The Crimson Throne - A Grimdark Tale

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Upcoming college graduate Elaine Lawrence never imagine her life would be cut short by a freak accident, leading her soul to transfer into a dead body.

Elaine soon discovered the young woman she recently possessed true identity, a villainess side character within a novel she finished, Estella Marie de La Croix. Estella's family, the House of Croix, and the male protagonist's family were sworn enemies, destined to collide.

As she tried to survive this unknown and dangerous world, her rationality warned her to avoid him, else she will suffer terrible consequences. Yet he remained her favorite character, and her heart wildly fluttered whenever their path crossed.

"I know we are not meant to be, but can I still like you?"

Warning: Grimdark

Story: Littlefoodie

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2021
Author: littlefoodie

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Rating: 3.9/ 5.0
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Daniel ZRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This is easily one of the two best reincarnated villainess stories that I have seen on RR.
The world is rich and detailed and always full of surprises; we see it mainly but not exclusively from the perspective of the mc. The mc's portrayal is great but other characters are also complex and you feel what they feel. There is a lirpg system but this is not always on your face - unlike many rr stories, not everything is about the litrpg component.
The action scenes are enjoyable and there is enough of them to satisfy but not enough to be boring.
The writing is generally of professional standard.
This is a gem of a story - give it a try!
Edge ValmondRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Crushed, that is one way to start a work. I…I gotta give credit there. Lesson of the day kids? Pay attention. That aside, the story starts off a bit different I suppose to say. Not by much, just a little. With it being at a hospital, and then the process showing how it got to this point. Quick suggestion immediately though, you are using a blend of third and first. Have the first person italicized, it becomes easier to differentiate, and won’t break immersion.
Remember, think about a wave, and when it hits something, it has to find some way around. Not the best example, but when someone is reading. When they are hit with something suddenly, they have to stop and readjust. Since the text is normal, I have to stop and switch to the first person narrative. This is a small issue that can be adjusted quite easily.
I thought this might be a bit more different, but I suppose not. An unwanted child, who her family wanted a son to be the heir. Another mistress birthed a male, and Estella is a mark of shame. I will be fair here, while I have seen this much too often, it does hold weight as a plot device, so I will give it that. If there is one thing I can add, not to the story. A bit more description would be nice, maybe a line or two more per paragraph. I should also add, that previous scene seemed to be from a book, so I suppose it does at least redeem itself a bit.
Anyway, it looks like Elaine is taking some sort of inspiration from Estella. As well as the book mentioning reprehensible actions, so there might be some connecting point there. I should note there is some confusion here, one of the reason to have a bit more descriptions. If I followed it correctly, it seems Estella is within Elaine, and observing from the inside out. Which if I am right, this is actually a promising way to do things.
So Estella and Elaine might be from the same family? If there is one thing I have to say, there is a level of mystery to it. Which I have to say is nice. Elaine possibly having Es
BullerRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
No, wait. That is very definitely not the actual name for. Not gonna change the title though. It amuses me.
Anyway.
What I actually meant was that the writing style of this fiction brings me a small bit of displeasure. The author apparently takes great happiness in portraying nearly every sentence as a list of facts. I think that's the only real way I can describe it. It feels like I am reading a list of facts. Not in the way of this being script-like, because it certainly isn't. While it might have as deep descriptions as other normals, it very certainly has some of it.
Not truly sure what I would give this. On one hand, I wanted to give it a 3.5/5 for the style. On the other hand, the other parts do bring it a fair bit up, though not enough to excuse the first offence. So... I think a 4/5 would do this fiction quite nicely.
ChryissRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
For the most part, this is a standard rendition of a story I'm very familiar with––transmigration into a romance novel, with the particular added detail being she is now in the body of the villainess as opposed to the main character of that said story she's now in.
I actually enjoy these type of stories a lot. They're a bit of a guilty pleasure of mine, I suppose. So my knowledge and personal enjoyment of such stories definitely factors into both my increased level of tolerance as well as criticisms for the execution of this trope.
For starters, I'll begin with Story:
Due to my past experience with similar type stories, very little comes across as unsurprising in this story. But, that is neither bad nor good. I'm merely focused on the execution rather than the originality.
Execution-wise, it's very linear, and I don't mean time-sequential. In fact, I actually got pretty confused at the very first chapter due to a lack of transitions between scenes one year ago and the present right before transmigrating. The story flows by providing exposition and explanation of everything before Elaine actually experiences it, so this telling narration versus showing is something I do not honestly enjoy. While not quite an info-dump, there are alternatives to spread it out where the reader experiences the world of the novel and the information that Elaine knows as the story progresses rather than give all at once and spoil any potential interesting bits.
For example, Estella, the villainess of the novel, does not love the man she seeks to wed for power, and she does not ever confess to the one she does love. This actually made me interested in the villainess, and it was a small twist in what was otherwise a standard rendition of this transmigration romance novel trope.
But, this along with the details not explicitly told in the novel but which Elaine finds out now in this world, are ones I wish could be delivered more impactfully as well as concisely at times. It is not always nece