Rings of Power

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Description

Jett, a teenager, who has endured a lifetime of torment and hardship. Constantly bullied and ostracized, pain and isolation marks Jett's existence. However, on the verge of death, a mysterious ring saves Jett and grants him amazing powers. Jett soon realizes there are more like him and he finds out secrets about his unique bloodline that could make him one of the most powerful ring wielders in history.

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Status: Hiatus
Year: 2024
Author: SKNit3

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.5/ 5.0
Followers: 20
Views: 13,181

Chapters(24 total)

What readers say about Rings of Power

“It's an interesting premise that starts with a bully trope leading into a ring of power. I found that, while I enjoyed the dialogue, I was lost when it came to scenery and time. I think, with added narrative exposition addressing the 5 W's and 1 H of the ch…”
Damien HansonRoyal Road5.0 / 5
“Style: The style is pretty good. The author is able to capture the appropriate tone very well. Their way of writing is unique and helps contribute to that. Additionally, they have great word choice for building the right tone. I can also safely say that the…”
SkarabraeRoyal Road5.0 / 5

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Community Reviews(10)

Damien HansonRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
It's an interesting premise that starts with a bully trope leading into a ring of power. I found that, while I enjoyed the dialogue, I was lost when it came to scenery and time. I think, with added narrative exposition addressing the 5 W's and 1 H of the chapters, it will become a powerful story.
SkarabraeRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Style: The style is pretty good. The author is able to capture the appropriate tone very well. Their way of writing is unique and helps contribute to that. Additionally, they have great word choice for building the right tone. I can also safely say that the author uses the literary device of imagery very well and it also helps get the proper feeling.
Story: The story is very good. It develops at the pace it needs to and it has the proper pacing. The story itself is about people who have rings that give them power, as the title suggests. This has a degree of mystery to it due to the nature of the rings, especially since someone or something is hunting the people with these rings and killing them.
Grammar: The grammar is very good. Any spelling errors that exist are ones that I haven't found, and they might have already been corrected.
Character: The characters are pretty good. Most of them are three-dimensional, well-depicted, and realistic. And this goes for both main and side characters. However, some characters are not three-dimensional. As in, flat one-dimensional. I didn't mind that these characters were that way, but I'm writing this review based on Royal Road's criteria, so I have to deduct points for that.
Overall, I would recommend this story.
Eugene L. NowakRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Story:
A captivating tale of a weak boy who suddenly gains extraordinary strength and the chance to achieve dreams he never thought possible. Initially, the hero evokes sympathy. As the story unfolds, he begins to demonstrate inner strength and assert his right to use his new abilities, becoming a significant force in the world. The narrative briefly introduces a potential love interest and numerous dangers, rapidly expanding the teenager's world. I appreciate the fast pace of the story, which keeps the reader engaged.
Character:
The inner world, emotions, and motivations of the main character are well depicted, making him relatable and understandable. However, the supporting characters could benefit from more depth. They need to be more dynamic and their emotions more noticeable, so they don't feel like they exist only through the protagonist's perspective.
Style:
The beginning of the story and the psychological aspects are well-executed. Jett's experiences and problems are described realistically, eliciting sympathy and explaining his future motivations. However, there is room for improvement in the style. The frequent repetition of words can be jarring. Using synonyms or descriptive phrases can make the text more pleasant to read and offer more opportunities to flesh out the characters, making them more vivid. Additionally, there is a need for more detailed descriptions of the environment and the world. This story deserves a well-developed background.
Grammar:
The grammar and punctuation are in perfect order. I didn't find any mistakes while reading.
Overall:
An enjoyable read about superpowers and magic in the modern world.
J.D. EldraisRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
The story follows a guy name Jett. He is a college student who deals with bullies on a daily basis. One day trying to escape them he mysteriously gets a ring with magic powers. There are others who want the rings for themselves. He is warned by a man named Eric.
So far tte story is interesting. If your into people gaining power with power struggles this seems like a series for you.
MSMRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
I will admit, my first thought on seeing the title was the Amazon show. Which really isn't the author's fault, so I'm not holding it against them. The title makes perfect sense in context. Still, I imagine that's the first thing anyone will think of.
Overall, I liked it. Felt like a realistic take on a sudden power/secret world (might be using the wrong term) story. The main character does some smart things early on... but also doesn't suddenly turn into a genius who can effortlessly exploit the magic better than anyone else.
Style: This is probably my main issue. There are a number of prose and word choice issues that annoyed me. Really nothing major, just slowed down my enjoyment a bit. Likewise, grammar is fine, nothing obviously wrong leaped out at me.
