Tales Of The Dark Mage: New Moon| Part I

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Sora lost his whole world at the age of six. His powerful mage war-hero father was killed in battle, and weeks later his caring younger older brother died at the hands of the same killers. Sora's doting and formidable mother Maina, known as the "God of Mages," Maina sent her other three older children to Rowan Academy, meanwhile Maina could only entrust Sora to a royal mage family while she set out on a vengeance-fueled crusade.

There, the mournful Sora met Sophia Accordia, the only child of the Accordia’s. A prideful young royal yearning to become the 'Goddess of all Magic'. Sora befriended an abrasive but lonely Sophia, igniting purpose within his grief, he swore to help Sophia achieve her dream, becoming her loyal guard and right hand.

Under the strict tutelage of Master Benson's training, Sora and Sophia bonded deeply. On Sora's 8th birthday, he gained a grimoire containing the dark magic spirit Rin, who promised immense power - at a price.

As they relentlessly trained for nine years removed from his tragedy, Sora and Sophia attempted Rowan Academy's grueling entrance trials. If accepted, their journey to make Sophia the goddess of all magic would truly begin—Sora as her faithful protector and avenger, Sophia as his purpose and light. But first, they have seven days of intelligence and combat exams, if they prove themselves through Rowan's trials, then they shall be worthy.

*Author noteI'm about to change chapters 1-30 since I didn't flesh out the mc enough or didn't give the proper backstory.

Be ready for the first volume. Coming out sometime in 2025 or 2026. The first volume is going to be different in regards of the story and the style of writing. Looking back on the early chapters, I want to do things a lot different when I first created this story.

*Author NoteThis fiction is a participant of theWriTEr's pledge.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2018
Author: Dee Williams

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.0/ 5.0
Followers: 157
Views: 137,248

Chapters(126 total)

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Community Reviews(8)

