopping was deliberate but the way it was done was confusing. I found that the dialogue was decent and the gore was the perfect balance of gritty description and careless aftermention.
  Plot: As I said before, this story was different. The plot was rather intriguing as you discovered what was happening and things fell into place. I started reading at chapter 8 due to being told they prior 7 were just worldbuilding, and I felt I understood everything perfectly as if 8 was only chapter 1. The other 7 could probably be scrapped or implemented overtime in some way.
  Grammar: Spelling seemed fine, at least from what I had seen. Though there were a few misplaced commas, and as I mentioned before, the issue of tense swapping.
  Characters: They felt real enough, if a tad bit brutal, though I suppose that was just the reality of their world. As for Clay, he was just plain bipolar or something. Full of hatred and all the emotions you'd expect of a frightened child for a few chapters. Until he suddenly became an emotionless executioner that seemed entirely detached.
  Overall, it's something rather new and interesting, although it does have things it needs to work on.
• trianman67Royal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  Style: The narration has an incredibly light and cutesy tone, and yet, it's willing to portray casual violence within an instance if the story demands it. It's an interesting dynamic that throws me off but might intrigue some people to see how everything eventually goes down. I like my plot a little less callous, but it adds to the stakes of the characters and helps show how dangerous the world really is if you're the wrong person and/or get put in the wrong position. There is a bit of a switch between first and third person in the beginning, so beware of that, but once you catch on it's fine.
  Grammar: There's the occasional use of present tense within the story, which is more often than not told in past tense. The present tense can be weird, but i seems to be thriving off of the cutesy, "whoops I did it again," vibe. Many of these seem purposeful, however, and other than that, the story grammar is fine.
  Story: I'm not a fan of child protagonists. In this case, it's an isekai, so the child is a reincarnated person from the "real world." The spirits that accompany the child are the most interesting, as the protagonist, as a child, still seems to lack a strong sense of an overarching goal...because they're a child. I'm a little worried for the spirits, but they carry the main emotional neat of the story (which is what I tend to gravitate towards). As of how much I read, I haven't seen it progress too far into the main story, but this story is still in its begging phases.
  Character: Like mentioned before, the spirits seem to be the most interesting. I do feel a "Game of Thrones" vibe as f now, where characters can and will get mercilessly killed off due to the violent nature of the world/main protagonist, but the spirits are the one who questions their place in the world more often than not, and that's interesting to me. The child protagonist is a merciless child protagonist who isn't really a child but acts like a child. Make of that what you will.
  Overall: Not my sty
• Strif3Royal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  Not gonna lie, I have a lot of criticisms but there's a good story buried here. Let me explain. Spoilers ahead.
  Style: This story's style is hurt by two things in my opinion.
  Firstly, the first-person perspective. First-person is hard to write because it can quickly devolve into a series of "I did this. Then I did that" and this story falls to that pretty quickly. From chapter 6 it switches to third person and has a higher general quality, though it switches back in Chapter 10 (this chapter is of higher quality than the other first person PoVs to be fair)
  Secondly, the sparse descriptions. Not to say the story doesn't describe things, but they tend to be an adjective or two slapped onto a noun and left at that. Sometimes not even that. The entirety of chapter 4 takes place in "a clearing of flowers" with no description of either the flowers or the clearing. This is a consistent problem tbh but easily fixed with some editing.
  Story: The story is the best part of this fic. There's clearly a fully built world behind the plot, so I'm assuming Hexenblume spent more time on this since her creativity shines through. The plot itself is pretty simple to follow so far, and seeing how Clailip's skill affects people in real-time is pretty fun but there are only ten chapters so I expect it to get more complex as time goes on. Though I don't think this needed to be an isekai, I'll expand on this in the character section. The only thing I'll complain about is the lack of tension, at least in the beginning. It picks up at chapter 6 when he gets kidnapped but then dissipates quickly since his kidnappers aren't immune to his aura. Though this is a common problem with isekai that give their protag an OP skill or ability, since we know he's just gonna roflstomp his way through the opponents. However I do like the reveal that there are skills that can hard counter Clailip's innocence aura, it brings the possibility of characters that he can't win against
  Grammar: Grammar is fine for the