New Death

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Description

Neo's life is changed when he ignores his mother's warnings. But Death gives him a chance to find out that his world is a whole lot bigger and more chaotic then he thought, within the worlds of enclosed magic that exist, the trials, tribulations and pain that he will endure. Ending in his confusion that will grab and shift his morals and thoughts about life and death.

(Author notes: This is a first draft and first story released with most of it edited for grammar, the first 8 or so aren't edited by Teaklead. As for the story none of it is set in stone. I'm here to learn, get better and would love reviews and criticism in order to improve.

Thank you

Starfury

Book cover art created by Jessica Dueck - Starscoldnight. Check out her websitewww.jessicadueck.com)

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2018
Author: Starfury

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.0/ 5.0
Views: 335

Chapters(34 total)

What readers say about New Death

“The premise is interesting but the style and grammar really drag down the story. Run on sentences, info dumps, and similar issues abound. I didn't notice many spelling errors which is always a plus, but the constantly awkward dialogue really stripped immers…”
chakforRoyal Road2.5 / 5

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chakforRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
The premise is interesting but the style and grammar really drag down the story. Run on sentences, info dumps, and similar issues abound. I didn't notice many spelling errors which is always a plus, but the constantly awkward dialogue really stripped immersion.
Once edited for clarity I think it shows promise.