Seraph of Ice
Self-Published
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Description
This is on hiatus forever. Please read update.
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2022
- Author
- 567456
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 4.0/ 5.0
- Followers
- 226
- Views
- 66,407
Chapters(37 total)
- UpdateSep 23, 2024
- Chapter - 35 ShadeDec 10, 2023
- Chapter - 34Sep 18, 2023
- Chapter - 33 Winter's EmbraceJul 22, 2023
- Chapter - 32 Peaceful PastureJul 21, 2023
- Chapter - 31 LiliesJul 16, 2023
- Chapter - 30 FireJul 8, 2023
- Chapter - 29 AftermathJul 2, 2023
- Chapter - 28 Ctrl A - Ctrl C - Ctrl V - Alt F4Jul 1, 2023
- Chapter - 27 Nexus TrialsJun 30, 2023
- Chapter - 26 The Return of the ApplesJun 29, 2023
- Chapter - 25 Principles of the Past and Preparations for the PresentJun 27, 2023
- Chapter - 24 Slime Puff PastriesJun 26, 2023
- Chapter - 23 RoommatesJan 17, 2023
- Chapter - 22 A wacko womanDec 31, 2022
- Chapter - 21 FriendsNov 27, 2022
- Chapter - 20 Back to the CityNov 23, 2022
- Chapter - 19 Infernal WyrmNov 15, 2022
- Chapter - 18 EnchantressNov 15, 2022
- Chapter - 17 Smog and SmokeNov 14, 2022
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Community Reviews(1)
- nzswc3iRoyal Road★★★ 3.0Edit: The prologue has been fixed! I've put the part of the original review that dealt with that in the spoiler below.
The prologue is good, but does not properly introduce the character (and more particularly, her race/what weird abilities she has). There are some passing references to what she might have done to herself (or someone else might have done to her), but too late in the story, and without much context. I feel this is something important that the reader should know as it would make the mc and what happen to her more believable.
This leads to a strange disconnect between a low level character with a random starting class seemingly brushing off pretty much everything above her level, and display weird capabilities that seems to come from nowhere.
For the author: I would add a chapter, between prologue and chapter one, that would flashback to (or make the mc re-live) the blood rituals/modifications and what they did to her. If you want to keep the mystery, maybe focus on the pain/feelings of the mc more than a plain-text explanation.
That would make the stunt of learning the language in a few hours "after running algorithms" seems less cheap/less like the author not having an idea how to get out of the "mc does not know the local language" trap. (also, the mc has a new body, name, level, would that be strange the she knew the local language too? probably less than 'learned in a few hours' imo).
Also, the whole thing about the mc being flat-chested... that might be a bit too much. The one time it was mentioned in chapter 2 was perfectly fine, but the encounter at the exit of the dungeon... meh.
Same thing with the anime-y character behavior and humor. Meh. And does not help giving depth to the characters. But this might be a bit more subjective, and on a positive note, wasn't over-the-top.
To tie in with the title: whereas a lot of stories take too much time and have very little progress over tens of chapters, this one have the reverse problem. It rushes thr