Revenge of Mages Book 1: The Staff of Runetizo

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Description

Mensal learns of his newfound abilities, bonds with a dragon, and finds a master of magic who was thought to be dead. He makes friends and enemies in the world of magic, and seeks to understand his powers further. Assassins come after him, after his power is exposed. What will he do in this new world that he's discovered?

Cover art: Jamie Wang

Edited version now out on amazon kindle: https://www.royalroad.com/amazon/B0B2NTRR9L?maas=&ref=

Information

Status: Completed
Year: 2021
Author: MysticalDragon

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Rating: 4.0/ 5.0
Followers: 35
Views: 19,887

Chapters(50 total)

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Community Reviews(3)

prodigalXRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
This story is going through editing :) I am friends with one of the authors so please expect changes sometime, so some details will be changed also some humor and other stuff will be edited (im actually helping edit) if you still have a problem with other stuff please add comments or reviews.
AncientToysRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Hey Brian! it's ya boi Amanda here.
I know we haven't talked in a while but I decided to review your book.
Overall it's pretty nice, but I do have some problems.
1. The pacing is kinda bad. It feels like it's going too fast
2. Mensal is acting like he's already a pro even though he just learned about magic. He suddenly has the knowledge about different healing stuff and poisons. Strange . . .
3. Classic OP character. Yeah . . . ye
That's basically it, anyways have fun writing your book I definitely enjoyed it ^^
TheMadProfessorRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Okay, so firstly, I got to chapter three of the work before I decided on my score.
I'm not sure if the points I'll bring up are addressed later. But I felt that was needed before I dove into the review itself.
Firstly, I will say I liked the concept that the story was going for. And I did like how the two main characters were introduced into the "fish out of water" situation.
But there were a few things that turned me away from the continue with the story as it progressed.
The first point that I noticed is the pacing is, for the first three chapters, really fast. Especially in the first chapter, which I felt would greatly benefit if it was expanded to dive into why the two students are there, show us the event that got them in trouble, maybe have a bit of a chase scene to rack up the tension.
Because a lot of the information is just put before me, it was harder for me to get immersed into the situation.
Second, there is decent of telling the situation then showing us. Now, I'll be the first to say, this is a harder thing to do as opposed to simply saying it. And I'm guilty of doing it as the next person.
Third, the dialogue is (for me) wooden. Though I will also say dialogue is HARD. It took me FOREVER to get it to where I didn't feel like mine was wooden anymore.
That being said, this definitely is a narrative worth exploring, I just am of the opinion it could use some polishing.
[And I also know that this book has been edited, which I haven't read yet. So I fully admit that all my points coul've already been addressed.]