The Gates of Chaos Keep Opening and It's Getting Annoying.

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2020

Author

Sleepingdragoon

• Update Log(Updated 6/7/2023)
  May 13, 2021
• One massive recap CH 44.5
  Jul 23, 2024
• A Tale of Falsehood CH 44
  Jul 17, 2023
• The End. CH 43
  Jun 21, 2023
• No Seal to Contain CH 42
  Jun 14, 2023
• The End of The Day CH 41
  Jun 14, 2023
• Battle of Gods CH 40
  May 6, 2023
• Chaos's Peril CH 39
  May 6, 2023
• The Friends Strike Back CH 38
  May 6, 2023
• Guardian CH 37
  May 6, 2023
• The Plague of Fate CH 36
  May 6, 2023
• The Dark Queen CH 35
  May 6, 2023
• In Our Head CH 34
  May 6, 2023
• It Takes Nothing to Lift You Up. CH 33
  May 6, 2023
• Pay Your Taxes, Kids, Because the Boogie Man Works for the IRS... CH 32
  May 5, 2023
• 'Proletariat Ursurping' CH 31
  May 4, 2023
• The God of the Sun CH 30
  May 4, 2023
• The Second Act Begins CH 29
  May 3, 2023
• Monster CH 28
  May 3, 2023
• Eldritch Comforts CH 27
  Feb 25, 2023

Reviews

Community Reviews(3)

• AlexaLeeRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Story: I like the idea of a eldritch horror (sorry, being) and her brother living in a somewhat regular world and the inclusion of magic is done in an interesting way that makes it strangely normalised and expected however, especially at first, this story struggles with telling rather than showing.
  Style: It could do with some refinement. The pace was a little too fast and hard to follow. If it were slowed and the world had a chance to be better developed then this would make it a lot better. I saw in another review that this story appears to be more of a collection of random events rather than a story and I do agree with this assessment. I think if the writer were to go back and slow the pace, making sure to explain things more thoroughly and show the world a little more, then the readers would be able to be more engrossed.
  Grammar: I struggled with this writing because there are a few grammatical issues (a lot of missing capitalisation, specifically of Drade’s name in Chapter 7) but on a whole it’s okay. The writing style means that exclamation marks and periods are used a little too often which makes it a little hard to read at time.
  Character: Drade feels a little unrealistic to me. He isn’t phased by being attacked or by seeing his sister’s best friend dead which, instead of making him seem cool and in control, made him seem a little psychopathic. Some more emotional involvement would make his character a lot more rounded and less flat. However, Chapter 7 did make me like him a little more because it showed some of his kindness. If this could be hinted at in earlier chapters, it would be a lot better!
  I think that there is a very good story here but it needs some refinement so that it can truly flourish. There’s absolutely creativity and an interesting world with some really fascinating elements but they felt a little rushed. My advice to the writer would be: Slow down the pace. Give the reader more insight into the characters and the world and you’ll have a re
• DeaddogsstillbarkRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  The gates of Choas keep opening has a very interesting and engaging premise. The idea of an eldritch being and her brother living amongst regular folks is a fantastic one that I would love to see expanded on. However many of the stylistic choices hamper my enjoyment.
  Style 2/5 :
  I struggled quite a bit deciding this rating. One of the first things I noticed is that this story is in my opinion very anime-y, which is not something I personally do not care for but I know a lot of people do, so I tried to separate my review from my subjective tastes. Still, I found the breakneck pace of the narrative to be disorienting and often harmed my enjoyment of the story. I understand that the author is characterizing Drade as (for lack of a better word) passive. Where most of the events happen to him rather than being instigated by him and I think this type of story can work. However, the events happen at such a rapid pace that I often had to reread to figure out what was going on and who Drade was speaking to. In my opinion, this story would benefit from adding more breathing room, so the reader has time to digest and processes what is happening. I already see an improvement in the later chapters which gives the reader a constant narrative thread to follow in the form of the hunt for the black market. Still, this story could be massively improved with a more structured narrative, rather than a collection of random events.
  Grammar 3.5/5 :
  For the most part, the grammar was fine. In the first chapter, especially the overuse of periods made the flow of the sentences choppy. Another thing that bothered me was the attempt to convert anime tropes to text for example
  “OOOOHHHH NOOOO I’m so sorry! I’m sooosososososoooo sorry, Drade! I really thought you’d just dine and dashed on me, I’m sooososososososooooo sorry for hitting you then hitting you again then trying to make you eat bourgeoisie food off the ground while threatening to let your friends be caught up in a SWAT enchantment tea
• Dysfunctional_LunchboxRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Style: 3
  This is where I struggled the most with this story. The hardest part was by far the pacing. Events happened so quickly that I felt I did not have enough time to digest one encounter, fight, or conversation before another began. I recognize that this is not necessarily a bad thing and is likely ideal for some people, but it left me feeling like I had story whiplash.
  Another difficulty I had here was with the dialogue. I’m not putting this in grammar, because it is technically correct, just hard for me personally. Specifically my issue was with dialogue that felt out of character, sometimes very obviously so. An example is in chapter 4 (The Enchanting Black Market). When talking to Wurn, Drade, who ostensibly has significant experience with the world, does not seem to know what the idea of a black market is. It is minor but does feel strange to me.
  Another dialogue-style related point is again not technically incorrect. The use of phonetic transcriptions i.e. “Owowow..." from chapter 7 ruffles my feathers. I understand this is common so I won't deduct much for it, but it is a pet peeve of mine and takes me out of a story.
  I decided on the 3-star rating because my gripes are subjective. My taste is not everyone’s and I want to take that into account.
  Grammar: 4.5
  The grammar in this story is perfectly fine. There are very few egregious problems and those that do exist I am confident are accidents that could be fixed by sifting through the writing with a fine-toothed comb. So, 4.5. (Wish I could do a 4.999999)
  Story: 3.5
  This section is going to be mostly my opinion. The idea is somewhat interesting at first blush. The whole eldritch being as a sibling thing was a stroke of genius for instance. However, there are some significant issues for me. Part of this related to the pacing because I could not properly process every event in certain sections. This meant that I ended up either missing some plot points or disregarding them because I could only handle so much