Supreme Wars

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Description

Four hundred years ago, in a world of magical and non magical humans, Eight powerful wizards wanted to change the world, but fate said otherwise and they were stopped by merciless non magic humans. They had to join hands and put their powers into a scared pendant, so that one day in the future, someone who is worthy enough would have all their powers combined and make the world the way they wanted to make it as.

Three non-ordinary people, Moses, Agnes and Dave were forced to fix the mistakes made by eight sorcerers almost four hundred years ago. As a descendant of the sorcerers sought to complete the mission which they failed to do. Will the trio be able to stop the evil, or will they fail and cause the destruction of the earth as a whole.

Information

Status: Completed
Year: 2025
Author: Davidrites

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Rating: 1.8/ 5.0
Views: 2,412

Chapters(21 total)

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J M T HallRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
I think you spent a lot of time telling, not showing. I appreciate you opening with the ethnicity of the original - idk, where they thieves? - i dont think it was necessary. 1, it never came back up again, race literally had nothing to do with your story, and two you didn’t describe it, just kinda said it.
scenes just materialized around the characters and magic seems to be a catch all, like if Agnes making wall disappear. And in her, why would the woods kick her out after 18?? Make that make sense.
your pacing was ok, but you skipped a lot of opportunity to add crisp and emersive detail which could have pushed you from novella to novel. I get revealing as you go, but the magic was never really grounded, and places were just kinda spaces with obejects and people in them.
i thought your story was original, i would have loved more traditional elusions to Nigeria and culture because remember, when you have black people on the cover and open distinguish races you have to assume POC are going to read it, give us what we want. We want culture.
In each chapter limit the perspective t one person, this whole “im the all knowing narrative” makes it hard to follow the plot because youre too busy trying to explain the inner workings. If you open with a character, that character is who’s perspective we should until scene change or chapter change give a reason for another perspective. I know the story is about all of them, but make it digestible.