The Clockwork Sea

Self-Published

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Description

Everything that breathes is slowly turning into machines. A boy yet to fully turn sets out to sea to find the man responsible for it, the Mad Tinker.

Enter the world of the Twelve Seas where clockships fly on invisible timelines and the color of your wizard hat determines your profession.

The Twelve Seas are governed by the three fundamental laws of Chronodynamics. Whether it be through magic or technology these laws must be adhered to:

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2019
Author: UDU

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.7/ 5.0
Followers: 26
Views: 23,882

Chapters(51 total)

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Community Reviews(1)

ArthicernRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
(This is meant as an early and constructive review for a fairly interesting and promising story)
While this story is in its early stages at the time of this review, I feel like it has a lot of potential, and a very interesting concept. At the same time though, it has few flaws that may turn away early readers despite this story's potential.
Though the story itself has yet to dive very deeply into its main concepts, the one's presented provide a fairly unique, and interesting premise of pirate oriented gaslight fantasy. (Steampunk's more magic/fantasy based relative.)
While we haven't learned much of the characters themselves, the bits and pieces we've seen give them that colorful main cast of a comedy shonen. Such as the adventerous and semi-level headed Tig, the drunken Professor, or the lazy but logical Gemjo. Though I will admit at times it feels like a few of the characters are trying a little too hard to be something they're not. Such as the professor occasionally feels like he's trying to be a Jack Sparrow parody in the role of a mentor.
My main issues with the story so far are ones that are commonly found in early writing, and while none of them are deal breakers per say, they do add up over time.
There are occasional grammar slips here and there; a misplaced word, a sentence that just doesn't sound quite right, things that are usually missed without a thorough proofreading.
And at times the pacing feels a little rushed, and disjointed, almost like the story is stutter skipping between events, so something is always going on.
For instance there were a few times where it would've been better for the story to slow down to describe the world around them, such as a chapter before the first to describe tig's life before he meets the professor rather than kicking the story off there, or how occasionally it'll feel like the story is about to describing something fantastical, only to have something make the main character stumble and throw off their train of thought.