Pokemon : Lazy New Life

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2023

Author

love dem fanfix

• mugged
  Jan 10, 2023

Reviews

Community Reviews(2)

• GraySinwolfRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  It’s a very entertaining story. I’ve laughed my ass off and I’ve been itching for more. Your writing gives me “he who fights monster” vibes. And I love that.I keep checking every month to see if you blessed me with a new chapter. It’s been 7 month my boii!!! I’ll continue to keep checking this page to see if you drop us a new gem.
• Zenith22Royal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  I gotta say, first and foremost, there are grammatical issues, especially with quotation marks, commas, and sometimes paragraphs having extra spaces for some reason. Yet all in all, it'd understandable and not too distracting. Formatting really.
  The story isn't novel, even a bit cliche, but is self aware enough to not focus on thowe aspects and just focus the more unique aspects such as the main character. Which is to it's betterment because his abrasive personality is fun most of time and entertaining when contrasting to the world he's in now.
  The only truly big red flag I can foresee is the MC becoming a Gary Stu. That's not because of his op-ness (it's a little ridiculous and funny how much so) but his relationship with others. Most Gary Stu have this weird ability to emotional manipulate (without good reason) people into hating or loving them with no complex inbetween. The MC so far has had this love him or hate him dynamic with most characters introduced. This is early days for the story so could be liable to change, and I hope it does truly. Gary Stu ruin whatever interesting conflicts could happen or do happen in a story imo, be it relationships or crises from the environment because this strange ability usually detracts from any consquences or benefits a conflict might bring.
  This is also a personal issue, but I know the MC is powerful from the onset but telling me from the narration is one thing but actually showing me with descriptions and scenes. It's still early days but I'mma big stickler for "show don't tell" writing. You tell me he's powerful? Show me, simple as. So far the powers the MC has have been shown to us in character interactions buts a little more descriptive in scenes where the MC actually uses them in depth would be fantastic. Edit: I forget to add this, but the reason for the "more show" request is due to the immense amount of advantages the MC has been gifted. In my mind, that warrants a "show" of each specific ability at least once. Oth