Rise of the Undead Legion

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Description

Three years agoConquestwas released, redefining virtual reality and gaming.

‘An entire world on a server. Dive in and play the RPG to end all others; explore, create, conquer. LIVE!’

It became an overnight phenomena worldwide.

Dave Ruster grew up without a family to speak of, he had few friends and fewer prospects. He lives in the same small town where he graduated from high school, andworks long hours at a low-paying job that barely pays for rent and the food on his table.He can’t afford college, but at least he is not out on the streets.

His life is going nowhere, stuck on a treadmill.

Until chance, karma, or providence, call it whatever you believe in, intervenes. Suddenly, David’s circumstances change.

Injured and unable to work, he’s about to lose what little he has. His fate balances where crisis and opportunity go hand in hand.

He can risk it all, seizing the opportunity to make circumstances work for him, potentially going further and higher than he ever dreamed. Or he can accept his fate and watch life from the sidelines

Join Dave as he puts all his aspirations and hopes, all that he is, into the game he always wanted to play,Conquest!

It will be a journey of adventure and discovery, victory and loss, as he strives to create a new future for himself, in-the-gameandIn Real Life.

Author note.

This story looks a bit similar to many VMMORPG stories on this site, however, this will only last for the first few chapters. then you will see how vastly different it is from the regular stories.

Disclaimer, This story's Game settings are inspired by "Rebirth of The Legendary Guardian". just a bit of game settings, not everything. Mainly the "Inheritance" part. you will understand once you read the story. thank you allAs of Chapter 47 the story is being Professionally proofread and edited. earlier chapters will go under proofing later on.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2018
Author: Biako

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Rating: 4.3/ 5.0
Followers: 1,706
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Community Reviews(10)

AziharRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I read this on another site a year ago and completely forgot about it. I had a dream the other day about it and decided to look it up. Found it on this site and it's great to be able to continue reading it. This pics make it worth rereading the first half of the story.
CalaventeRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
For me it's a funnier take on the trope "I'm gonna play against all other players of the world".
It's interesting, especially with how the MC stumbled on his "monopoly" with a level way lower than what the programers and the system planned for.
DrMonotoneRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
You are obligated to five star this novel, FOR THE LEGION!
YOu ArE ObliGateD To fIVE StaR tHis NoVel, FOR THE LEGION!
NEVER TIRE, NEVER HUNGER, NEVER FEAR!
Jrs360Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I am giving this story 5 stars. If you can make it through the admittedly sub par beginning it gets so much better once the action starts. If you proceed to the current chapters he has had an editor review them before posting and the quality is much better.
FathisRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
As of chapter 14
The story is the archetype of the classic VRMMO setting where we find out the protagonist is unlucky, starts the game late and has an encounter with a potential love interest within the first two chapters. But do not get turned off by this.
I might be biased because I like most iterations of LMS but essentially the story is fun, the setting is different and it is truly well written for a non-native as I'm guessing the author Biakogan despite his excellent level of English is from Morocco. So have a half a start on the grammar since I'm rather critical on the matter. It also needs slightly deeper character development even though most decisions the MC takes are 100% relatable and realistic for once.
Otherwise read it: it's honestly good so far. Looks promising!
ShinkaRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
I'm just reading this novel all over again so i decided to give it a rating.. I really liked dave adventures although I was really hyped by some of the action scene, it was definiteely a good read.
Give it a try
EverShadowRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
I haven't read a lot of the story. Just the first chapter, actually. I gave every section roughly the average it had, I just wanted to make this review for grammar.
Oh my god, there are so many errors. Capitalization, punctuation, quotes, paragraph sectioning. It's all wrong. Seriously, take a couple minutes to proofread your stuff before posting it.
WaytocoolRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
It's pretty good, except for the grammer that needs some work.
KamiKira00Royal Road
★★★ 3.0
Good start, everything is thought out. it is only 9 chapters long, but is is worth 5 stars.
TheAgeOfTheYakRoyal Road
★★ 1.5
This review was edited on the 25th of April 2018 at the...request of the author. This will likely be my last edit.
Disclaimer: All my ratings range from 0.1 (poor) to 5.0 (outstanding). As such, a rating of 2.5 might be considered average. Most scores I hand out are slightly below that.
Let's set sail with accustomed brutal honesty!
Style and orthography 1.3/5: still makes me cringe
Orthography (1.15/5): far below average
Style (1.75/5): decent prologue but everything after that suffers
The prologue has seen some amazing progress, I'll gladly repeat it yet again.
It's obvious that you've made strides since your first prologue. The narration is more fluid, the atmosphere is palpable. Some parts could still use a little love, especially the pacing and character development (inner monologue). Also, you are still too wordy. If you want the first chapter to be a knockout-punch, it needs to be crisp, clear. In a way, the inane ramblings of your delirious protagonist destroy the atmosphere you try to invoke with some of your nice descriptions. Also, while it's obvious that a lot of work has gone into those (descriptors), in particular, you might want to be careful not to overdo it. It's not quite at that level yet, but stories can get lost in descriptions.
Story, Characters etc:
I once did a very thorough review of this story. I edited the first two points because they were easy to change, but I don't think it's particularly fair to demand of me to rewrite my entire review which is the work of hours.
So, to make things short, I'll go very briefly over the few changes that have taken place.
Characters:
Everything I wrote about the characters still holds true - just not to such a glaring degree within the prologue. The prologue, I'll happily point it out one last time, is better in nearly every way. The characters feel real, not like some sad shadow of an idea. You also did a good job making Dave somewhat likeable (even though I still hate his guts for his defeatist attitude