Tales of the Eternal King

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In the vast and treacherous land of Arvendon, darkness stirs as a mysterious Madness begins to corrupt its creatures. Tasked with uncovering the source of this malevolence, Erik—a formidable military leader haunted by a tragic past—and his diverse troop embark on a perilous mission that will test their strength, unity, and resolve.

Erik's journey is one of vengeance and resilience. Once a boy from the town of Iverst, he fled his home after a devastating attack by the Tyrant King Umbra. Now, driven by a fierce desire to protect his adopted sister, Abby, and to avenge his family's suffering, Erik leads his troop with unwavering determination.

Within his ranks are Soulbound warriors, each with unique elemental powers. Grounders command the earth, Tidewalkers harness the water, and Greenkeepers wield nature's might. Together, they face the horrors of Madness, battling twisted creatures and navigating the enigmatic Wylde Wood Sanctuary.

Parallel to the troop's quest, Abby—an Auctian living in the shadows of her heritage—seeks her own path. Resigning from her role at the Arvendon Museum of History, she steps into an uncertain future, her destiny intertwined with the fate of her brother and his comrades.

As the troop delves deeper into the mysteries of Madness, they uncover more than just a physical threat. They confront their own inner demons, forge unbreakable bonds, and strive to save not just their kingdom but their very souls.

New chapters every weekend, as that's when I have time to write.

I have been extra busy with my main job so writing is on a stand still for now, at least until September once a routine has been firmly established.

E-Book and paperback of Volume/ Book 1 have been published on Amazon, New chapters and interludes are available in these copies for those that have read it on here before! Search for Tales of the Eternal King, t.e.k., or d.c. brumfield for best results!

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2024
Author: d.c.brums23564

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.4/ 5.0
Followers: 11
Views: 10,356

Chapters(33 total)

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Community Reviews(10)

FiddlesoupRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Where to begin? The writing is very fluid, easy to understand, and fun to read, always my hallmark for a good story is if the writing is enjoyable. There's a few spots where the style felt more telling than showing, especially when Erik tells the story of How Abby came to be his sister. I feel like breaking up the narration, or showing us the scenes instead of having Erik tell them could have made that story more impactful to the audience. Really my only complaint, because I loved everything else.
The story is amazing so far. The worldbuilding isn't just there as set dressing, each part affects the others whether it is the army or the Auctions or the opening with the wolf going through an awakening, each piece builds to a crescendo of enjoyable story telling that plays off one another.
Characters: Erik and Abby are the stand out stars of this book, Erik is an authentic and relatable protagonist doing his best in a pretty terrifying universe, and Abby is his adopted sister, a being called an auction. Their interactions sell the book.
Grammar: Nothing I encountered kept me from enjoying what I read!
All in all an enjoyable fantasy story!
Century boyRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
First I’d like to apologise for the extremely late review.
Style:
the writing style is quite detailed with a few poetic lines here and there. Over all the descriptions are very well done and easily allow the reader to picture the environment in their mind.
story:
By far my favourite thing about this work is the unique story and the world it takes place in. The idea of the narrators is very interesting and well integrated into the world overall. I also really like the scale of the world and how the story is set in a multiverse setting reminiscent of kingdom hearts, in fact the story overall reminds of kingdom hearts for some reason. Hopefully it will be better than kingdom hearts though lol which I definitely think it will.
Character:
The characters are extremely interesting and likeable and have a distinctiveness to them that I can’t quite put my finger on. That being said I do have one criticism here. I’m not particularly sure why Abby wasn’t immediately introduced as the MC from chapter 1. Don’t get me wrong this isn’t terrible it but can still throw some people off and be jarring. Aside from that there’s nothing else to critique when it comes to the characters and they’re extremely interesting overall. Not a single character seems to fall into an existing trope or cliche that I’m aware of which i believe is truly amazing. Abby is very adorable based on her description especially if she’s the same character depicted on your pfp.
grammar:
criticising your grammar feels a little hypocritical of me lol, but here I go.
There are a few sentences where the same verb is used a bit too much in succession. Other than that the grammar is pretty decent.
aab172Royal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Style: very descriptive and help your imagination work at it's best to picture every scene perfectly.
Some words and phrases are repeated too often, which can be distracting.(I did the same and it's hard to fix, but sometimes it just feels right to use some words more because why not.)
The pacing can be uneven, with some parts feeling rushed while others drag on.
Character: Abby is a unique and intriguing character with a rich backstory. Her appearance and background as an Auctian set her apart,
Nat is also as good but I think that his character can come off as too cryptic, and his intentions aren't always clear. More background on his connection to the world and other characters would help.and all the other charecters feels good and help with the plot of the story,with good back stories.(I only wrote about the charecters which could be improved, the rest are good.)
Story: Great story, I enjoyed reading it, it has a captivating amd intriguing plot, and it has good characters emotions that help with understanding the charecters.Some parts of the story feel rushed, while others drag on, affecting the overall flow.
Grammar:The sentences are generally clear and easy to understand.Some sentences are too long or complex, making them hard to follow. Breaking them into shorter sentences would improve readability.
Overall: it's a great story, and I enjoyed reading it, keep up the good work.
alisha222Royal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
I’m loving the story line and can’t wait to see what Abby does with Nat. There are so many questions about the kingdoms and events going through my head. I’d like to know more background on Erik’s family and how they ended up where they were. Also can’t wait to know more about the kings and why he is like he is
dainxxonRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
STYLE:
Great writing style. Wise choice of words to describe the scenes were used and it was a great help for the readers to imagine the setting and what was happening in the story in general.
STORY:
Interesting plot. The world building was thought thoroughly from the characters, creatures and to the environment—especially about Narrators. I don’t know how many readers have told you (the writer) this, but the creation of Narrators was one of the most unique ideas I’ve come across in novels or mangas I consumed. Please keep it up!
GRAMMAR:
There were a few grammatical errors that can be easily edited, which I know just happened unintentionally with just a few missing words in sentences, and nothing big. I wouldn’t say anything about it further, as English isn’t my native language. But so far, grammar was fine in general, just have to edit them again to fill the missing words.
CHARACTER:
Nat is an interesting character, as having a Narrator role in the story. His set-up was great, I wouldn’t say much about his depth since I’m still on the fifth chapter, but hopefully we can explore his character and inner-mind so the readers can learn to sympathize with him in the future. It’s the same for Abby as well.
Congrats on your story! Keep up the good work!
SKNit3Royal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
It is an interesting book, and the author has some really creative ideas. The plot is a bit more on the complex side, but the author breaks it down really well. I might as well get started with the review...
Style: The style was actually quite enjoyable for me. It looks like some readers have complained about the style in the past. However, I'm certain the author took their time to work on it because the style does not look half bad. The author uses descriptive phrases quite well, and the book has realistic and steady dialogue. The style really immerses you into the story and makes the world come alive.
