System of the Void

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Description

Power Calls From The Void

One moment Zaro was grinding levels in a game, the next he's standing in a cave with void energy coursing through his veins and a legendary class that creates more questions than answers: Voidwalker.

Now he's got void energy crackling at his fingertips, a system AI that is evolving and a destiny tied to ancient scrolls of power. But in a world where corrupted crystals drive monsters mad and beings with bendy morals hunt for forbidden knowledge, having unique abilities paints a target on your back.

With his newfound family - a hat-obsessed mage who thinks sarcasm is a spell component, an elf ranger haunted by her past, and an orc warrior who treats combat like performance art - Zaro must master himself and the system before it consumes him.

The system offers seemingly unlimited potential, but every power comes with a price. And in this world, the darkness is watching - and evolving.

This is a rough draft! I am writing and editing as I go. It started in first person and was changed to 3rd person. It has been a learning process.

I will be publishing chapters as I can. Life has been crazy lately . I have 50 written and I'm writing weekly.

Editing takes so much time.

I'll update as I move forward.

Thanks for reading.

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Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2024
Author: SaintJoe303

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Rating: 3.8/ 5.0
Followers: 220
Views: 25,783

Chapters(45 total)

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Community Reviews(8)

Ragu808Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
As an avid LitRPG reader, I approached System of the Void with the usual mix of hope and skepticism that comes with discovering a new series. What I found was a refreshingly competent take on familiar tropes that manages to breathe new life into the genre.
From the opening chapters, the author wastes no time throwing us into the action. There's no lengthy exposition dump or tedious character background - we learn about our MC, Zaro, through his actions and choices. The pacing is snappy, and the system integration feels natural rather than forced.
One of the standout elements is the AI system's personality. Rather than the usual emotionless interface, we get a snarky companion that provides both useful information and comic relief. The system's evolving voice styles (from Samuel L. Jackson to Jack Sparrow) add a unique flavor to the traditional system trope.
The world-building is particularly strong, especially in the city of Everlight. The author has created a living, breathing environment filled with memorable locations like Ol' Jeb's flapjack stand and the Rusty Clam tavern. The attention to detail in describing guard patrols, merchant interactions, and city politics makes the setting feel authentic and lived-in.
Character development shines through the supporting cast. Ramrod the Orc is a particular highlight - his combination of brutal strength and unexpected wisdom provides both comedy and depth. The void family dynamic between the characters feels earned rather than forced, and each member brings something unique to the team.
The author's handling of combat scenes deserves special mention. The fights are well-choreographed and easy to follow, with the system mechanics enhancing rather than interrupting the flow of action. The void abilities are creative and well-thought-out, offering tactical depth beyond simple power progression.
While there are some minor grammar issues and formatting notes in certain chapters, these are clearly marked for revision and don't
CIGAPRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This story is somewhat of a standard LitRPG, but that's not necessarily bad. We're thrown into a world that used to be a game, which makes the system aspect of the story much more understandable and fluid. The plot is simple but straightforward, with the characters making up the simplicity with their vast characteristics and interactions. Speaking of, they all feel very alive, with no character being necessarily too one dimensional. Nobody is labelled as just a jerk or a saint, but everyone feels like something of a very human behaviour. The system, too, has quite the voice, something I enjoy seeing within Lit RPGs. It helps add to the mystery as well. Why is MC here? What is the system? Why does it have a voice? Is it just for our amusement, or something more? The worldbuilding, too, feels very alive, with interesting locations and names that befit the game like environment the story takes place in. Finally, the stats are continuous and constantly provided, which you may greatly enjoy if you're a big fan of this genre. It definitely gives it the RPG part of LitRPG.
Overall, I'd definitely recommend checking this out!
CardocRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
If you want to read action and monster killing, this is for you! Levels, stats, skills, loot, sassy system, strong MC with cool class? Yep, everything checks out.
On a more serious note, I really like the fight scenes from chapter 6 onward. They are well described and well thought out, never seeming boring or falling into irrelevance, which I do think is one of the most important parts for a litRPG full of action like this one. There are/were some details/typos at the two first chapters, but it doesn't really matter that much, and it completely goes away by chapter 3, so don't worry.
One thing that I consider underrated in this story and haven't seen other people talking about are the environmental descriptions. The places where Zaro and his crew explore are often times as cool as the fights themselves, being very well thought out. The dungeons, and the mobs are also interesting, which is another very important aspect for a good action litRPG.
Last but not least, the stats! They are detailed and yes, they do go up! And yes, it is very satisfying. The system is one of the best parts of this book, in my opinion.
