Re: (Union//Incarnation)
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Two years ago, a meteor fell and decimated the southeastern lands of Gaia, turning them into wastelands constantly shrouded in white fog. None of those who saw the blazing calamity with their own eyes lived to tell the tale, and those who attempted to venture in never came back.
Since then, towers, caverns, and ruins have appeared and disappeared without a pattern. Those who were brave enough to venture in were rewarded with a partner capable of defying the natural laws as humanity knows it. People started to call them ‘Incarnation’, and before long, more and more Incarnation were gathered and sold as commodity, especially after a billionaire has sponsored a fighting tournament offering cash prizes to those possessing the strongest Incarnation, spurring the greedy and desperate to hunt for the fabled creatures at the cost of their lives.
Claire Saphira wanted none of that. She simply wished for a life where she could live without worry of her own survival. As she ran from the debt collectors for the umpteenth time, she was swallowed by an errant tower, where she saw a frail, pale-skinned girl with ashen hair hung by chains.
It was a chance, a chance to participate in the tournament and live without worrying about survival. Yet, something nagged in the back of her mind.
Why did she look so familiar?
Planned release schedule: One chapter every day for Mon-Fri, and a break on Sat-Sun. The release will slow down at some point, but most likely won't go under 3 chapters a week.
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2022
- Author
- Enforcer Fiora
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 4.3/ 5.0
- Followers
- 5
- Views
- 1,638
Chapters(7 total)
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Community Reviews(2)
- BellwetherRoyal Road★★★★★ 5.0So far, this tale didn't have the dungeoneering feeling I got accustomed to and was partly expecting from the story based on its description. The story has a huge assortiment of characters, a lot of running involved and yes, the 'incarnation' - trump card the protagonist gets after vowing to uphold a contract. One of the prominent parts of the story is its protagonist who is strong-willed and resolute, ready to bet her life when the situation requires it.
There are some minor grammar mistakes, but nothing a few edits can't get rid of. The premise is promising, but it's tricky to say for sure how it develops. Overall, this story has what it takes to shine brightly. - The Grand CharismoRoyal Road★★★ 3.0Re:(Union//Incarnation) has an interesting world, fascinating characters and a solid premise. The author needs to work on pacing, as the story is moving way, way too fast (in only a few chapters we've gone from Main Character being introduced, gaining an uber-powerful incarnation, entering a national tournament and winning the first fight, my head is spinning!). The author should also spend more time reading over their work for grammatical issues, present/past tense issues and active/passive voice. Dialogue could use work in some areas, and I would like to see some better setups an payoffs, but the foundation here is solid and has potential to grow well with some special attention.
Synopsis
+Has an interesting premise, wastelands shrouded in white fog where no one returns. Good stuff
+Dungeons appearing and disappearing randomly introduces story elements in a simple yet effective way. Very good
-The concept of the Incarnations in the synopsis sounded interesting, but left me more confused than curious. Are they intelligent? Are they like zombies, do they just operate like batteries?
-The synopsis made it sound like Claire Saphira wanted nothing to do with the tournament, but then it says she found an Incarnation and had an opportunity to compete? It would work better to remove the first sentence of Paragraph 3 and change it to: "Claire Saphira wished for a life where she could live without worry..."
-The synopsis is LONG, too long. I would shorten it to something like this (althought this shortening is still long lol):
"Two years ago a meteor fell and decimated the southeastern lands of Gaia, turning them into wastelands shrouded in white fog with towers, caverns and ruins rising and falling without pattern. None of those who witnessed the blazing calamity lived to tell the tale, and few who ventured in ever returned.
Those brave enough to enter were rewarded with an 'Incarnation,' a partner capable of defying the natural laws as humanity knows it. Before long there