Rebirth: Monarchs

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Description

[A rewrite of a previous series: Rebirth: Hero!]

Description:

As he grows, the world trembles; as he speaks, the world listens; what he wills, the world provides; common sense overturned by his power.

A man is reborn from a previous life into a human, the weakest race on the planet. Along with him, a girl whom he saved in his last moments.

With the memories of Kai’s past and present life, can he conquer everything and truly be a Monarch?

Together with the residents of the new world, watch as they pierce through the boundaries and break through the chains of fate!

[Updated description]

Summary:

Kai dies trying to save a girl and is reborn as a human in another world, the being who reincarnated him and the girl he saved gave him the task of becoming a monarch which he made his goal along with meeting the girl he saved once more.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2017
Author: SeverTheHeavens

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.6/ 5.0
Followers: 608
Views: 988,643

Chapters(248 total)

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Community Reviews(10)

AkiroRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I loved it. I'm sad it ended. Most these critics are consumers not producers. I feel u created a very interesting story and I wanted it to keep going. Good luck
BullerRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
And not that this fact should stop you from reading it. I absolutely recommend it to anybody who either likes the eastern or the litrpg stuff. BECAUSE IT HAS BOTH.
Or parts of both. I guess that would be a more apt description. Takes parts from each, mashes them together into one big mesh, and somehow gets something coherent out of it. Pretty good job, I must say.
Anyway, I'll just give this a 4.5 and get out of the way.
SininenblueRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Its a mix of LitRPG and Wuxia, mostly wuxia.
Its not bad, not amazing either.
If you like Wuxia and LitRPG then i would recommend this to you, but if you dont, then give it a try i guess.
HorstRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
Summary : If you like when your typical xianxia story and an average litRPG story get scrambled together into a story you'll be happy to have this.
Most of the readers out there will have the feeling that they have read something really similar more than once.
Style is fine, nothing really really good/bad to it.
Grammar is mostly fine as well, although there are some typos here and there.
Story reads like the author grabbed a few classical reincarnation story tropes and threw them into his story pot, stirred a few times and added a little bit of his own twist to it. For me there are too many clichés used in this story and it doesn't feel special enough. After you read 5 Xianxia+litRPG Stories you can easily guess what happens next in this story.
The world seems like a mix of classic litRPG Fantasy and a Xianxia like society ( large clans with different family branches, ... you get the rest ).
The Characters so far aren't anything to fawn over, but they fulfill their duty. You have the loving Parents, his trusty spirit companion, a few (female) friends and his reincarnationed love? interest.
WillyHRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
Cant say much. I read 10 chap and dont feel any excitement like from other story. Missing something which i can point
TweedledeemeRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
the first arc is very good. In fact I would give it 5 stars. Unfortunately as soon as the second arc starts no the makes any sense. Not only is it confusing but the characters seem to change. It doesn’t even feel like the same author wrote it. Still worth a casual read though.
KelsquatchRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
I think this story might feel/read better if the reincarnation troupe was taken out and you just explore a "prodigy with an old spirit guiding them" troupe. As far as I can tell, there is nothing that really sets Kai apart from other children of his age mentally or experience wise (even though he was supposed to have been 17) as he just follows instructions of those older and "wiser" than him (something that was touched on in the prologue that he wasn't supposed to do). You could throw in something connecting him with the other girl Erina later instead and it would be just as comprehensive as saving her in the last life (as so far, that's what it feels like the reincarnation troupe is revolving around).
Grammar, phrasing and variety of dialogue needs some work too, but it's definately not unreadable. Good first draft but definitely needs a lot of work and polish.
Quantum qwaziRoyal Road
★★ 1.5
I mean it’s all just tropes almost every major event is a tropes Japanese ones specificly this has more of these tropes then books mocking those tropes
don’t expect to be surprised even though the plot has a bit of creativity( can’t so easily be defined by japenese tropes) none of it is particularly inspired or really even good
Spoiler: Spoiler
When the main charecter got sick I tho it well it’s almost the end of the ark and no one can threaten the mc time for the parents to die the way they died might have been interesting if there wasn’t a time skip now even flash backs won’t save it because I don’t like how none of the characters change from like four to now they are just a bunch of th tropes the same ones it’s shoddy writing to say the least, you tell us they feel this and that but don’t build it into the story in any way Manet later but this is a strike while the iron is hit sort of thing other wise the emotions fade as minor as they are to begin with (very forced on the emotional writing can’t put my finger on why I feel that )
Another problem is the world revolves around way the author wants it to when it wouldn’t and it’s very jarring like a theater manger in a big city giving free tickets to 2 kids because one has a fan club at school... really I mean really. This alone wouldn’t pull me out but it happens all the time people being brought up in the middle of the narrative to give rando perspectives it’s so inane and smacks of not being able to write and get across the feelings you want without practically stating them. It’s not always this but it is immensely jarring and puts the final nail in the coffin for this story
my final thoughts are if you are going to read this the power growth is boring but not awful the harem is a bunch of boring tropes the villains are evil enough to be bad guys while not being to the point you can actually hate them (mild distaste at most) not good or compelling enough that you care if they die world building a mix euro fanta
Frederick Elliott WalkerRoyal Road
★ 1.0
The author tries to make a captivating story and that is its downfall.
1. The setup of story changes from chapter to chapter seemingly by mood of the authur at the time that chapter is writen.
2. The author has admitted that he does not read what he has written making the story kind of a mesh of chaos if you are trying to follow the arch.
3. At points in the story where charactors are talking to eachother the names are not always right. example is Char A talks at Char A and Char A is so suprised. now while it is obviously wrong name used and with a little thinking you can figure who said what it is still confusing and happens alot. mostly when there are 3 or more charactors talking together.
This novel could be really good, but the author would have to be a little less chaotic. the author seems to have good ideas, but has too many not sticking with any one long enough for it to really matter.
this is my only review because i was very interested in this story but the chaos kinda runied my interest. i could only hope that this could help the author because the author seems to have great story ideas, but is not yet good at biulding a story from them.
endoriaRoyal Road
★ 0.5
If the rewrite is this horrible, I really don't want to read the first draft.
The quality of writing and phrases used are really similar to the horrible translations of chinese light novels. The descriptive writing, wrong use of tenses and hilariously bad sentence structure make a well deserved HALF STAR.
tl;dr: stay away from this novel.