Should've listened to my husband: Trapped in another world [ LitRPG / Isekai ]

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Working on a new book.

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/136244/spheria-chronicles-book-one-idiot-trapped-in-another

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Alice Raven is 33 year old woman working as an ER Doctor at her local hospital. She is happily married to Tim, an avid gamer and sci-fi movie/show fanatic. Alice never had a lot of interest in such things, so she usually didn't pay much attention to anything her husband said about them.

One day, on her way to work, she got mysteriously teleported to a new world full of magic and adventure. She quickly finds out that this new world, called Sfiraz, has a lot of similarities to the games her husband likes to play. Alice now regrets not listening closely enough to her husband when he talked about his games.

She has to figure out a way not only to go back to her world, but to actually survive in this new one.

New chapters on T & TH. 2 chapters a week. Chapters average 1000 words.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2024
Author: Treze

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Rating: 3.9/ 5.0
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Community Reviews(8)

WinterwispRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Overall, I'm reviewing this as an author's first attempt at creating a story, and the potential for growth I'm seeing in the writing and the passion I feel has gone into this work. It's unpolished, yes, and there is much work ahead of the author, but I believe they have what it takes to improve into the rating I'm giving them. If you'd like to follow the journey of an author as they work on their craft and settle on their style, this is a story worth reading.
We meet Alice on a day like any other, at home with her husband before going to work. She's suddenly pulled into a fantasy world, where she has to fend for herself and find a way home.
Style: The prose is clear and the formatting is good. The author needs to work on descriptions and showing the story, rather than telling it, but the clarity of language is a large part in why I believe the author has potential.
Story: It's a classic trope of getting summoned to another world, but with the twist that Alice knows absolutely nothing about videogames--that was her husband's passion. I like the subversion of the trope, but Alice has it way too easy for me to fully buy into it. More adversity, even in the small things, need to be introduced.
Character: Alice is fine as an MC. A little to easy to adapt to everything, but as a first attempt, it's good. I like that there is both a clear external and internal conflict to her, although it's mostly told conflict, and rarely shown.
Grammar: My measuring stick for grammar is whether I was distracted by it while reading. I wasn't, so it gets full marks.
Genghis_SeanRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Just read the first chapter as it came out and it seems great, no spelling mistakes and the system didn't seem too complicated. Otherwise it has an interesting premise and I am excited to see where this goes! But, I feel it didn't flesh out her life before her transfer enough, a chapter or two extra would have been nice but it's not too much of a gripe.
Trinity C. ParkRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Your story is a refreshing and engaging take on the isekai genre. Alice’s practical yet humorous personality shines through, making her a relatable and endearing protagonist. The balance between her emotional connection to Tim and her curiosity about the new world adds heart to the adventure. The pacing flows smoothly, the world-building feels effortless, and the game mechanics blend naturally into the story. It’s an immersive, charming beginning that promises depth, excitement, and emotional warmth throughout.
BorinquenRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Style: The style so far for me is good. It could use some editing, but so far, it can be read, and the story can be understandable
Grammar: So far, I haven't seen any errors and if there are they arent notisable
Story: Its good. Instead of a cliché isekai story, we get one with a different formula, from a MC that does not know how to navigate a fantasy world with an RPG formula. The story is on its infancy but I like it, i recommend it since the author is doing something in his story. The magic system is easy to undestand and the system that it has is a simple one. I hope that the author expands more the lore of the world and that the mc has more adventures on it.
Characters: The man's character is good. She's believable, sometimes a little goofy but likable.
In the end, the story is good. I will follow the story and see how it goes.
SRadioactiveRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Overall - Interesting story from a fresh perspective, I enjoyed it and could relate to Alice in a lot of ways. Would recommend for fans of lightly humorous LitRPGs!
Style - Alice’s adjustment to the new world is gradual throughout the first few chapters which is nice. There are small things that could be played around with to make the story more believable, such as the character’s work life prior to switching worlds, her reaction to the first creature she fights (I don’t feel like mine would be to kick it and do backflips but I could be nitpicking) but I do not feel adjusting the score based on this because in fantasy anything and everything is allowed to happen. Would just be better for readability.
Story - The story is entertaining, I have never read this scenario before and it is neat to think of an unsuspecting wife instead of her husband who plays videogames to end up in this situation. The enemies she faces are interesting; I especially enjoyed that the first one was a squirrel. The author has a great sense of humor throughout. I also enjoyed the way her past life is tied into her newfound class skills, and the way the new world is set up that would be fairly easy to navigate for someone like her.
Grammar - There are quite a few repetitive words, but the author had been made aware of this from chapter 1 and it feels like this feedback was taken and applied to later chapters. Full disclosure, I listened to every chapter via e-reader so spelling mistakes were not as obvious.
Characters - Our main gal is Alice. She is fairly relatable as someone who works (worked, I suppose is more appropriate) full time and her world is split between her work and family. One is falls behind the other at times, so it feels like her being whisked away to another world is a sort of penance. My only gripe is her thoughts and actions do not seem realistic for someone waking up in a world entirely unfamiliar to them since she did not have experience with videogames aside from being a
ZosmyRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
TLDR: It's a good book/story, but the style and grammar can make it hard to read.
Style: To be honest, I don't love it. It feels like the sentences are often cut short, making reading this book feel, uh- clunky. Also, there are just some really long paragraphs that are difficult to read through.
Grammar: There are issues every once in a while. They'll probably be cleared in time with enough edit suggestions/editing though.
Story: Okay- now to the better parts of this book: the story and characters. The story is believable and interesting, and I'd recommend it if you're looking for the usual isekai LITrpg bundle. I'm taking off half a star because it's slightly generic- but some people might take that as a plus.
As far as I've seen, we still seem to be in the "introduction" phase (though there IS an overarching goal of getting back to earth). Will definitely be interesting to see what Treze does in the future.
There are no twists on the world itself- it's medieval with guilds and dungeons, etc. I personally like it, but it's worth considering.
Characters: My score is based off of whether the characters are reasonable and relatable. They are, so 5/5.
PenguinsAreScaryRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
I do not believe in sugarcoating things or doing some verbal judo to make things more palatable. I like to tell things like it is, both the good and the bad. So, I am going to speak my mind.
Style: I had to Suggest Edits for just about every sentence for some chapters. Punctuation was sometimes quite bad. Sure, the author is not a native speaker, but here I encounter the situation where all the things I expect a native speaker to do badly, they do well (spelling, grammar, incorrectly translated idioms, etc.) but the things that I expect a native speaker to be able to extrapolate from their native language are done badly (like putting the correct punctuation characters in speech). I know, this sounds rough, but I did provide resources to the author to get better and have so far seen very little improvement.
Grammar: There are mistakes, that I expect a non-native speaker to make, like using incorrect prepositions. The author avoids these hurdles with the seemingly effortless grace of a steeplechase runner. I have no complaints.
Story: It is interested and had me captivated. I like the system and while I know very little about the world so far, I would like to hear more. I am always a bit peeved if the ranks go from F to S, because it's not alphabetical, and sounds like the result of rank inflation (also to me it makes more sense that ranks go up, not down), but I am aware that I am alone on that part.
Characters: I like Alice. I like her WWTD motto. I'd like to find out more about her.
AlsoJohnRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
The narrative level of this clearly realized generic game lit world seems more suited for an illustrated physical book aimed at elementary school kids who are a bit slow at getting their reading skills up to speed
I can imagine a kindly children 's librarian reading it at storytime while the kids look at the pictures to follow along. The characters are all cardboard cutouts including the MC.
World build is average and could be the setting for a well told tale but the tale being told is aimed at too young and audience for this site