The First Magician

Information

Status

Cancelled

Year

2020

Author

Ravennittes

• Chapter 7 - A Star is Born
  Feb 13, 2020
• Chapter 6 - Keep the Pointy End Forward
  Feb 12, 2020
• Chapter 5 - Three of a Perfect Pair
  Feb 11, 2020
• Chapter 4 - Testing, Testing 1-2-3!
  Feb 8, 2020
• Chapter 3 - Milestones
  Feb 5, 2020
• Chapter 2 - Rebirth
  Feb 3, 2020
• Chapter 1 - The Old World
  Feb 2, 2020

Reviews

Community Reviews(10)

• johns276Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Not that bad of a story if you add 5 or so years to the age mentioned.
• The_Laughing_TreeRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  I have read the other reviews and I feel they are are a bit harsh as while admittedly this story has in these initial chapters built the ground work you can tell that there is definate potential to this story. I would expect in the next few chapters the MC would see a bit more action amd I would encourage the writer to keep writing the story (don't get put off by people who dislike slice of life segments)
• BrankoRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Good start. Interesting having it begin with child birth. Very few editorial mistakes, making for easy reading. I look forward to more.
• UlyssesRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  even though there are many things that are unrealistic or overlooked in order to make the story flow more and keep the pacing consistent. I have to say it is one of the best litrpg stories on RR. There certainly are trope problems and also a lack of depth in the characters but in the end, I am comparing it to the other LITRPG series that I have read. And it is by far on the better side of things.
• chaogoesmuRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Spoiler: Spoiler
  Still going through the prologue and world building, I am interested to see where it goes.
• crazy_dwarfRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  It has 7 plot holes I will address
  1. Baby exercise - babies cannot do regular exercise and most people do not know how to train such a fragile body without harming it long term
  2. Genius or monster? - Although it is addressed a little, it is beyond genius to be able to read at 3 years old, and to understand the stats he was reading. Why did no one suspect him of being a demon or a monster? It is a world barely after a calamity. If ever superstation was supposed to come back, it is at this era! – At chapter 5
  3. Big brother jealousy? Where? – at chapter 5 the mc defeated his big brother max at arm wrestling. The mc is 3 years old and max is 5 years old. Any kid will react badly to such an unreasonable situation. This is moreover repeated at chapter 8 in the sword fighting class when the mc defeated all his opponents and max lost on his first one. How can we as the readers supposed to even acknowledge the existence of max if he adds nothing to the story barely being a comparison point to the mc but not even reacting to the "shadow" the mc is creating.
  4. Give dangerous materials to kids? Why not? – At chapter 11 the mc was 4 and bought a known poisonous material that is also mainly used to create poison. He was then even allowed to keep it by his father. Why did the merchant not stop the kid from buying it? And why did his father not intervene?
  5. At chapter 12 a 6-years old kid (the mc) was allowed to choose the school he was going to on his own without a parental guide. Even if the choice can be made by him at this era, wouldn’t the other school's recruiters insist he needs his parent's guidance and then try to convince them?
  6. Why do you have a 4 hour per day education butthe students are sleeping at the school place and not at home? The house is really close (across town) – at chapter 14
  7. Why did no one trail the mc after the second time he sold his experiments? – At chapter 22
• chayRoyal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  honestly the story is fun, however that's it.
  the worldbuilding has a lot of holes, like
  Spoiler: Spoiler
  i know it's cool to have stat increase however you need to scale up your numbers or stop the increase, his dad has stat in the 30s and must be 25-30 years old. you can say kid have bonus to stat increase but even then it's ridiculous
  second point the skills you have three skills for language (language writing, reading) but none for math?
  Spoiler: Spoiler
  and seriously he's 6  and know high level maths and has the stat of an adult guard and no one say anything ? all the afinities while having five is exeptional?
  his brother and sister disapear and never come back home, even if they are kids? the school doesn't seem like it's really far (they can come back for the birth of their little sis without prob and go back to school the same day)
  like i previously said the story is fun but those holes just destroy any posibility to really be taken by the story.
  Spoiler: Spoiler
  some solutions for those holes would be to massively scale up a adult stat (like minimum in the hundred)
  make the school near the capital or a city far from the little town.
  make your mc older, 6 is just too young not just for him but also his friends
  do some character building not just the mc but his classmates, things like personality and history
  We know nothing about any character exept the mc evin his family is pretty flat.
  I'm not asking about a tragic backstory but just some personality to be able to relate with them.
  you need to explain why no one give a fuck to what the mc is doing (affinity, super stat, math test and i'm sure there other things later)
  to conclude your story lacks consistency
  review at chap 19
• hawlolRoyal Road

