System gone rogue

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Description

On planet Gaia, every country is assigned a system. When a new country is born, so is a new system. The system receives a mentor to teach it how to do it's job properly.Hey! Listen to me!The system ensures that everything is functioning properly.Sire! We have an emergency!Inhabitants get assigned the right classes.Not that class!Dungeons are of the appropriate level.I said to start with a low level one!And everyone is happy.Why!?! God! Why did you give me this class?Except maybe in one country, where the system just does whatever it wants. The country is thrown into chaos and inhabitants have to figure out how to get things to work, when the system is doing everything wrong.

Information

Status
Hiatus
Year
2022
Author
KierTrevaali

Tags

FANTASYMAGICCOMEDYGAMELITMULTIPLE LEAD CHARACTERSPORTAL FANTASY / ISEKAIREINCARNATION

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Rating
3.9/ 5.0
Followers
18
Views
8,321

Chapters(21 total)

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Community Reviews(1)

  • QuadrumRoyal Road
    ★★★ 3.0
    While the idea of the MC being a system isn't new, this story brings a new perspective to the whole thing.
    Why would a system have to choose the best possible outcome, why can it not do so randomly?
    While all this is good and all, there is one big issue currently still present in every chapter: Style!
    What do I mean with that? Well, that is simple to explain.
    No quotation mark are present anywhere, making it impossible to discern when someone is talking, when their sentence is complete, and when the other person in the room begins speaking. It is not possible to see who speaks first, only possible with the context. When does the narrator stop, and speech begin? It is hard to say.
    Huge paragraphs filling up the entire screen. This happens irregularly, with some parts of a chapter actually being nicely formatted, but sometimes the author just seems to... forget this? This makes it hard to read.
    Grammar is solid, I have not noticed any huge issues with that yet
    Characters have different personalities, but seem a bit one-dimensional. This could be a side effect of missing quotation marks, though.
    All in all, a good concept and execution, but with some huge design flaws making reading unnecessarily hard. 3/5 stars.