Second Life as the Sister of a Goddess [OLD VERSION]

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This is an old discontinued version of this series. The rewrite,Key to the Void, resolves several issues that had developed in the later chapters.

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He had lived a good life. A man who traveled the world, saw the cultures, learned the languages. For a period, he had even discovered a historical preservation of a martial art practiced by the Samuri and Ninja in Japan that caught his interest. He learned it until he had attained a level of mastery worthy to instruct those back in his home in the United States.

Before he settled down to become a teacher, he first became a nurse. It was too late to go through the intense schooling to become a doctor, but he had been inspired by the Indian and Chinese traditions of the strong link between the ways of healing and the ways of body mastery that are the core of the martial arts.

He settled down and had his family, opened his school, and taught several students. It was a good life, his 60 years. But then, when he had finished the children’s class one day in which his own grandaughter was a student, he decided to take her for icecream. That was when it all went wrong.

He was fine after the accident. His grandaughter… was not. In that moment, someone claiming to be a fallen goddess promised him the ability to take the consequences of his mistake entirely onto himself. He would die, his grandaughter would live on in perfect health. In this moment of weakness, he could not possibly refuse.

The last thing he knew in his life was that his precious granddaughter had been saved. The first thing he knew in his next life was that he was in the womb, and he was a twin. A twin he would later discover was the very goddess who helped him to save his granddaughter.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2019
Author: Jemini

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.2/ 5.0
Followers: 333
Views: 138,760

Chapters(48 total)

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Community Reviews(4)

fanvaronRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
A slight twist on the reincarnation story, it's pretty interesting but very slow.
We are at c.28 still not even at 1year old, so if there isn't a comparatively huge time skip sometime soon this will stay a rather mellow growing up story.
For that reason I can't really say much more about the story either, the character development and magic system seem pretty solid, but because of the small timeframe of the story there is nothing substantial there yet.
What I can say, and what really impressed me, is the detail, not only in describing the world and happenings but the knowledge.
It feels like the Author has real knowledge or at least done proper research on topics talked about, be it the development of infants, or meditation and martial arts.
Not like many other stories where, when the plot needs it, the author makes up some half facts or just complete mumbo jumbo for the character to seem smart, this at least appears grounded in real facts.
All in All I would definitely recommend giving this a read if you are not bothered by the reincarnated and living as a baby scenario, and even then its not the typical living in a peasant family learning everything early and becoming a magic genius (tho there is lots of the learning stuff early, just made a little more interesting than just sneaking in to read books or something)
Waffle(est)Royal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Starts a tiny bit slow but more than makes up for it in depth. The story is very detailed but all of the descriptions and world building is well spread out and never become bothersome.
At the time of this review (ch 40) the Mc is a cuple of months old still yet somehow i actually care about him. A step above 97.8% of all other portal fantasies on this site. Expect to see this on trending real soon :)
The true NarratorRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
It's all right, no actually it's better than that, it's good, but it's going down a route im uncertain about.
Not really a spoiler but the protag gets kinda overpowered far too quickly with no signs of any real opposition in sight just relatively smooth sailing on all sides.
(the dark elves don't count, they seem pretty pathetic so far)
So while im hoping we won't have a goku situation (where the explosions do nothing but get bigger, boring) I fear it might happen.
Other than that most things seem pretty smooth, grammar has no obvious flaws, characters are simple but likable enough and overall it is a decent read.
(Oh and yeah im not much of a fan of such easy cultivation methods giving one god powers, that is just silly and too easy, power should be hard-won, training in the Himalayas and humming does not count, otherwise we would all be gods)
JediDRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
Have read up to book 2 chapert 50 on scribble hub
Likes
Very descriptive
Very clear and well done genderbent child protagonist with an adult mind. The author pretty much does all the things right most novels do wrong. Thank you for that
Worldbuilding is very solid and well thought out, though I wish it was delved into more than perhaps the history of the fey court and other miscellaneous things.
Dislikes
Pace: Pretty much as slow as possible. Like I understand having a slow pace when a lot is going on and the situation's complex, but the problem is it's slowly paced regardless of the situation
POV chapters: I am not saying POV chapters are a bad thing. I like them as they usually add more to the story or progress it in a different point of view. 5 POV chapters of the same events with very little new details is the problem. Stuff like that is better handled is a switching viewpoints type of chapter or just a 3rd person narration.
Tangental Details: So by this I mean a lot of the story involves details that have nothing to do with the current situation, and as of chapter 50 I still don't see their relevance.
Focus: This one is a little more personal, but there's just not a lot of action in this book. I think there was 1 fight scene that was actually interesting. The others were just including combat as a backstage scenario. The author said that it had a fairly normal amount of fight scenes compared to cultivation novels, but they should realize that cultivation novel chapters are much shorter.
Goddess: To be honest, I hesitate to even call the goddess a side character. While she does have a few important points of action, for someone who is in the title and creates part of the initial appeal, she plays very little part in the story apart from helping the MC with his cultivation troubles. Honestly, the other stuff I can forgive and just push past, but this one I can't. The two boys play a more active role than the goddess, which is ridiculous given that the goddess was