Luffy MonkeyRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Let me address some things before I get to the review. @MURPHYYSLAW'S review is invalid. He only read 12 chapters. The grammar is not horrible. If you kept on reading it. He said that his editors are busy. And this is the rough draft. So, the grammar may be off time to time. Everything will be fixed in the first volume. He's getting published in a week or so. Your review has no purpose. It's not constructive criticism. You are making fun of the author for no reason.
If you wanted to say it then private message him or leave comments on chapters so he can fix it. You are not telling him where are the problems at. Next time you do a review for this. Make sure you are not being rude. You can state the bad things and tell him where to improve on. Tell him what chapters can be fixed. I'm asking you this. Please read all of the chapters. If you read two more chapters. Your review would've been different.
Sorry, I get upset when people be rude to authors in their reviews. I admit this. He said, " I would suggest giving yourself an off day once a week and just edit next week's chapters." If you giving a not so good review please read of the story then give your judgment and advice to any person. Now to the review!
The story is anime. All of the characters act like anime characters. The romance for this story is kinda funny and also sweet for these love birds. Our main protagonist doesn't fall to a cliche MC. He's his own person. He talks back to the tsundere of the story and doesn't fall for her lies. He's is so alpha male. The first ten chapters have tons of romance with a sprinkle of action. If you don't like romance only action. Keep reading when you read chapters 14 and 15. And hopefully, chapter 24 and 25. If you like a story that the MC has a demon or whatever. This is the one you've been looking for. I won't say much. But the spirit is so funny to me. The MC can't rely on the spirit. It's literally like dealing with the devil.
Our main casts of characters are cli
Mr.NaraRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Let me say this. When I first read this story. I thought it was just going to be another dark story for no reason. But the story is light-hearted and it has its dark moments. The romance is not a slow-burn! If I had a nickel for every time, someone, use will they won't they romance sub/plot. If would be rich as Bill Gates.
The characters feel fresh. The only troupe for a character is Sophia. She became unique in a way. She's funny how she reacts to Sora. And here's another funny thing she can't use her native accent (British) when she's talking to Sora. Or say his name. That's funny to me for some reason.
The writing is solid and the action is good. It just first-person story that has some fun.
I like the Mystery of Nyomi and Valencia. It will keep you guessing. I won't say my theory but I will leave in the comment section where it belongs. And I also like Rin. She's one of the most interesting characters in the story. Because she has so much potential. I want to her backstory. Normally, I let the author know before I'll do the review but I decided to do this when I felt like it. The pacing is good.
I have so many questions for this story. But you are on the fence on reading this. Read it all the way. I promise you this. You will be entertained. And Those who stopped reading it. Pick it back up. And catch up with me and the other people.
But overall very good story and characters. If you like romance you will love it. If you like it in a school setting then this is for you. The school feels like Hogwarts and the My Hero Academia School. If you like anti-hero this is for you. I can tell that the author is building up this anti-hero.
Before I'll go. I would like to thank the author and his team. I may not know who they are. But they do one heck of a job. Thank you for the story.
Ms.QueenRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I thought this story honestly is going to be boring. But I was very wrong. A friend showed me this. I was bored at the time so I decided to read it. The first chapter was good. Then the second chapter. Had dramatic turn, I didn't expect the romance to be that good and let alone funny. Then I read the third. fourth, fifth, sixth, seventh, eighth, ninth, tenth, eleventh, twelveth, thirteenth, fourteenth, fifteen. I couldn't stop reading. If you read the whole story and you catch up. You wish you could start over. I love the character's interaction. One of my favorites is Valdis. Because when he introduces himself, he caught my attention. His summary of his backstory seems to be very good. Please don't mess it up! The first action fight scene. I will admit. I thought he was going to mess up the fight scene. Because everything was going so well. I read tons of stories. But when an author messes it up. Because of the lack of experience. He made a good fight scene and he added a cool transformation scene. Those who want to read it's in chapter 14. The transformation itself was so interesting. And it reveals something that expanded the world building by a lot. If you still reading this review please binge-read it right now. I know it won't be the number one story. But it's a good story. From a young author. He still needs help so everybody give him advice. Oh, I forgot about Valencia and Nyomi. The mystery behind them is so interesting. Please read it and leave a theory. Because I'm trying to find out who is Nyomi to Sora! Go read now!
PirateQueenRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Before I get through this review. Let me say this. @Cookiepro and @MURPHYSLAW, are terrible reviewers. At least @MURPHYSLAW had the right idea for his review, he did not do an advanced review. But the review itself, let me be frank, was not good because he put his own feelings into his review. When you do an objective review, you don't say that your two-year-old neighbor is a better author or whatever. You point things out. Give the author what should he fix, because he's not the same author back then. He's a better author than that. The revised version of chapter one is just a patch job to fix the disjointed flow of the first chapter. That is not the final draft. I'm not going to say that they didn't have a point. But do they realize that this story for RR? Is a rough draft. He's looking at the responses to see if anything is wrong with the story, story-wise. He has three editors right now. They are trying to make the final draft perfect for volume one perfect. He's trying to try different styles of writing. The one he likes the most is in the current chapters. He's will change everything but it takes time. Since he does daily.
Order66SithLordRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
I had a lot of fun reading this story. Even though there were problems but being worked on. Read this story in your spare time. I had fun, be ready for mistakes in almost in every chapter except chapter 30 and up.
8urnulsRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
Your first chapters should, and always will, be the most important chapters of a new book. The first dozen chapters don't reflect later chapters, but fixing them to a readable standard should be concidered a priority. I read more out of boredom but i don't think I'll continue as the book just doesn't suit my tastes. Other than that the characters can easily bring about emotions making them feel more real even if the lack somewhere. The pacing felt a little weird at first but i got it quickly enough. Have fun, reading.
Wille1412Royal Road
★★★ 3.0
TLDR : If you can get through the first chapter, TRY the second and see how far you go, nothing to lose anyways.
OVERVIEW
For all the wrong I find in the writing of this novel, and for all the "shit" I give in the comments of the chapters, I really can't bring myself to hate his. I actually like the characters, not that I know much about them but either way.
I feel like this novell, as it stands right now, that every chapter isn't even a quarter finished, there's so much that COULD be added to make everything so much better(that is excluding the errors in writing). Since there's practically nothing that gets described I feel like this is just a more expanded mind map for the author to use to create a story.
Let's start with the positive, the characters, I like our main characters, but here's the catch, I don't actually know anything about them, still they are enjoyable to watch.
Story, it exists, why? No idea, it just does, nothing is explained, no motives, no nothing. We have an overview of what our characters wan to achieve, but we still don't know why, they just do.
Style, the author has seemingly gone through different ways of writing throughout the first 10 or so chapters of the story, and I believe that the author seems to have found a way to write that suits them the best(from their previous writing).
Grammar, it's bad, like, really, really bad. Not unreadable, for most, but still, it's bad. Now, most of the words themselves aren't actually grammatically wrong, it's just the way they are used in the novell that is okay at best and makes me want to gauge my eyes out at worst, there are many times where things like "Said me" or "Asked me" is used, but there are also other problems that you will definitely notice if you have a basic grasp of the English language.
The story definitely doesn't deserve five stars in my opinion, if only because the writing itself can't express enough to warrant such high ratings. People saying that the grammar can be excused because
MurphysLawRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
I really wanted to like this novel, but the grammar and sentence structure is mindbogglingly bad. I understand if English isn't your first language, but my next door neighbor s two year old has better structure. From some of the comments it appears this is a second novel for you, I would suggest giving yourself an off day once a week and just edit next week's chapters. Only made it til around chap 12, but the part of the story i could make out seemed good.