Surrender, Surrender

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Description

The crew of a colony ship find themselves stranded far from home onboard an alien vessel after their sister vessel is destroyed. Salvador Vigino, an engineer with a troubled past, finds himself and his friends navigating a web of traitors, questions and relationships as they grow to learn about their new hosts. As he attempts to understand the unusual alien he has been partnered with, more and more secrets regarding the mission come to light. Can Sal uncover the players of the violent game he has become an unwitting pawn in whilst closing the wounds of his heart?

Information

Status: Completed
Year: 2025
Author: AurumVerd

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.1/ 5.0
Followers: 10
Views: 10,884

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PuddlemuckRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
The story paints the picture of a sci-fi future world. It's fairly generic, and boils a lot of things down to simple cookie-cutter factions, but plays with the trappings of the genre fairly well, to create something somewhat unique.
In this sci-fi world, we get our cast of characters. A quirky rag-tag band of engineers, and a warrior seeking lost honor. They are all fairly archetypal, mostly just having one defining character-trait (the delinquent one, the young one, the Big Happy guy, etc). The story does make an attempt at giving the characters some degree of character-arcs, most of them feel sudden and lurching, rather than as a natural progression of the story. Better than bottom-tier, but not by much.
These characters play out a first contact story. At first, it almost seems like a grounded, if slightly over-optimistic story of suspicion and acceptance: it's actually rather good starting off. But then the story tries to raise the stakes, and in doing so, poorly emulates other stories. Dramatic sabotage and intrigue plots get brought up, made center-stage, and then abruptly put on pause. The story diverts all its focus into doing a romance story, and makes it so ham-handedly over dramatic that it actively hurts the characterization of all of the characters involved. Characters are ret-conned and re-written to be more dramatic. The story abruptly unpauses, and suddenly the story is trying to wrap up all its plot threads at once, unharmoniously. It's a mess, quite frankly.
And all of the story is written with lacking grammar/spelling. Nearly every single chapter has at least 2 obviously misspelled or misused words. It's usually pretty easy to figure out what the author meant to write, but it's enough to be distracting.
Overall, I greatly appreciate the author's attempts at this type of story, and enjoyed the idea of the world they were trying to build. But I feel like the author needs much more practice writing stories, both to get better with writing error-free,