The City of First Light

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Kiniun's life has been going well for him, but over time he's come to realize he's forgotten the most important thing to him. His fiancé. In a move to save that spark, he decides to join her in her favorite virtual mmo, Infinity Paradox. Upon logging in, however, things quickly go awry. He's not the character he intended to create and he doesn't even remember anything past plugging into the game. On top of this, he's dropped into the middle of a raid with no explanation of how he got there. This is but the first of many mysteries he has to figure out in this strange world where everything feels all too real and magic and mecha live side by side.

Lena is a veteran player within Infinity Paradox, but has found herself becoming jaded by some aspects of the game she can't really explain. All of that changes when Kiniun approaches her one day wanting to join her at long last. While over the moon, she has to contend with the fact that the world she's been so engrossed in is not quite the world she sold him on, and knows that at some point she'll have some explaining to do.------------Tags: Sci-Fi, Fantasy, VRMMO, RacingChapter Length: ~3000-5000 wordsI am deeply sorry for the long hiatus. I am finished with the 1st draft of book one. I'd appreciate any feedback you could offer on what works or doesn't as I continue to edit out many of the mistakes I made along the way.

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Status
Hiatus
Year
2023
Author
Masenken

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  • dada11dada22Royal Road
    1.0
    So basically we start off with the main character purchasing a virtual reality implant. Then he does a race and loses. Then it talks about cool epoxy floors and art like it's the height of scifi. Everything happens far too quickly and the characters have no depth. It's all glamour.
    2ed chapter in we get to the game but it's like some other characters and they're in the middle of an adventure, author uses words with no context clues or explanation, like the author mixes explanation and action with zero context and your like what just happened I barely understand any of this.
    I have read tens of thousands of books and fanfics, machine translated webnovels and have only ever had this had hard of a time reading terrible machine translations. In fact I feel like this is someone's translation of something or English is there 2ed or third language.
    It does have an interesting premise, but like the author needs to study novels and the English language.
    I hope the author will improve because mech story's are always fun but as it is.
    Sorry if this is kinda harsh.