One Sin

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2016

Author

nEoQuIcKsiLvEr

• A little hiatus to rewrite back chapters.
  Jan 7, 2017
• Chapter Fifty - Paradise Lost:2
  Dec 22, 2016
• Chapter Forty-Nine - Paradise Lost:1
  Dec 20, 2016
• Chapter Forty-Eight - Crusade:7
  Nov 19, 2016
• Chapter Forty-Seven - Crusade:6
  Nov 2, 2016
• Chapter Forty-Six - Crusade:5
  Oct 28, 2016
• Chapter Forty-Five - Crusade:4
  Oct 26, 2016
• Side Story - Aide to the Queen - Crusade:3.5
  Oct 20, 2016
• Chapter Forty-Four - Crusade:3
  Oct 17, 2016
• Chapter Forty-Three - Crusade:2
  Oct 11, 2016
• Chapter Forty-Two - Crusade:1
  Sep 30, 2016
• Chapter Forty-One - Advent:7
  Sep 28, 2016
• Chapter Forty - Advent:6
  Sep 20, 2016
• Chapter Thirty-Nine - Advent:5
  Sep 15, 2016
• Chapter Thirty-Eight - Advent:4
  Sep 8, 2016
• Chapter Thirty-seven - Advent:3
  Sep 2, 2016
• Chapter Thirty-Six - Advent:2
  Aug 29, 2016
• Side Story - Oracle:2 - Advent:1.5
  Aug 26, 2016
• Chapter Thirty-Five - Advent:1
  Aug 22, 2016
• Chapter Thirty-four - Dharma:7
  Aug 21, 2016

Reviews

Community Reviews(10)

• AomineZakyRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Dark Fantasy. These two words fit this story perfectly. It shows the truth behind a world of monsters and demons and how both war and peace corrupt a person. Brilliantly done if I might add.
  Style: Ever watched TheOtherGuys ? When they explain about how a story should be told, its exactly like this and is beautifully well done. Starts at middle with bits of flashbacks varying in length depicting the start of the story and progresses to the end. I really can't see anything wrong with this story's style of writing. The length of each chapter is also great.
  Story: Epic and Dark. Not action-fighting-dying type epic, but more to epic in its raw sense. It depicts how humans act when seduced by sex, power and wealth beautifully. With fighting scenes here and there that aren't prolonged yet aren't too short either. The description of each scene is well done and the emotions of the characters can be felt. Betrayal and Corruption are the themes present in each and every chapter.
  Grammar: Nothing to say really. The errors in writing are few and far between and even those are acceptable errors like a typo, an additional or lack of a letter or minor grammatical errors. They aren't present in every chapter, and most likely a person won't even notice them due to them being drawn in by the story.
  Character: A slightly naive MC but he gets the job done and does that which others would not be able to. He remains himself throughout the story, meaning he's consistent with his personality being slightly hypocritical, like all humans. it reminds you that the MC is human and not trying to be a hero even with the title he has. MC isn't OP like in most other stories as he has an actual hard time fighting to survive against a kingdom that wants him dead for his Sin.
  Overall: I really like this story. The only problem is the shortage of chapters, lol. I want more. but considering each chapter varies from 1500-2000 words, i am willing to wait for more. a telling of the world as it is and not a
• JormungandRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Everything planned perfectly!! the unique and unusual story, a Strong concept and The characters, all have a strong personality and reasonable.
  It is a dark fantasy so there are no willy wally happy go lucky kind of type, This story telling us there are always a light that shine darker then the darkness it self and vice versa.
  It is for people who understood that in this world there are no evil and goodness.. it just individuals thriving for happiness...
  the concept really real and strong...
  Please continue this work!!! Thank you!!
• UdumoriRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  This story is dark, gritty, and unforgiving, but I find that it is also believable in its psychological realism. Usually, I enjoy my games and fiction bright and cheery anime-style.
  The world as it is now has plenty wrong enough with it after all. But the author has wrought here a masterfully woven tale.
  Style
  The narration is done in first-person, with the flow so far usually being something like:  plot progresses -> some internal monologue giving us the MC's take ->more plot -> backstory and history about MC  &c &c.
  This all happens within a chapter, and the flow and pacing never felt wrong or out of place. It's what I wanted when I wanted it, and I want more of it.
  Story
  I thoroughly enjoy this brutal tale. Precisely because of its particular brand of brutality.
  The world is brutal but the MC is not.
  And most of all, the world though brutal is neither mindless nor meaningless in its violence.
  To the MC or to the common folk in this world, things might not make much sense, just like in our own little world under the firmament.
  That's another thing I enjoy about this story - its gritty realism.
  The way people think, act, react, behave and are affected by the goings on in their lives and of the world at large is done in a knowledgeable and imaginative way.
  And all of this in a fantasy setting! The best of all worlds.
  Grammar
  The grammar is a little bit lacking in polish. A few times I would auto-correct certain phrases or sentences in my mind and read it over again. Some mistakes here and there, with a few that made me question if the author was a native English speaker. For instance, the author wrote 'more softer' or 'more calmer' - something of the sort. It'd either be 'more soft' or just 'softer'.
  All in all though, the story is definitely sensible in its grammar and perfectly enjoyable.
  Character
  I pretty much agree with Matbag248 in this department.
  The MC let me unto his being, allowing me to see the world as he views it, letting me experience who he is as a b
• swagReaderRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  if you are looking for an anti hero story in rrl then this is the story for you.
• onlyaresRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  1st sorry for my english
  i love this story, its a nice change for the trends in rrl. the only regret its the lack of romance, i love a little of romance in the story, but its understable in this story.
• loeweiyangRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  Chapters read as of this review is Ch. 22 Bane.2
  I've read many stories before and i can pretty much guarantee that this story is one of the best, if not the best in the whole website.
  I understand that many people can not stomach dark stories and will be unable to bear this story, but those who could would understand the profoundness of this story.
  The beginning might be confusing, but the story explains itself in due time and slowly complicates itself. The style of the story constantly bringing me between feelings of loathing, hatred, disgust and relief, then back to disgust.
  Long story short, a story that is able to induce emotions as good as this is damn worth your time, try it.
• Matbag248Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  As at Chapter Eight
  The style is good, nothing too long, nothing too short. It has good flow, albeit after the early part of the first chapter. The flow was pretty much unbroken throughout.
  The story is good, from the perspective of a main character that would normally be a support character. The world isn't dumped on us but the author gives enough information to feel it. The way the author spins the tale and how things connect to each other has been thought through enough that it makes sense, and at least feels right.
