One Step At A Time
Self-Published
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Description
Keagan Keita is an intern at Lezzaro, one of the worlds largest pharmaceutical companies.
His normally monotonous life takes a turn for the worst when one of Lezzaro's top executives starts obsessing over him.
It starts out as a small and relatively harmless incident, but things take a turn for the worse and eventually Keagan realizes that he's already in too deep.
UPDATE: Things have definitely taken a turn for the worse and Keagan has found himself stuck between a rock and the Astali family. There's also trouble brewing in the Lezzaro research and development building.
What could this mean for Keagan and can he escape the hole he's sinking into?
Information
- Status
- Completed
- Year
- 2021
- Author
- Benjamin Mwakonya
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- Rating
- 3.0/ 5.0
- Followers
- 5
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- 812
Chapters(25 total)
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Community Reviews(2)
- KYRobinRoyal Road★★★ 3.0I started reading this and thought it was a system novel, and that was when I was surprised after finishing the chapter knowing that this was game fallout fan fiction. 😮
I should have read the explanation, but don't worry too much and the chapter is still good. The author seemed to write this fan fiction, which is familiar with the mechanics and systems of the series.
The writing part is a little full. Perhaps the author can extend it to make it easier to read, but that doesn't matter to me. It doesn't stop the fun of the story so far. I read this chapter again and imagined it as a video game sequence of the game, and for some reason it works. This may be great fan fiction.
Again, I never thought it was fan fiction. Hopefully the author will tell a good story from the fan fiction of this video game.
Keep it up, author! 🤗🤗🤗🤗🤩🤩🤩🤩 - mf_aureliusRoyal Road★★★ 3.0The style is basic but not bad. The plot flows chronologically and most of the progression makes sense. However, its also been done often, the thriller after thriller intersperced with slice of life content. I found that the forward momentum of the plot flagged around chapter 10.
The story concept was interesting and could have been compelling. The names out of an online name generator were... not so compelling. The author chose to do scifi, but in a way so unimaginably uninspired if you were to replace some of the names, this could be a story about "The Office" selling paper in 1990. You can tell the futurisitc aspects are not the focus, and that's okay. No excuse for barely explaining the setting. I also think the author doesn't understand BDSM. They tried to add these elements to the story and they just don't fit. Commiting to sex thriller or horror thriller would have been better then trying to combine them while not understanding a core concept.
The grammar is the part of the book I have the least problems with; its good. Very few grammatical errors. I mostly nitpicked stuff like capitalization where it wasn't needed and syntax.
The character score is where this story completly flops. The entire story is predicated on an average guy turning down a sexy yandere. He was offered her body on a platter... and he turned her down??? Completly broke my immersion as it doesn't make sense for an unmarried gamer to deny free sex, even with an admittedly creepy chick. The MC is erratic for no reason at first, but his behavoir is explained in-universe. The other characters in the office feel pretty realistic. Everyone outside the office... not so much. The females (outside the MC's job) are one dimensional and strange. The males are all streotypes out of a kids movie. I'm not sure which gender is more cringe.
Overall, read at your own risk. I always advocate for reading the whole first chapter to get a feel for the author, but in this case you may want to read to about chap