The Adventures of Linua Leylan

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Description

There's a secret in the vault at the Observatory. When Linua overhears the other teenagers discussing a plot, little does she realise that this will lead to the discovery of a decades-old crime, and the uncovering of an ancient mystery...

This is a slow burn story, with character development, emotional progression, and a little bit of slice of life.

New chapters will be released on Mondays, Wednesdays and Fridays.

Information

Status
Hiatus
Year
2023
Author
Luminstate

Tags

ADVENTUREFEMALE LEADDRAMASCI-FIMARTIAL ARTSSLICE OF LIFEMYSTERY

Royal Road Stats

Rating
4.9/ 5.0
Followers
12
Views
12,739

Chapters(46 total)

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Community Reviews(7)

  • Florian HannemannRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    The story feels fresh and new, and I thoroughly enjoy reading it. It was a little different than expected, but pleasantly so.
    Story: The narrative starts off rather slow, as the author themselves have warned; it's a bit of a slow burn. For me, that's not a big issue, but those who prefer action-packed, quick-lived LitRpg stories might find it less appealing. On the other hand, individuals who enjoy dense stories with intricate world-building might find it just right.
    Style: The story is presented in the third person perspective, slowly unfolding through the eyes of the protagonist. It's relatively straightforward, with an appropriate balance of exposition, introspection, and dialogue. For my preferences, it could move slightly faster at times, but only marginally.
    Grammar: Nothing needs to be said here. I didn't find a single mistake and it's all edited properly.
    Character: The characters seem believable, and the author does a commendable job of immersing us in the main character's perspective, allowing us to empathize with them. Over the chapters the author also does a good job of unveiling the world around the MC, and making the MC, as well as their background interesting.
    The story is interesting and certainly compels me to keep reading. The author effectively employs hooks and characterization to keep the reader engaged.
    I would recommend it to anyone looking for something different from the usual Royal Road landscape.
  • Cookie MinRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    I am enjoying the story. The characters are believable, especially the main character, Linua. Supporting characters are convincing individuals. Definitely a mystery and I’m not sure what’s going to happen next, so it keeps you reading and waiting for the next instalment. Nicely written in a way that sucks you into the story. Great for teenagers but enjoyable for adults too.
  • DarkodiaRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    "The Mitani and the Map" is a captivating young adult fiction that intricately weaves elements of mystery, adventure, and personal growth. The story unfolds in an observatory, where Linua, a 14-year-old girl, finds herself intrigued by the secretive plans of the Astronomy Club. This curiosity serves as the narrative's driving force, leading Linua into a web of intrigue and discovery.
    The author skillfully portrays Linua's character, capturing her sense of isolation and her struggle with her identity and family expectations. Her character resonates with the universal themes of adolescent self-discovery and the desire to belong. The observatory setting is vividly rendered, creating an atmosphere that is both intriguing and educational.
    The plot thickens as Linua overhears the Astronomy Club's plan to break into the observatory's vault. This plotline introduces an element of suspense and encourages readers to consider ethical dilemmas. The storyline is paced well, with enough twists and turns to keep readers engaged but not overwhelmed.
    One of the story's strengths is its ability to blend the technical aspects of astronomy with the characters' personal journeys. The educational elements are seamlessly integrated, offering readers insights into astronomy and history without detracting from the story's flow.
    In conclusion, "The Mitani and the Map" is a thought-provoking and entertaining read. It strikes a fine balance between adventure and character development, making it a great choice for young readers interested in science and mystery. The book's engaging narrative and relatable protagonist provide a fresh perspective on finding one's place in the world amidst the complexities of adolescence and familial expectations.
  • BluesycobaltRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    I'm enjoying the book tremendously so far. It's very different from the mainstream of not only RoyalRoad, but also what is being published in the tradpub market.
    Grammar - Absolutely nothing to complain about, impeccably edited.
    Story - Very much a slow burn so you have to be ready to indulge yourself in the world for a bit before the first plot hooks start coming. Fortunately, as I mention in the style section, the setting is definitely the story's strong suit. Just know that, unlike a lot of easily-digestible fiction, you aren't getting meaty action scenes until you've eaten your vegetables.