Story: I did get sucked into the story and the worldbuilding pretty quick. Maybe a little bit too much time bringing up old cliches, but other than that it's all good. The basic idea of "cool magic powers, also you're being hunted" is one where you can go a lot of places with it. We're just getting to the part where he firms his resolve to improve, so we'll see where we go from here.
Characters: Jett is more compelling than I expected. Eric is an ass, but he's supposed to be an ass, so that's okay. All the other wielders are coming together and building up into something that could be interesting. We're still early days, but I'm liking where most of them are going so far. My main worry is that there might end up being too many to keep track of, but we haven't gotten to that point yet.
Looking forward to seething this continue!
cosmic_lonewolfRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
After reading through the first few chapters of Rings of Power, I personally found the premise intriguing with a lot of potential. The idea of a young man discovering ancient rings that grant magical abilities is a concept that I personally have not seen before and I feel that it shows great promise.
The weaker part of the story is definitely its style. I feel that the author is over-explaining what the characters are feeling and doing instead of making it more apparent through dialogue tags.
Another issue that breaks immersion for me is when the author breaks the dialogue to say how the conversation progressed before continuing with the rest of the dialogue, when that explanation could have been a couple more dialogues.
Here is an example from the start of Chapter 3:
Jett looked at the teenager in front of him with confusion, "Is this some kind of stupid joke?" he asked, irritated.
The teenager looked at Jett from head to toe, then snorted, "You sure are feeble-looking. I wonder how you've managed to survive this long."
Jett began to get annoyed, but he quickly squashed it down. Insults were nothing new to him, after all.
"What do you want?" Jett demanded. "And what's with the 'ready to die' comment? How do you even know my name?"
The teenager introduced himself as Eric and asked if he could come in. Jett hesitated.
Here how I would prefer to write it:
Jett eyed the teenager before him, baffled. "Is this some joke?" he snapped.
The teen smirked, scanning Jett with disdain. "You look feeble. Surprising you've lasted this long."
Suppressing his annoyance, Jett pressed, "What's the point? And why the 'ready to die' remark? And how do you know me?"
Other than that, my only issue is that the side characters seem a bit bland but the main character are well developed.
GMS_JakersRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
This book has really good grammar and good description. So I have to give a five to the writing quality, and the plot has a good pace. I like how the first chapter immediately hooks you in the end, which makes for a great start. This book is a book of potential.
PyritePirateRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Story: The story is the best part of the story. The setting is interesting, with a somewhat unique power system, and an established central conflict. The main issues are in how it's delivered, which I'll explain in the next few parts.
Style: This is the main issue. While the prose on it's own isn't bad, the writer isn't very good at delivering the story. There's a tendency to over-explain, they don't practice the principle of "show don't tell", and they overuse narrative exposition to a ridiculous degree. These flaws are why I placed it low. I point out specific examples in the comments I left.
Grammar: No real issues, as far as I can tell.
Character: Not too bad. Each character has at least some depth, but I really don't care for the main character. There's just nothing engaging about him. Some side characters are a bit one-note, and the overuse of narrative exposition really stifles a lot of potential depth.
Overall: A good premise and plot is slightly squandered, but there's definitely a lot of room for improvement, and I can see the potential in the story. If the writer fixes up the issues I pointed out, this could become great.
TheGreatGazpachoRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Isekai fake-out! The protagonist is very much not dead and is still alive unless that becomes another twist later on. Teleportation as an ability is always fun to play around with, so that was one way the narrative hooked me. The story itself is written competently that I can follow what is going on without getting lost or forgetting who's talking. The author also displays an understanding of creating hooks to keep the reader coming back whether it be through surprise encounters with strangers or sudden attacks by the antagonists.
The major drawback I've noticed so far is that I feel many of the characters are lacking. Our protagonist, Jett, has nothing much going for him apart from being a punching bag by the bullies. Now, obviously, readers will be sympathetic to Jett's plight—a lot of people can relate to it—but Jett needs more than that if people want to stay invested in him once the bully subplot is resolved or just simply ends. The narrative displays him as resourceful when dealing with his bullies, but one would expect him to be, given how often he deals with them. A good bit of fleshing out for Jett would go a long way.
The bullies also share in the lack of character department; we know what they physically look like but not much about who they are or whether they bully other people. It felt that they existed solely to bully the protagonist and were not allowed to be their own individual characters. Now, they don't necessarily have to be fixed, but be wary of creating characters that are predominately plot devices as opposed to realized characters.
I also felt instances of dialogue felt stiff; generally, one way to improve dialogue is to read it aloud and see if it flows well from your mouth.
Raphsyc0Royal Road
★★★★ 3.5
The grammar and dialogue are good, but your description is lackluster. I suggest you improve your description so imagery can take hold of the reader's mind.
Find words to use so you won't repeat stuff in one sentence or dialogue as often.
Have fun improving your skills as a writer.