Story: The story is easily the best part of the story. I should probably not skip to this part right away, but I really love the narrator idea. Not to mention that the narrator has a sense of humor. However, the story aspect truly finds its shine in the world-building. The spirits, the creatures, the domains (If I can call them that)... they're all wonderful. The author deserves 5 stars for this part, IMO.
Grammar: I didn't find any issues apart from a few typos here and there.
Character: The characters are well-described and their backstories and motivations are made clear. I don't really mind this, but I feel like the author could break down their backstories a bit more. After all, being introduced to a whole cast of characters on the get-go can make it a bit confusing. Unless, the character were to each have very unique character moments, that will help readers remember them easier. I like the character Erik and, of course, the narrator Nat.
Overall: This story is great so far. The author has put in a lot of hard-work and I really appreciate it. Keep up the good work.
Said XRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
I may be a little early here – as I think the author intends to wrap up the first volume soon, and will likely take the time afterwards to look over and amend earlier chapters.
Overall: 4/5
I've read up to the first interlude, but do intend to read further when I get more time, as I do think there's an epic story here, beneath the unpolished version we currently have. There's interesting ideas on prophecies – which has its own threads on RR, as well as early indications of who the big bad is, and the potential conflicts ahead, awakenings, the Madness, and so on - all of which create the type of hook I like.
The story captures the tension and urgency of a rather perilous lifestyle in a rather troubled world, and has a really great opening chapter that made me curious of the larger story.
Ultimately, it proved enjoyable thus far.
Style: 4/5
The style is unpolished, but often fun. The author clearly has the story playing out vividly in their mind, but I found it doesn't always translate. The author often uses vivid descriptions to immerse the reader in a world brimming with danger and mystery, but lacked something to keep me engaged at times. There are times, however, where it throws out a great line, or a really apt description and I think to myself 'with a little more polish, this could be a 5/5'.
Story: 4.5/5
The world is genuinely very cool and has been my favorite part. There's enough description, mystery, and context given to provide a decent understanding that this world could be real. But the world tends to take a backseat to the story, which moves at its own pace, and provides exposition that sometimes feels out of place.
Again, I'd have to say that this could easily be a 5/5 if it were more polished. But, editing is much easier than writing, so I suspect that once the author has finished crafting their world, they'll come back and improve all the nitpicks and make the story sparkle.
The powers are also fun, with some extra layers. I'm always a fan of enchante
MrNobodyisHome (E. Anderson)Royal Road
★★★★ 4.0
This story features a girl with tentacles… do what you will with that information.
STYLE
I believe it to be the weakest aspect of the story. The author clearly has a cool vision for this amalgamated world of technology and mysticism, but conveying it… not so much. Repeat uses of terms and words in short intervals can sometimes make the reading dull. Luckily, the author injects some imaginative descriptors that pulls you into the world.
GRAMMAR
It’s okay you can put the bleach down. Typos here and there, but nothing that requires you to cleanse your eyes.
CHARACTERS
I enjoy the characters! Specifically the main two, Abby and Nat present good chemistry and they both have interesting backstories that makes me want to learn more about them, however we were introduced to another slew of characters that I am not sure if we will see again… so it’s hard to judge the cast as a whole.
STORY
Strongest part of the story. The world gets increasingly interesting each chapter, it makes me wish the author would slow down a bit to iron out some details about this strange domain. The amazing story I know this can be is that bonus McDonalds french fry you know is somewhere at the bottom of the brown bag. The potencial is there… it just needs work.
TL;DR: Enjoyed my time with it, but hope will get better! Give it a read!
BendisRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
The great
Writing/grammar - no complaints here, no major or minor issue to take me out of the story. Story structure is consistent, easy to read and follow but I'm not native English so I could be easier to please.
Action/Descriptions - enough action with very descriptive scenes, they make you feel you are there.
The good
World building - Usually i complain nothing happens in the first few chapters but here too much happens the first chapter I had to read twice, we are thrown in with a normal day in the life multiple characters, each with backstory so it could have been done a little slower.
I really liked the narrator idea, something i have never seen done maybe because it can be hard to write, he's basically a God.
Dialogue - fluid and natural, seemed they were real people.
Main char. - From the 6 chapters I've read it's not clear who's the MC. Both Erik and Abby are distinct and easy to root for, but again you are I think too ambitious with already changing perspective unless Abby becomes the MC.
4/5 stars very good start, has potential.
Tales ForgeRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
I have to split this review in two parts as what I have to say about the first chapter is light years away from the rest.
the first chapter is hard to swallow, I felt like reading four character sheets back to back and exited the chapter without remembering any of it. This is way to much information in way to little time.
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The second chapter and onward are carefully crafted and though the world building is constant it is easily absorbable.
Style
The descriptions of the decors are vivid, easing their visualization as I read the dialogues. Most if the early story unfurls through said dialogs.
Characters
Through chapter 1 and 2 we’re introduced to a plethora of characters of which I retained three : Erik, Nat, and Abby. Each of them fells unique and have their own character and motivation.
Abby being a non-human I would have loved an early detailed depiction as my mind switches between an illithid, Davy jones, and Squidwards.
Nat fells like a walking deus ex machina, but I haven’t seen any such use of him so far.
Grammar
Some sentences are long and convoluted, a few more dots could be enjoyable. In the first third of what was written at the time of this review I saw but 1 grammatical mistake.
Story
As we jump character early on the story takes time to start. But we get enough information around chapter 2/3 to have some hints of what could happened.
Keep up the good work, with a better first chapter it would be a 5 (tell me if you ever rework it).