    Style - Straight-forward limited third person with an emphasis on setting as a way to convey the story's themes and concepts. It's reminiscent of 70s-90s SFF in that sense as opposed to action-forward or character-driven webnovels and all but the most up-market Science Fiction. The world reminds me of China Miéville in that respect. The details are also fresh and unique in a way that has me wanting to read more. Especially if you're hobbyist stargazer like myself, the worldbuilding is tantalizing and rewards keeping track of the alien terms thrown your way.
    Character - This category is the hardest to gauge early on in the story, but overall the characters and their actions feel realistic if a bit conventional. The main character is the most interesting of the bunch as the granddaughter of a Henrietta Swan Leavitt-type astronomy prodigy who pushes her into the field, giving her the uniqueness and peculiarities one would expect. This may change going forward, but at least for where I am in the story, the main character is so much more fleshed out that the rest of the world can sometimes feel like they are archetypes waiting for her to interact with.
    Regardless, I highly recommend giving it a read, especially if you are looking for something that strays from the beaten path of both your RoyalRoad generic fantasies as well as your rehashed trad-pub sci-fi. I don't know how well th
  • mariliabonelliRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    “The Mitani and the Map” (Book I) is a more light-hearted adventure, which was what drew me to this story in the first place. It is a fun ride set in a rich world we’ve only caught glimpses of during Book I.
    Style: Narrated in third person from the main character’s point of view, there’s a lot of worldbuilding weaved seamlessly into the story. The descriptions are well done, and the hints of the world itself are absolutely fascinating.
    Story: It takes us a chapter or two to really start getting to know the main character, but it is so worth it. The mystery is hinted at already at the start of the story and unfolds at a good pace. The characters feel real in their quirks, from the teens trying to figure things out to the old people so set in their ways.
    Grammar: It’s very well written. I didn’t notice anything major.
    Character: Linua is a likeable, sensible, and smart teen, who prefers sweeping floors to cataloguing stars and whose main problem in life at the start of the story seems to be her lack of autonomy in her own life choices. Her unfamiliarity with things that were commonplace for her peers was also a standout to me (I loved how it was portrayed). The way she slowly ventures out of her “bubble” was a delight to see.
    If you’re looking for a fun, engrossing story that’s different from the majority of what’s currently out there, I fully recommend you give this a try.
  • I_Eat_GoldfishRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    It’s been some time since I finished reading the second book of these novels. Everything regarding the tone, pacing, characters, grammar is amazing. I’d certainly like to see where this story goes in the future, but I also want to write how it unfolds when I first experienced it. The main actor is a teenage girl. She has teenage girl problems and it is written in such a way that it organically portrays it that way. Fitting in, finding friends, achieving freedom from the security of family are the hardships that come up and it’s engaging to experience this story.
    I do admit I prefer action and drama more. I hope it goes there, but I can write that the way these two novels were presented was very tasteful. The reveal of the setting from fantasy to sci-fi was crazy. The depth and uniqueness of the actors make the whole narrative - believable. It’s something a lot of stories struggle to do.
    Anyway that’s my review. Thanks for reading.
  • GodlyskeletonRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 4.5
    In "The Mitani and the Map," Linua's story of grappling with identity and family pressures unfolds in an observatory, a setting that cleverly ties in educational elements of astronomy. This backdrop enriches her journey, blending adolescent self-discovery and the quest to belong. The narrative strikes a great balance, weaving suspense and ethical dilemmas into a plot that's engaging without being too heavy. It's paced just right, keeping things interesting and thought-provoking.
    The book pretty much has something for everyone, and you can easily find your self growing more intrigued with each chapter. Linua, as the main character, is both authentic and relatable, supported by a cast of well-developed characters. The writing style is smooth and inviting, pulling you into Linua's world and making you root for her.
    if you’re interested science and mystery, as well as those looking for a layered story, then this is right up your alley.