Rising World

Self-Published

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Description

This is the story of Zion Cray a 17 year old student that stood at the peak(of his school) watch as he goes to a new world called Aldona with magic, immortals, demons, and monsters. His mission is to make Aldona breakthrough to become a supreme world. Oh there are adventurers, a few sects, and some academies too.Yo first time writing a novel so if you have any recommendations please comment.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2016
Author: Starforce

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.2/ 5.0
Followers: 1,002
Views: 188,302

Chapters(33 total)

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Community Reviews(10)

qmills88Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Will do a quick review now as it's only a few chapters in but deserves some recognition , so far it's fantastic, well written story and characters intresting twist on a popular plot line beginning and character selection. Cleanly written and informative without having info dump chapters that overwhelm you be intresting to see how this progresses and if they keep it up, well worth the read
RedysRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I'll wait for more chapters to do a review
Fuscia2Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Exelent storytelling, pacing, and character depth. The one thing I'd suggest improving on is the shifts in speech. Something about how it's worded gives a frequent sense that the author accidentally used the wrong name. This actually happened in the chapter "Zombies and Pinball", where they used Kotta instead of Urika for the last part of the chapter and the author's note. Other than that one mistake, though, the story is quite well done.
Georgia E.Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
So funny! The story is very clever and it is just getting better. I like the main character. The progression is fun and you get the general idea of it even as they skip through chunks of time. The idea of the storytelling from Earth is a fun added aspect and I am looking forward to further chapters.
GriseusRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Should see his other works he's written because they are more than worth the time and money to invest in them. For example his 1000 Tales stories are the best. One of my favs outside that series is "The Dream of Aveire". My only issues is that a lot of his books are digtal only. Would happy shill for Kris Schnee (as I am now) because his work is always intresting.
Why read this story? Don't care for people getting killed and being transported to another world. Don't care for RPGlite stories. The gimick doesn't grab me. Mix them together and it almost there. What does get my intrest here is how Vonn the main character starts with little and grows his life. This what Snow Quill does best: character growth stories.
JordiskRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
I have read all the way to Chapter 31, posted a few hours ago now. This story is pretty decent. I am not going to go in-depth about the style and grammar and whatnot, as others have done that already and it has been consistent.
The story is currently fairly "slice of life". However, in-universe the main character's age is supposed to be a time of study and growth, as they are able to gain Stat Points every season for the first five years. Already, we have seen three months pass in-universe, and there is still much to do.
The Main Character is going with an "Engineer/Mage" build, which will probably end up something like a classical Artificer. He is working from Renissance-era tools to create modern items, using his knowledge of math, physics, and engineering from Earth. His "brilliant" inventions so far have been a marble maze toy, Pinball machines, and a very basic bicycle. We are heavily hinted towards Steam Power, not only in the Story Summary but also in the story itself.
Probably the most interesting part, for me, of any story like this is the Magic System, and the System itself. Magic in this world seems fairly limited, at least at the low levels we have seen; using mana to add or remove energy of a certain type. "Ice" and "Fire" spells are adding and removing Heat, "Light" and "Shadow" would be adding and removing Light, Air spells are adding Motion/Kinetic Energy, Lightning is mucking about with electrical potential. Hints of higher level magic include necromancy and "blessing" the fields with Earth magic.
The system itself has not revealed all of its attributes yet (and that is my main complaint, we should be able to see the level 0 attributes). However, Attributes can be increased at the Temple every so often, by sacrificing three skill levels in skills governed by that attribute. Skills only have two levels maximum, and you lose a level when you raise an attribute.
Finally, the system for Perks is well thought out. While the MC got basic information for t
AllantherRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Reviewed at chapter 15.
Let's say a meteor came outta nowhere and killed you. Let's say a powerful entity offered you a chance to be reborn in a gameworld in-between your past life and the next.
Are you gonna say no? Well, maybe. But Vonn, an engineering student at university, didn't. He chose to be reborn into a fantasy world ruled by a system.
