My Fantasy World

Self-Published

Community Rating

Description

One day our Protagonist Damon Grey, received a relic. Turn out this relic is the gateway to another world. Within this world, he could create anything and everything.

He thought of land and land appeared he thought of life and the trees bloom.

Creating my mini-worlds, what can go wrong? Come along with me on how I became known as the Creator of worlds.

Update every Sunday or Wednesday( 4 Chapter every month)

Information

Status: Cancelled
Year: 2021
Author: boi the king

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Rating: 3.9/ 5.0
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Community Reviews(5)

boi godRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
My Fantasy World has an interesting concept, and is going strong but the only bummer is the update pace
Style:
Again, the concept of someone inheriting the power to create a world has an incredible amount of potential. It's clear that the author does have a plan for the overarching story. it's potential is vast and the Author is doing a good job in contructing it's foundation.
Story:
I understand that at the time of this review it's still early days for this work.
Grammar:
Typos, punctuation mistakes, are rare, but there are some sentences that just make no sense, etc or a bit hard to chew.
Spoiler
I let the small orbs of light go and I flew back and said ''let there be light.'' And the white orbs of light grew bigger and bigger ten times, a hundred times bigger, even more, and it finally stops. It was now the size of the earth-moon, I reach closer to the light and I touch it and it envelops my hand, I didn't feel heat nor did I feel cold it didn't feel like anything. It was just pure light with no purpose, so with a thought, I send red energy into the white orbs of light.
This show the creativity of the Author in world building.
Character:
There are some characters in the story so far. Some of them are well written. It's obvious the author attempted to add nuance to one, while setting up some character growth in the second. There are some nameless background characters.
Give this story a try. Read till chapter 14.
Maverick26Royal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Grammar -
I noticed that there were a few places in the story that had weird syntax and incorrect spelling. This did not bother me much but it was a little distracting sometimes.
Style -
The style of this story is very interesting. The narration frequently focuses not only on the main character's perspective but also the perspectives of several characters within the world that he develops. This allows the author to illustrate a great view of different factions within the world the main character rules over and how this world progresses over time.
Story -
It's really fascinating how the story centers around the main character developing the world that he rules and him trying to make it a better place. It's interesting seeing what kind of improvements he will make and how he will go about making them with the vast amount of power he has within this world. The story also feels very grand as the history of this world unfolds.
Characters -
The main character has an intriguing personality. He's usually ambivalent about what happens inside the world he's developing and is able to make calm decisions about what steps he should take next in improving it. He does still show a great amount of compassion sometimes concering the people who inhabit this world. Aside from the main character, there are other interesting characters but they have not gotten that much time yet to be explored in-depth.
Overall -
This story has a really intriguing premise and fascinating world building with how the main character is advancing an entire world with the use of an incredible quantity of power. It's a very interesting and enteraining read.
Ayer12Royal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Overall, the novel is interesting, albeit quite similar to Low Dimensional Game in many ways. This made the premise less fresh for me.
Style and Grammar: Where this story suffers the most. In the first chapter and in a few other instances in other chapters, the book will change from third person to first person and then back to third randomly. There are quite a few grammar mistakes and phrasing problems that would get better with the assistance of an editor; since I've mentioned phrasing, it is also quite odd. The word choice is strange.
Story: I've always liked stories like this, so if you can get past all the grammar and style issues, there's a fun read deep down. It's an interesting premise and concept which hasn't been done that much. Imo, however, Low Dimensional Game does the same thing in a better way.
Character: Another thing where the story suffers. Damon feels quite flat, since we haven't had enough time to actually get to know him as a character, and the others are no better.
Overall, I suppose I'd kinda recommend it. There's a good story deep down and you can tell the author does have a vision. Not bad
BullerRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Not for me, if im being honest with you. There was some initial good sides of it all, the style actually showing some promise early on. Yet... then it just went on and on, giving more exposition than the format could survive. I get what is trying to be done, yet I just couldn't feel that it was done well. The grammar might also need a few check-ups but I don't feel it's that bad. Whatever.
4/5 from me.
MrBadWithNamesRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
(TL;DR at the bottom)
To behin with I would be lying if I said the story wasn't still pretty rough around the edges; it feels like a beta for the story, please keep this in mind if you intend to pick the story up!
Style:
I'm always down for a story where the tension comes not from battle from from literaly anything else; in this case the tension comes from Damon's world and our fears of whether it will prosper of fall apart.
The pacing it a bit fast and the character's thoughts aren't seen all that often.
On the up-side, the world building is great, the progression of the created world seems realistic (if a little too fast) and I'm honestly interested in what will happen to this little world rurled by an (in my opinion) underqualified god.
Story:
The story is essentially a log of Damon and the progress in his world, one chapter he works of making the world, well, a world and the other he creates life.
With such a heavy focus on world-building I hoped for some more time spent to develop these features, but the story definitely slows down a bit as soon as intelligent life in introduced!
Grammer:
Yeah, that's the biggest problem with this story; which is good because it means that the soruce material is pretty good if you can get past the grammer!
Please not that the garammar after chapter 3 is generally better and by chapter 10/11 I was only able to find 1/2 issues (I wasn't picky with the commas or anything.)
Character:
Damen is a funky character to rate; he goes along with LITERALLY BEING GOD on the spot, seems pretty nonchelant about talking to his creations like a god and even gains some super-strength/speed/perception in the later chapters.
While that's not the experience I would have thought up, it's sitll a very solid character that you will find does his job as god pretty well.
I would like to see more comments from him, how he feels etc - but that's still a possibility for the future chapter!
TL;DR:
Grammar kind bad but if you're cool with it give the story a