So all in all, check this out if you're up to some action!!! TY Saintjoe for the book!
TheHofferRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
System of the Void is PERFECT if you're a number-crunching LitRPG junkie. There is an interesting class for the MC as well as room for the abilities to grow and develop in interesting ways.
The writer clearly has done their research and knows a lot about the LitRPG genre. It doesn't do a ton of new things yet, but that seems to be the point. This series is for true lovers of the genre who need their fill.
A sassy System and a fun party of adventurers are in store for anyone who decides to take the plunge with this story with a sinister change happening to the world of Atheria that seems intricately connected with the MC.
GO CHECK THIS OUT IF YOU LOVE LITRPG!
Orion's HeraldRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
The story of a new void wielder in the wild—not fully, anyway. There is a city nearby. He is a seasoned professional with many years of grinding, both levels and ore, under his belt. Not that he minds too much—I think he just values the experience of it.
But on to the actual story: Our MC is launched into a new world filled with witchcraft and wizardry. Well, more swords and bolts, in actual fact. With a system, always there to give him achievements for everything he does, some of it mundane, some of it quite impressive. I haven’t found the theme yet. But it’s him exploring this cave and then moving on to explore the world and get up to some hijinks. I won’t say more in case I spoil too much. But so far, I like it. I don’t see the driving plot just yet, but it has great potential. You can feel that the author cares about the world he is trying to build and wants to show it when he can.
Next the style: It’s a nice one. Though, if I had to say one gripe I have, it would be the abundance of metaphors. In some places, they land well, but a lot of them left me a little confused and wondering what it meant. I learnt quite recently that it’s much better to be specific than using a metaphor. If you are going to use one, make sure it serves a purpose. Other than that, it was fine.
Characters, characters: We got a few of them early on, and I like that. I feel that stories can benefit from having more than one character on the screen. It helps build the world and gives someone a back and forth to play with. But one thing I will say is that the dialogue in this felt a bit unnatural in places. Not bad, just distracting at times. But writing is hard, and I have the same problem at times.
Grammer: I have no complaints. I didn’t notice any issues, and it was all good.
EricsonRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
So I'm going to get the obvious out of the way. I liked the story. The setup is a classic one that we would come to expect within the genre and the author does a good job a allowing us a glimpse into the new world that the MC has to deal with.
There are some very well written parts like the idea, that the MC is at times still not entirely sure if he's in an different world or somehow in a new and amazing game despite knowing that his own hardware can't support it. It's a fresh take on the MC just somehow coming to the immediate conclusion that this must be a new word.
The tone used by the system is snarky and sarcastic and I loved every word of it. It's consistent in both letting the readers know what the MC needs to do, and gently kicking the MC in the groin. It really works well.
I personally don't care for detailed stats, but I must point out that the author provides us with detailed stat blocks as the MC progresses, and I'm sure that somewhere there's a ridiculous spreadsheet to keep track of it all.
There are two main points I would like to suggest to the author to consider altering or improving. This is intented as constructive criticism, since again, I really liked the story and the world.
While the gaming culture references are well written and appropriate where they are, they tend to fall flat when they come from the narrator, which is the case quite often. When they come from the MC's internal thoughts, they work nicely, which I would strongly encourage to consider.
The second point is that there are times where the author has a nice well thought out scene, but rushes through without giving the reader to fully enjoy the scene. There could be longer descriptions to allow us to feel the world. Two examples would be the MC giving food to the starving family, and when the MC meets the adventuring trio, he magically knows their names without there being proper introductions.
If the author we're to consider these points, I'm sure his story will get all the tract
13 SparksRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
This story is an action packed LitRPG. My favorite character so far has been the sassy system, who probably wants Zaro to live.
The stats are easy to understand, especially if you are familiar with LitRPG. If you are looking for a story that never stands still with plenty of action and an interesting adventuring party you have found it.
I left off a star because it needs some work on the grammar side of things.
AllAverageAverageRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Story-wise it is alright and decent enough. Up to Chapter 9 it is in a decent shape but from chapter 10 onwards it gets very rough. Chapter 10 and onwards seem like drafts rather than actual chapters, a lot of repeated text and missing quotation marks around dialogue and miss matching names of weapons and skills like how the Orc is said to have a hammer in earlier chapters but afterwards its referred as axe or the void skin skill bouncing b/w skin & armor.
Chapter numbers missing from chapter 10 onwards as well.
Also the System Text is just plain text which severely breaks immersion.
I'm dropping it for now and will come back to it if & when the author decides to fix the issues (I will also update the review at that time)