The Grasp For Eternity (A Fan Fiction Based On Defiance Of The Fall and The Primal Hunter)

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Leo's world was wrecked when a Monarch came knocking on his door. Now he's thrown into a world where the strong devour the weak and murder for resources is as common as breathing. Leo must find out his heritage gain power and end the newly reborn Goddess Of Destruction Shade. Explore a world of epic fantasy, world building and so much more.

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Status: Hiatus
Year: 2024
Author: VoidEmporer_Official9

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Rating: 2.9/ 5.0
Followers: 22
Views: 13,796

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Akito B. TakahashiRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Not every day do I almost give something five stars. Maybe it's the author's peculiar sense of humour. Anyway, mate, I take pleasure in being the first to review this ff.
Great work. Like, the concept of Shade disrupting the multiverse is attention-grabbing. The Eternals' reactions also add a sense of urgency and stake. Some of the language isn't easy to understand, though, mate. I think streamlining the writing would make the story more accessible. There are a lot of questions that roam in my head, like the things going on with the Primoridals and how Leo's journey might turn out. The settings also remain a tad vague. When I read "multiverse", I expect a grand tale of different kingdoms, factions, etc. Fleshing out these worlds could make the narrative much richer.
Other than that, mate, your story has potential—despite the incessant growth of LitRPGs. With clearer writing, it could be more epic.
Wanna know what stopped me from giving it five stars? The cursing. I don't like that when I read stuff. To each their own, I guess.
DeikonRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Well I liked what it's based off of and I enjoy both of the ideas of the universe is the author mentions.
However the way the introduction of the first chapter is written it's just a little off I didn't like it I don't like how casual it seems to be.
Also this is a need of editing there's no proper spacing for paragraphs reading the whole thing is one giant letter is very hard and I think it would do better with a revamp