  ★★ 2.0

  I wanted to make a less agressive review than the current ones.
  Reincarnation stories tend to be plagued by two common mistakes, this one also commits them:
  First: Excessive exposition. Since the MC is a baby/child the author uses the oportunity to explain too many things. System, skills, training, magic, world, currency, history, all compacted in the 25 chapters. In between all these expositions, a few strands of story, a few named characters but nothing substancial happens to them. There's no tension and no plot. The story so far is: Reincarnated MC trains as a baby and then as a child at the adventurers guild.
  Exposition must be given in small doses and only the necessary information for the reader to understand the story at that point in time. Here it's exposition for sake of exposition.
  Second: Genius children. Children are dumb, specially the really young ones, that's why they need to be looked after at all times. 6 year old children do not look after themselves and cannot hold serious conversations with hard topics. Still, in most reincarnation stories, for sake of the MC having friends or rivals, every child is suddenly as capable as a teenager. The suspension of disbelief goes right out of the window.
  Be prepared for exciting sword fights between 5-7 years old, and heavy theory lessons that would let an adult drooling, let alone a bunch of children. Yeah, baby push ups was also bad, but I could overlook it. The excessive exposition and super children made me quit at chapter 20, though.
  There's a reason transmigrating to an already older body is a common trope, it avoids the boring years of childhood without timeskips and throws the MC right into the story. There's also a reason why training montages exists: because training is boring!
  Writing good childhood stories is hard, this one is not an exception, unfortunately.
• Sleeping OtterRoyal Road

  ★★ 2.0

  Okay some of the critism of mine:
  A novel is hike. It is not about the goal it is about the journey. You want to look left and right and enjoy the view of nature. Sometimes take a break and sometimes walk your own way instead of following the always trodden path.
  You my dear author do neither of these. You start sprinting right from the get go, are only looking down at your own two feet and follow the boring old path slavishly. Or to put it in simpler terms: Way to fast paced, no details, no showing instead of telling and not enough originality.
  I am also pretty disappointed that my expactions were not fulfilled. I expected a mage (not a sword fighter / sometimes I fling a fireball mage) with a fleshed out system who invents the first schools of magic - a bit of a trailblazer. That is not what I got and I am dissatisfied because the title, thumbnail and description promised me otherwise.
• rulerhadesRoyal Road

  ★★ 2.0

  Awwwwwww yeeeaaaaahhhhhhh, are you ready for this boys and girls? What wonderous story have we stumbled across today? Why, we have a training arc right off the bat! But hades, he's only a couple months old! I know, best time to really turn on the heat and push your limits, right? Nevermind all the harm it could do to your body or natural limitations. It's a fantasy world so we do things by fantasy world standards.
  Style: Lots of time skips, not very good at painting the picture. Too focused on the MC becoming the very best that ever was at the ripe age of a couple months old to bother with something as trifling as setting.
  Story: Generic reincarnation story with a cringy mc. A poorly thought out system.
  Grammar: Could use an editor, its readable but there's enough issues that it can ruin the flow.
  Characters: BABIES CANNOT DO PUSHUPS. They also do not interrogate their parents at the age of three about the system and declare they taught themselves to read. Said parents also wouldn't take this in stride and brush it off. I will never understand authors who write characters that are babies and/or young children and then completely ruin the character with it. If you have no idea how to write a child then please do not do so or seek help in doing so instead of coming out with things like this.