Rap 'er to bank

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Description

The year is 1918, and in the aftermath of the great war a new power source has been found. Wyrmbone is rapidly replacing coal. In the pit village of Eshbank, Rowanne works to earn a living for herself and her sister as a hewer. But with the demand from the war effort keeping iron in short supply, holding the sidhe at bay is difficult, and not everything that lurks in the deep drifts is a friend. warning characters in this speak pitmatic, explanations for words will be given in AN alongside relevant info. (Not advised reading if you suffer from claustrophobia).

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2021
Author: Brights

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.9/ 5.0
Followers: 14
Views: 6,930

Chapters(22 total)

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Community Reviews(2)

KeaoRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I had to give this 5 stars just for the unique and unusual setting and lore, despite feeling like a work from someone newer to writing I couldn't bring myself to lower the score on that count and instead kept it as high as I think the background and story hooks deserve.
I really hope the rest of the story continues along this vein (or seam) so that it can truly live up to the 5 stars this short intro recieved!
CShadrockzRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
Overall: The plot is something to keep with. It has enough historical grounding that is seems possible and has the reader questioning the MCs reliability but the magic addition really gives it the intrigue and keeps turning those pages. The narrative could use some revisions in order to weave in the magic a little more believably/naturally and to introduce characters a little more slowly. The transitions from the scenes need a clearer segue but honestly, non of that takes away from the actual want to read the plot because it's so unique. I'm excited to see where the next part of this story goes.
Style: Enjoyed the language preservation but the narration comes across as an Oral story. It just needs adjusted slightly to accomadate the reading of the story but maybe the oral-like delivery is on purpose. Going from this intenese mining shaft scene, to a magic one made sense and felt natural. But going from those to this scene of reality - meeting new characters and settling into a normal setting didn't feel natural and jarred me from the story. I settled back in quick but I think this could use a better transition or transition slower. I loved the side-story scenes about Cutty and the Wyrm. Would've liked them weaved in a little earlier to add more tension to the mine scenes and to give more believability when the MC develops something new. I appreciate that the writer doesn't rely on the dialogue to move the plot - since most of the dialogue is in a different dialect, it would be hard to understand what was happening. Good style choice.
Grammar: The narration isn't grammar-great but it's readible and flows like an oral story. It could use some better punctuation use but I'm not the best at this either. So I liked how the writer did it as it was easy and fluid to read.
Story: This is where this story excels. The plot is excellent. Without spoiling anything - the story jumps around and creates a good line of mystery and tension. Makes you want to keep reading to see wher