Origin Of The Forsaken
Self-Published
Community Rating
Description
Randomly selected by the system Darius is sent to another world to learn and grow stronger to prepare his world for the coming threat.
Chapters will generally be released Monday, Wednesday, and Friday.
(This is my first attempt at writing, criticism and suggestions are encouraged.)
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2019
- Author
- TheRealCT
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 3.5/ 5.0
- Followers
- 68
- Views
- 54,346
Chapters(51 total)
Reviews
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Community Reviews(3)
- JeanDRaccRoyal Road★★★★★ 5.0The story is good.
The problem is some tenses and sentence structure. Something that can be made better. I hope to motivate the author to continue writing. Low scores in RR just kill a story and sometimes the author's motivation.
I like how you used the separations and purple font for the differentiation of the system.
Thanks. - Pandora's ReaderRoyal Road★★★★ 4.0So far the story is good and it has potential the only thing that i'll say thats bad about the story is the grammer sentances go through tenses when they should be in one form not the other if thats fixed then the story will be great.
- F.L. RileyRoyal Road★★★ 3.0The story has potential, but the bad paragraph formatting is frustrating. It's hard to tell who is talking most of the time as dialogue is just mashed together piece-meal. If the author could fix that, I'd give it another go, but as it is, I've had to unfollow.