ONI RŌKURA: A Slice of Life Revenge Story with a Reincarnated OP Protagonist

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2022

Author

LambentTyto

• Chapter II—Learning Curve
  Apr 4, 2022
• Chapter I—Persistent Bad Luck
  Apr 2, 2022
• Prologue—Oni Isekai
  Apr 2, 2022

Reviews

Community Reviews(5)

• Akten DreamsRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  Overall I like the start of this Oni Japanese-themed story.
  It is a bit of an interesting take since there is very little themed around the culture of Japan.
  Style Score; The style is a bit unusual and since the story features Rokura and her God, it shows that it has potential.
  Grammar Score; The Author himself said that he was posting stuff not edited to a great degree, in favor of more chapters. Sadly, the reviewing process does not work like that and I have to give it 4 Stars. There are some sentence structures that could be improved for a better reading flow and there are times types appeared. I am sure a nice little edit tour from the start will fix those.
  Story Score; The story itself can go in quite a few ways and the persistent bad luck can be a very good progression tool if used right. Only by reading more chapters will I know the real score for the story but so far it's good.
  Character Score; Here I will have to give 4 Stars for one simple reason. One's memories define the person you are and the person you want your character to be. If you take that away it's like making a new character that you can mold however you want without being beholden to their past and the baggage they carry. The story is as much about the Oni God as it is about the Oni girl, so him taking away her memories to a large degree and manipulating her is expected. After all, to God's, it is like playing with toys and not people. I just hope that the Author will flash out her backstory as she relearns her past and not just write it for us readers.
• BladeGripRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  The way the story begins follows the stereotypical beginning of an "Isekai" story. You know, MC dies, meets a god in the afterlife, is given a gift of power, and starts a new life in the other world. But here's a twist (or multiple in that matter): The MC is not a human to begin with, she dies a gory death being murdered, the god is quirky, the power she got has annoying drawbacks, and she resurrects in the same spot she died.
  Wait, the last one invalidates the 'isekai' aspect, doesn't it? Anyway, moving on.
  The style looks fine, although it needs some polishing. There was one occasion where I had to stop and decipher who was talking, and I couldn't discern whether the narrative was on which character's point of view at times. For the latter, perhaps it was just on me for not being too compatible with Third Person Omniscient writing style, if my assumption was right about the style you're going for.
  Grammar looks fine overall. Some typos and missing/added quote marks here and there, but you made a point that you had to sacrifice a bit of quality for speed so I can let it slide.
  Story and characters look good for me. There's a beginning, a sufficiently clear objective, some implied backstory, and we get to see some personality traits of the named characters shown.
  Keep up the good work and good luck.
• GuthanRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  So overall I am satisfied with the story. This is my personal pet peeve on what's dragging the story down.
  Shinjiro is not a character I like. His motivations and ideals are historically incorrect for this time period. His constant moralizing is generally annoying. I actually found the boat arc enjoyable solely since he wasn't there.
  The author should have just forgotten about him, things were better off that way.
• OldToadRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Overall, a very intriguing start to what promises to be a delightfully bloody journey, complete with mad gods, revenge, and wonky stats. Im really excited to see where this story goes next!
  Style:
  Really well done by the author when it comes to the style. There's a nice mix of pacing in this story that keeps the reader engaged. Action is very well described. There's never a point where I didn't know what was going on, which, atleast for me, is very a common thing when reading webnovels with lots of action. It all plays out very smoothly. Overall, probably the strongest aspect of this sotry.
  Grammar:
  Overall good, but a few typos here and there. Not distracting at all, though. Some longer sentences that could use a touch up. On the other hand, there's also some great parts where the author pauses and describes things with one word sentences. Technically, I'm not sure if that's correct grammar wise, but it doesn't matter, since it gives the story great atmosphere.
  Story:
  So the compelling idea here is that MC gets to be reborn with randomized stats.  Specifically, she gets very op powers, but terrible luck. Basically, the MC has the best worst luck. I really like this concept, and I think ther first chapter(really the prologue) is a great setup fo this kind of story. Specifically, there's a part where the MC gets revenge on her parent's killers and wipes out a bunch of bad mages...and then immidiately falls off a cliff. What fun!
  Character:
  This for me was the least polished part. It's not distracting, and still loads better than most web novels, but i would say that it's definitely the area that needs the most improvement. There is alot of dialogue that meanders and doesn't add too much to the story. Shaping up and tightening these parts could make this story into a truely great gem.
  Great story, really hoping this fic continues for a long time!
• Lucky croissant lRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  When i started this story i  expected the mc to be cold..revenge based and you know focused on revenge...i mean its not my fault that I didn't expect an  oni to have morals or be indecisive little brat....even the rage moments didn't satisfy me....the mc is unexpectedly moral.....SPOILER..i mean she cares about life in city right after her parents were probably kidnapped from there...ITS Just not  vibing with me so cya later