Monsters as Men(A good v evil story based on reincarnation in different worlds)

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Description

The Monsters have taken over the universe. With their corrupting system behind them, which they use equally for power and recruitment, no one can compare to their strength. Good has been nearly eradicated, with its god slain, and the one who picked up its Mantle tempted to evil. In contrast, the god of Evil is growing, getting stronger. Only one person can defend the world against this threat. This is the tale of the Bluejay.

The magic system in this world is based on a few types of energy: Note(for Songs), Will(for Thought), Mana(for ordinary magic, because I felt like it), Spirit(for Spirit Magic), and Dominion(for Aura).

This is very much a work in progress. Any suggestions are welcome. This is set in the same world as my other story, Spirits of Eternity.

[participant in the Royal Road Writathon challenge]

Information

Status
Hiatus
Year
2022
Author
DestroyerXL

Tags

ACTIONFANTASYADVENTUREMAGICSTRONG LEADGAMELITPSYCHOLOGICALMALE LEADREINCARNATIONHIGH FANTASY

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Rating
3.8/ 5.0
Followers
18
Views
15,136

Chapters(40 total)

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Community Reviews(2)

  • NatarajaRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 4.5
    Many very good ideas, attention to the balance in the execution. The author should give more details on the background, on the stake, and take more care of the transitions between the different scenes.
    - Style & Grammar
    This is well written, no grammar, syntax nor style issues. The layout in the first chapter is a bit weird but good after that which makes the text pleasant to read. The style need some work to be more comprehensible.
    - Story
    The new world is a bit too mysterious at the beginning, so it's hard to get involved. We need more details. Will the monsters that the child and the planet have escaped be a danger again? Why did they flee if they could fight them? What is Monster as Man exactly? More information would do a lot to increase our interest. Maybe these are given in the other fiction of the author but they should be reminded in this one.
    - Character
    The characters are interesting but I see several problems. First the lack of name for the MC at the beginning, it's not a bad idea but it has a big disadvantage: the reader has more difficulty to get attached. Then the MC is too extraordinary, there is a good reason behind his existence, but it is not detailed enough as it is, it gives the impression of being far fetched. Where exactly does it come from? Why and how is it related to a planet. How can a planet be sentient and formulate thoughts in a way that a "human" can understand? These are all very good and interesting ideas, but they need to be justified in a way that doesn't give the reader the impression of falling into nonsense. The prologue is too vague from this point of view. Moreover I am always suspicious about characters that are too powerful because the lack of difficulties in the story makes it less interesting. For example the author creates expectations about the training with Nightingale but in the end he has nothing to learn, which is more disappointing than impressive. Same expectations with the flash back, but no he's already op.
  • Dan LaneRoyal Road
    ★★★★ 4.0
    Style: Long build up. It takes five chapters to get to what this reader would consider the main story. But the long prologue is interesting enough to keep reading. Strong hints of the power that the main character may someday weild.
    Story: Pacing is fast and the story engages this reader fairly well. Not bad for a new writer. Stats for the litRPG enthusiast foreshadow a monstrously OP protagonist in the future. In the present (starts around chapter 5 I think), he is still powerful but is also in the process of learning his powers and how to control them properly.
    Grammar: Needs work. Mostly just comma confusion and a few run on sentences that will probably be fixed by the time you read this. The first few chapters can be a little tough to get through. The author does improve in the latter two posted chapters. And he takes edit suggestions.
    Characterization: No major issues. Side characters could use a little fleshing out. The main character keeps this reader interested with just enough mystery.
    Conclusion: Suitable for all ages, the violence is not too gore-splattered and there is no smut. Worth reading for lovers of both fantasy and litRPG.