System Breaker: Fine, I Guess I'll Be The Demon Lord Then!

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Description

WORKING ON A REWRITE.

This story will be marked as dropped until the rewrite is complete.

Thank you for your understanding.

Lua never asked to be the Demon Lord. But after being murdered by her own parents, she isn't left with much of a choice. Waking up in a forest full of powerful monsters and finding herself pitted against the suspicious World Order System, Lua must embrace her new role to survive.

Now barreling through her second life with nothing but an eclectic group of allies, a lot of trauma, and a pointy stick, Lua is doing her best to make the world a better place—even if it means becoming its enemy in the process.

What to expect:

- A LitRPG system that is frequently ignored by the MC- Redefining the term "Murder Hobo"- A hint of yuri- Shenanigans- Actual consequences for people's actions

Whatnotto expect:

- Complicated stats- Hard numbers- Ethics

Cover art by Kart Studio

Information

Status: Cancelled
Year: 2024
Author: ArcanePigeon

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.4/ 5.0
Followers: 2,397
Views: 583,182

Chapters(83 total)

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Community Reviews(10)

sigtyrGullmyntRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Many people would be willing to pay for advanced chapters. The story is fun and the shenanigans are hilarious. Cliffhangers are mean and leave people with wanting more. Excited to see where this story goes and how the little science experiment cause the universe to descend into utterly hilarious chaos
AllThingsPickledRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I think this book has really shined so far at managing the overall tone. The stakes are high enough that you are invested, but there is enough levity in the character interaction to keep it from feeling too grim. The author does a great job at shifting between tones for the most part; the serious points feel like they're given the respect they deserve from the character and the lighthearted moments don't come at odd times that make the characters seem out of place.
Also, I'd say there is more than a hint of yuri. More like a healthy side dish.
AppleFlowerRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
System breaker is everything wrong with isekai turned to 11, and it somehow makes it all work in a comedic package full of twists and shenanigans.
It starts out with your usual "God decided to reincarnate me", but in doing so it fused 2 people, fusing both their skills, memories, personality and knowledge into one - the first few sentences of the book and we are already up to a unique twist.
The trend with skill and ability is always aggressively up, but it is intertwined by both losses and wins, happy and sad moments, the comedy gives way to tragedy and they never feel out of place. I've both laughed out loud and read it in terror, so it manages to capture both ends equally well and it doesn't undermine them.
The only negative is that I don't have a time machine to read it all right now
TLDR;
System Breaker does everything wrong with isekai in a tasteful and fun, refreshing way, it's simple to read, the twists are fun and with every chapter, I want to read it more than I wanted before
CalcifinaRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I'm going to be honest I didn't have hopes to start but this has so far been intelligent and a perfect level of snark and sincerely kind. I am only on chapter 12 but I have devoured this fic with laughs and smiles aplenty! I hope everyone enjoys it as much as I am,😁.
Lich King RenjaRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Enjoying the read so far, been reading on a non-profile unit and enjoying the read so far!
Decent pace and energy, while being relatively direct tone.
I do not quite like the paragraph style in early chapters, but the story is well written and interesting even with a small pet peeve.
LucindaRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I'm Loving the series so far! Typically I prefer a full on system UI, however, the way this has been written doesn't bother me in the slightest and is just as great in my opinion. I look forward to seeing what else is going to be cooked up down the line!
PrinceofLightningRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This is a really fun story, I love a female protagonist who sets themself against a world that hates them. You get your bad-assery, your cursing, your angst, and your true and deep friendship, all with some really excellent writing. I really enjoy the twists on what it means to have power over Light as well. New favorite story on here!!
Aleah CatRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This story has a lot of fun aspects. Between the magic, the system, the factions and the lore? It does a lot of interesting things really well.
The only hangup I have is on the punctuation. Commas are very often missing. The author loves using certain asides mid-sentence. The word “however” is often inserted into sentences, and it should have a comma before and after it, but never does. As an editor, it bugs me, but it doesn’t ruin the story for me.
As with more than three quarters of authors on this platform… separate your damn predicates!! This isn’t hard… separate your predicates with “and” or a comma or some other separating word. A lot of authors make this mistake, so again, this is an editor thing.
Talking about the story, I like the characters and the interesting diversity in powers. It isn’t a harshly defined system of magic with specific elements or categories, which could be harder to write, but the author does a solid job of having people do some creative things with the broad magics involved.
I tie characters together with the grammar issues. Every character uses the same language. Every character inserts asides into their phrasing in the same way. This is a tough thing to nail down. I like making notes of verbal ticks of different characters when I write. Referring to those notes helps make sure different characters are firmly their own entity and never blend together. I only noticed this because every character made the same issues with commas in their dialogue, which highlighted that they’re using a lot of the same verbal choices.
In the grand scheme of things, all my issues with the series come down to small things I only notice as an editor. None of this ruins the story in any way. Nothing is ever perfect, and if these are the improvements on the table, that’s a good thing.
System Breaker is a fun read with lots of crazy magic shenanigans! Overall, the story is a refreshing read. Good for a break from darker psychological series out there.
Blank-nameRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Great story. Super interesting system and "system". Highly recommend to anyone wanting a unique take on litrpg as a whole.
My only complaint is honestly that There's not more chapters. I'd buy the hell out of a patreon personally. That and some character tropes are sorta annoying with characters other than the main two but that's easy to ignore, especially since there's quite a few stories on this site that are MUCH worse in that regard.
But yeah I'm enjoying it. Again, would recommend.
readingstuffwijw2Royal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
The writing is very well polished and the pacing is good.
Storyline wise, the reader is about as clueless about the world as the main character is. Its used in an interesting way and brings a bit of immersion to it.
The "helper" character is a bit obnoxious. I understand that it is used for satire, but it comes off as really abrasive at times.
Overall, I feel like the story should be viewed as a parody of the genre instead of another numbers goes up story. Great read so far if you want a fresh perspective.