Follow his story as he navigates his new world and his new life in this slice-of-life adventure.
Style score: the style is fine. Pacing, scene-setting, etc. The style of writing has no issues that I saw.
Story score: the story starts off well, a bit standard for isekai fantasy litrpg. Having read 15 chapters / 63 pages, the pacing of the story is slow. Nearly slice-of-life. While that pacing is fine, there was nothing to identify it as such. Around ch 7, it started to feel a little boring as I was expecting the plot to emerge. By ch 9, I realized that wouldn’t be happening immediately.
Grammar score: I saw no grammatical errors within the 15 chapters I read. That already puts it above most Royal Road stories, including my own. Not that I'm the best at catching errors.
Character score: I felt there were several missed opportunities in this story so far. The main character hasn't done anything to make him sympathetic to me. There's little to no characterization and little emotional depths explored to find myself attached to. While this might be considered early in the story, I felt it was an opportunity missed.
All in all, the story hold potential and promise, and is worth seeing how it develops from here on out. Time will tell if that potential is realized.
mrtatsRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
In general, this story is above average compared to other RoyalRoad stories. It has its issues and I'll address those issues in the hopes that they would help the author grow.
Style: The first issue we see is here, the author's style, unfortunately, is disorganized, which makes it harder to follow along with the story. A more organized approach to scenes and dialogues would definitely help the author.
Story: Story we are getting told has a good premise and as far as I can see the author is developing the story in a good trajectory. If you are not turned away by the disorganized style, this could be an excellent story for you.
Grammar: It has some issues, but not much. Mostly, grammatical errors are about unnecessary commas and commas not being placed where they could help bring more clarity.
Character: Second big issue the author has are characters. They, unfortunately, suffer from the author's disorganized style. Dialogues are scattered and do not really help at bringing characters to the forefront. A more structured approach to dialogues will help with character development.
Overall: This story is above average and could become an excellent one if the issues I pointed out gets better. I hope, the author keeps working on this story and improve it.
jklmRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
A slice of life story about exploring an engineer class in another world.
Emphasis on the slice of life. From the summary I wasn't sure if this would be slice of life or power fantasy (with a showboat MC awing people and face slapping, etc.). Both have their pros and cons, but this definitely falls in the slower, less dramatic slice of life category.
I don't have much to say about the main character's intial transmigration (standard random event that kills him), but I do like how he had some choice over who he transmigrated into. I think there's potential for exploring what happened with those he didn't choose (he already seems a little interested in investigating it).
It would be nice to see more reactions to the main character's inventions. Right now he makes something, maybe one person asks, "how did you think of that?" and he moves on. Reading about the main character engineering something is fine, but reactions and repercussions are important to keep the story interesting. I hope there is more of that in future chapters.
Also, the things the main character makes are kind of random:
First a pinball machine, then a crossbow, then maybe some kind of water irrigation device. He doesn't really seem to have any kind of direction.
There's that vague mandate he has from the system to do something important, but so far that has had pretty much zero impact on the story.
Things are still in the beginning stages though, and I can see a fair bit of potential.
DarthKittenRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
This is a hard review for me to write. I love the story. The MC is a likable guy with no weird flaws that require plot armor to protect him. The premise is good and the world building solid. The writing is also solid with story flow that is paced to keep the reader interested. The trick with fantasy is to keep the reader in a state where disbelief is suspended. So if you introduce elements of science, mathematics, or logic you can’t screw them up or the juggled disbelief drops to the ground. That is where the story fails. Over and over the engineering choices the author makes leaves this engineer scratching his head. I do plan to keep reading the story. I just find the reality based parts to be very unreal.
Without rubber, quality small springs, or solenoids pinball is little more than pachinko. Rubber does not require rubber trees. There are a large number of plants that contain latex like compounds. Sulfer should be a common reagent.. The author has made it seem that quality alloy steel is not available. This removes most forms of springs and limits clockwork. Ping pong balls require rigid plastic. Stirling engines are great for efficiency. The power to weight ratio for a stirring engine will keep it out of the skies.