Supreme Formation Immortal Sovereign
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Falling under the Heavenly Tribulation, Ascending Celestial Oalur Kang finds that he's back in the past. Watch him pursue the Heavenly Path of Formations and rise to the peak of the Immortal Path!
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Hello, this is F-Rank! This is my take on writing cultivation stories. Though I'm sure nobody cares, the intent behind this story was focused on creating a more or less logical cultivation system. I read several stories where the mc transmigrated to a cultivation world (not calling names to avoid unnecessary angst) and was able to completely break the cultivation system and the logic of the world because they had the power of science on their side and were able to think more logically than everybody else. Despite the fact that some characters in those stories were older than the scientific method of thinking and even the human civilization as we know it and the whole society was older than our human race. So I decided to write a story where things about cultivation make sense (as far as a magical world full of super magical people can make sense), so here we are. I don't know if I will be able to fulfil this purpose but I hope that the story will end up enjoyable.
Can also be considered a prequel for my other story "Wasn’t my new life in a magical world supposed to be easy?" but has very little overlapping content and can be read as a stand alone story. Also available on Scribble Hub.
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2020
- Author
- F-rank Human
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 4.0/ 5.0
- Followers
- 29
- Views
- 16,017
Chapters(24 total)
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Community Reviews(1)
- ZethinWritesRoyal Road★★★★ 3.5I enjoyed the premise of the story. "Supreme Formation Immortal Sovereign" deals with more Eastern cultural norms which is a difficult task if you aren't well-accustomed to it.
Unfortunately, I think that becomes the story's biggest flaw. The prologue and first chapter hit you with a wave of information, some of it dismissed as soon as the next sentence, not to be discussed again. For example, what a "Core Formation junior" is or how it pertains to our lead character.
The second chapter featured an interesting style choice in a POV change during the chapter. I can appreciate the stylistic choice, but I feel the perspective of the Old Man could have been written to flow smoother. It seemed to be an odd mix of first person and third-person subjective. I think if the pronouns were fixed it would have been a lot easier to read.
In the third chapter, we swap back to our first-person POV of the lead character. It also suffers from the same problem as the first chapter, with a large introduction of terms and relationships that don't get the exposition they need.
I think if the story spent a bit more time on the explanations of what all of the terms being thrown at the reader mean and how they relate, with some tuning of the grammar, a good story is definitely there.