Reincarnated : He's my WHAT?!

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2015

Author

fuel2rock

• Chapter : 19
  Jan 18, 2020
• Chapter :18
  Jan 18, 2020
• Chapter 17
  Apr 8, 2016
• Chapter 16
  Apr 7, 2016
• Chapter 15
  Feb 16, 2016
• Chapter 14
  Dec 7, 2015
• Chapter 13
  Dec 4, 2015
• Chapter 12
  Nov 29, 2015
• Chapter 11
  Nov 23, 2015
• Chapter 10
  Nov 22, 2015
• Chapter 9
  Nov 21, 2015
• Not a chapter
  Nov 16, 2015
• 8. Family Time
  Nov 11, 2015
• 7. A baby
  Nov 10, 2015
• 6. Here comes the baby
  Nov 6, 2015
• 5. Ring around the rosy 18+
  Nov 1, 2015
• 4. Goodbye and please don't leave me
  Oct 31, 2015
• 3. You saved me and I hate you!
  Oct 31, 2015
• Reply
  Oct 30, 2015
• 2. I'm just like everybody else
  Oct 30, 2015

Reviews

Community Reviews(3)

• Lobiano123Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  I give you Full star score. because in my online life you are the one who make a story relate from BL so keep it up and make our heart jump. :D
• fuel2rockRoyal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  It started off kinda weak but it's been greatly improving since and I feel like I can really go somewhere with this story
• FennRoyal Road

  ★★★ 2.5

  Before I give my review, I just want to say it's not perfect, but I tried my best. Also, I think it's a really brave move to write new stuff on the site. Not enough people are doing it. I really hope you keep up the good work.
  *An editor for the story would probably make this review's score skyrocket.
  Style: The style of writing isn't that pretty, and to make it worse there are way too many mistakes- so much in fact that I think if you just took the time to reread your work, you'd easily be able to find a bunch and be able to correct them. You tried though, and that's really saying a lot. Although it wasn't pretty, it was readable: You space the paragraphs apart nicely, and you had a basic idea of a style of writing and followed it.
  Suggestions: I think if you slightly changed the POV to a specific character, it'll make the story sound a lot better. Write in a way that it shows what the character is thinking, feeling, what he notices, etc. Even if you skip out on some details, it's fine. That's how it is in real life anyway. You don't walk into a room and notice every detail, unless of course your character is extremely observant.
  Another small thing is the way your dialogue is made up. You shouldn't need to put names before the spoken words, the reader should be able to follow through without it. If you feel uncomfortable without it, perhaps changing the dialogue's colors would help. Set a specific color for a character.
  Story: The story seems to be progressing too fast if you consider how short your releases are, the early "R18 Scene" isn't doing much to help your case... Not to mention how questionable that scene even is in the first place. On the other side of the card, your story is progressing, which is way better than the opposite.
  Suggestions: I'm not sure if you've done this yet or not, but building a story about the world, and about your characters before-hand should be a given. Usually ignoring this stage makes a lot of plot holes pop up. Which in my opin