Scion of the Void

Self-Published

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Description

What happens when a retired Sailor, avid gamer, Player versus Player nut and an H.P. Lovecraft fan all rolled into a man with slight psychopathic tendencies gets brought to a world of fantasy with role-playing elements?

Chaos, absolute bloody chaos.

Join Jake as he attempts to find his way in a brand new world filled with elves, dragons, and all manner of strange and magical creatures, all the while he butchers and slaughters his way to power. Can he make it, or will he be brought down by the darkness inside of him?

Cover byNovissimus.

Authors Note:

Hey guys, thank you for taking the time to look this over. As this is my first work of any sort of writing, I would love it if you can give me any feedback you can think of. Hit me hard and hit me often, so I can make it better for everyone. Thank you!

Authors Note #2.

Some of the wonderful people reading this horrible attempt at literature have reviewed the Main Character as an unlikable a**hole that thinks everything is stupid or idiotic, while others have reviewed the Main Character as realistic and sarcastic. As the author, I think that both of these points are true, and if you, the reader, feel like you won't enjoy the MC being these things in your story, then it might be that this fiction is not for you. But if it is, then I welcome you with open arms. Thank you for your time.

Information

Status
Hiatus
Year
2017
Author
Re Evolution

Tags

LITRPGFANTASYADVENTUREMAGICANTI-HERO LEADMALE LEAD

Royal Road Stats

Rating
4.3/ 5.0
Followers
392
Views
259,108

Chapters(37 total)

Reviews

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Community Reviews(10)

  • drizzRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    I enjoyed this quite a bit. The grammar and spelling is sold (albeit I did find a few errors here and there), and the style is pleasant to read.
    My favourite part about this particular fiction though is the MC; He is portrayed in a way that is both comedic and realistic at the same time, while still keeping the badass vibes up.
    The world is described in good detail and the system in place is solid and consistent. I find the loli goddess to be a refreshing aspect to an often more stiff and formal part of the story.
    It's been a while since I found something of this quality on here, and I truly hope that you will continue to update this.
    Cheers and thanks for your work, ReEvolution!
    This review was written 15 chapters into the story and I will update it if I find that it no longer accurately reflects my thoughts and opinions on this story.
  • XuzoRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    Come for the LITRPG, stay for the masterful narration and story telling.
    It's a little early for a full review but if the standard of current work continues I see no way this does not become a top fiction on the site.
  • IcyResistanceRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    This is great. Currently I am not paying enough attention to this so it may be some time before my mind can correctly form a moderately acceptable review that doesn't go: READ IT WHOEVER DOESNT READ IT SUCKS.
    Knocked 0.5 off of grammar cuz you said there may be mistakes but I wasn't paying attention so yeah.
    Read it tho. It's a good one. (As good as Legend of Randidly Ghosthound I guess but BETTER. I think.
  • ImMrMeeseeksRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    LOVE IT!! As some of my other stories that I love on this site have been slowing down or abandoned it's nice that I have found a new story to love.
  • korlinkiRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    This summary f****** destroyed me. I don't even start reading but already know there will be some good shit.
  • Chronovoid8Royal Road
    ★★★★★ 4.5
    Damn, this was good, decent grammar, an actual plot, the MC doesn't have a mental breakdown for absolutely no reason, and apart from the smoking the MC is really fun, cool, and exactly what I like; an *sshole with a sense of humor without being too edgy, and barely any morals!
  • A Talking RockRoyal Road
    ★★★★ 4.0
    refreshing story with some cussing. lots of game inspired things from games i love, and im here to join the "COOL CLUB" because i thought it would be funny. kinda hard to understand sometimes but generally ok.
  • Futhark the ElderRoyal Road
    ★★★★ 4.0
    A somewhat unlikable antihero as protagonist, his negativity unleavened by much humour other than some snarky messages from his sponsoring goddess.
    But the writing is competently executed and the plot is sufficiently novel in its details to make the reader want to delay the daily routines to finish just one more chapter.
    My compliments to the author, and one further item of feedback, which may be a matter of personal taste. I found the main character's constant cigarette-sucking to be quite off-putting. In fact, the first time I began reading, it annoyed me to the point of suspending my reading. Cigarette-sucking is not sexy or cool. It's a filthy habit that strews ash about and pollutes the air with acrid smells. If a man must smoke, then let him use a pipe, the way god intended! Mutter, mutter ...
  • SeraphuRoyal Road
    ★★★★ 3.5
    I mean there's not much to say really. You clearly have a firm grasp on the technical aspect of writing, besides the tendency to mix up past and present tense. The only problem is the characters.
    Now, as a fellow amateur writer (altough one yet lacking your skill) i completely understand the difficulty in making compelling and fleshed out characters, and interactions, but that doesn't take away from the fact that characters are your biggest flaw. For the protagonist i have a tip that'll instantly make him seem much more human; make him embarass himself. Paralyse him with fear when facing terrifying monsters, have him pathetically beg for his life when terror overtakes him in a losing fight. Give him weaknesses. Your current protagonist is about as compelling as a piece of wood, if that piece of wood wore all black, owned a katana and spent all its time writing shadow the hedgehog fanfics. He is as edgy as any 13 year old starting their emo phase, but yet as callous and hardened as a war veteran, and these two characteristics are all he shows. Considering that the protagonist is the most important character you'll write in most stories, this is catastrphic.
    Now, i saw that this was your first fiction here, and i must say i'm impressed. Unless you've written lots of unpublished fictions elsewhere, this points to real talent. Thats why, even if you don't want to change your protagonist this far down the line, i implore you to really focus on characterisation in your next fiction. This is an attempt to help you grow, and i hope to see more from you in the future.
  • OninomadRoyal Road
    ★★★ 2.5
    To be fair old lead with the good points it's a solid built LitRPG world, an interesting story concept and the grammar is quite good.
    Unfortunately none of this really matters because the MC is an unlikable asshole, he's that who thinks everything is stupid and believes swearing makes him tougher(he has a skill for swearing and isn't even very good at it).  I enjoy many stories with asshole MC's but that attitude has to have a cause and affect, not just for the sake of being an asshole and  an asshole moment should make me excited or happy.