  The author uses emotion well and in abundance. It allows us to ride along with the main character instead of having a far off perspective. Much of the story is shown not told, which is definitely a plus compared to other stories.
  The grammar doesn't affect the flow so that is pretty good, it's not perfect in some areas but it isn't critical. Overall, I would give it a 98% to Grammar.
  The main character is a nice guy who commits a major crime in the eyes of the people. The one thing that separates it from half baked characters is that he sticks with his personality and perspective of the world (as it is told to us). He isn't a robot, he doesn't calculate.
  The other characters aren't very fleshed out because they aren't seen that much. However, the people set against the main character are fleshed out enough to understand their motives and actions.
• datkillerdudeRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  This story is great, but my take is like the "groundbreaking idea" review, I'm actually glad I wasn't the only one who noticed the quality drop, let me explain mysef, and be aware that this is not an in depth analysis, this is what I think, my enjoyment and my opinions along with my ideas and sadly some disappoinments. Be aware of some spoilers but nothing to big.
  One Sin is well writen in the most part, the idea is really cool, for those who are knowledgeable in the genre of reincarnation-isekai, imagine Mushoku Tensei but instead of being Rudeus our main focus we follow Ruijerd, and for those who don't know what I'm talking about I mean this story's main focus is what in any other would be a secondary character, not "the hero" but the hero's right hand, close to the spot light but not quite in it.
  It also plays with the reincarnation trope in its own, unexplored or at least less popular but well thought (and here) entertaining way.
  Demitri is great, at least if you've read Sin and Redemption, Sin is just sad and shows you how much of a noble and kind soul he is and how this One Sin has lead him to so much sorrow. Redemption is mirk and tragic and shows you how tortured, broken and concequentely naive he can be. I consider both arcs top tier and just excellent to begin this story, to meet and begin to know about our MC, his world and its circumstances, which pretty much hooked me in, but is also Demitri in part what is putting me off.
  The story flows, as other reviews have noted, with many flashbacks and back stories, everytime Demitri loses conciousness or meets some shadow of his past he lives nightmares or is drown by melancholy bringing him to reminescence better happier times, or hurtful tragic moments, or just plain sad memories.
  Now where is the problem if Sin and Redemption were so good? Well Brand is where things get weird, or bland whatever you may call it... Sin and Redemption were on point, even if you dislike Demitris you can actually expect him to act
• martderRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  First time making a review so pls bear with it. Ill do a comparison between the part where he realizes the truth.
  Before: everything is magnificent actually. The depictions of anger, fear and gore are perfect. I feel disturbed just by reading it, which is a compliment. The story is great and unique as well. A few only think of writing a summoning story from the pov of the local people. The characterization is also great. Each person has his unique personality so i can remember them to a fault.
  After: this is where almost all things break loose. The pace becomes inconsistent and extremely fast at times. The new characters that are being introduced only have glimpses of their personalities. Although it is not a problem since it is still a handful of them. Moving on, i think he author is losig his touch at depicting dark emotions. The scenes are leaving me unsatisfied unlike the before part.
  Grammar: typical typos here and there.
  Transition: i think this is the main problem. The req emotion here is despair which i think you really lack  at showing. Even the crying scenes lack it. This applies to before and after btw.
  So i strongly suggest that you reread and edit the parts you think you are lacking coz your idea is awesome and i hate to see an awesome go to waste. Hope this helps.
  To fellow readers, read this story. PLS. This is fantastic.
• HoriusRoyal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  Style: In this style many paragraphs can cause brain cancer.
  There are many weird things about the style which can make reading quite a pain. As an example, we will look at a paragraph from the first chapter. In this paragraph the MC is fleeing from a former friend, just after he threw a smoke bomb at her and others that hunt him.
  “I sprinted even faster as I dodged obstacles only to look back and saw her chasing me. She wasn't tricked, she expected my smoke bomb. Her white armor shone through the gray dark smoke. Even with her face scowled, her beauty would not leave her. Her contorted face was mad with anger and her golden hair violently shook in the wind. I saw that with every step closer she came towards me the rage in her ocean blue eyes deepened. I always knew her as a cheerful kind hearted girl. I never imagined she would've become this wretched and wicked looking. It's probably my fault and I knew it.”
  “I sprinted even faster as I dodged obstacles only to look back and saw her chasing me,” first half is alright; he went faster while still dodging. Then comes a ‘only’ which makes no sense. The only here implies that him running and dodging is just done to look at her chasing him.
  “She wasn't tricked, she expected my smoke bomb. Her white armor shone through the gray dark smoke,” first, a smoke bomb is not tricking someone, but rather taking their vision; knowing that a smoke bomb is comming is only of limited use. After all, she is still in the smoke, otherwise the armor couldn’t glow though the smoke. Dear MC, she can’t see you, you can just change your direction or run further ahead since she can’t see you and the hindrances that you previously dodged. Speaking about, look ahead while running in a forest.
  “Even with her face scowled, her beauty would not leave her,” is the MC REALLY in danger when he does have the time to appreciate her beauty? Also, didn’t we say that she is in the smoke screen? Did you keep looking back until she managed to get out of the