METAMORPHOSIS - devouring Its way to immortality

Self-Published

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Description

Follow the story of an entity that devours and absorbs Creatures and assumes their form. Watch as the results unfold as the entity starts its humble beginnings as a measly insect, and then eats its way to the top of the food chain, gaining self awareness every step of the way.

Information

Status: Completed
Year: 2015
Author: Manic_design

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.9/ 5.0
Followers: 514
Views: 264,502

Chapters(25 total)

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Community Reviews(8)

YorthRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Hi, this is a review of fellow Kazumi. You can take it as is, I hold no responsibility if you change things while heeding to this review and mess up. Don’t misunderstand my tone for being cruel and uncaring, it’s just that I don’t want to deal with the usual nagging of fanboys, not you personally.
With that out of the way, let’s start with my review.
First thing I see as I open the page is a sh*t load of colored words, some might be thrown off by it, others may go “OH Yeah!!”. I was part of the latter group, but with no reason in particular, it’s a random double-edged sword that I don’t advise using.
I start reading and I’m thrown off by a run-on sentence. Hey, I have no problem with those, but your first sentence should be catchy AND easy to read. You didn’t commit a “grammatical mistake”, it’s just that it throw off readers while you could have easily made it more poignant, catchy and easy to read. Here is a reworked version that is by no mean perfect, but it’s easier to read and suck you with the flow right away. “In the middle of the night, stars shone with dim, silver light, enlightening the spanning forestry. At the center of the large, dense forest, a small descending object illuminated the surrounding woodland.” Notice here that I separated the description of starlight from the falling object. “Less is more” but the other way around isn’t necessarily true. The reader’s focus span is by far the lowest, you can’t possibly make him take track of two things at once, dammit!
Okay, I read a little bit more and find something funny (other than the fragmented sentence where you used both “,” and “and”, just go with one. The only place where you use both is where you already wrote a good chunk of words before the “,” and just “,” wouldn’t cut it), you ARE the author, how can you not be confident of what you write. You said that it appeared to defy gravity, but it DID defy gravity, so eliminate that “appears”, it would make it much more powerful and shocking. I can g
RyujiiZurcRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
i like it , hope you make more in the futre
StarbringerRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
please no romance. why no have him pursue immortality and let the other things be secondary.
Dream45Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
i really enjoy a story that doesn't go out of is way and keep the same feeling since the beginning, all i can say i want chapters a little longer.
IThinkTherforeIAmRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I love this and am considering reading it a second time.
I've read tens of fictions on this site and this is already makes my top ten list!
Additionally, you did great on originality.
Manic_designRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I need Reviews! Critics, Opinions, Anything!
kazumi's review is pretty informative, i like.
Don_King_PupRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
So far this fiction is pretty great with the main character starting out as a shape shifting pest, and moving his/her way up the food chain.
The story had not much going on except for "IT" trying to survive. He survives by simultaneously shifting into other forms and feeding upon his prey to gain more forms. That's all I'm willing to spoil the fiction for others. If you want to know more about the story then go and read it.
The style so far is as great as I would want, though the mc can't talk it's understandable since he's slowly becoming more intelligent with each passing day.
Grammar is spot on so far that I can see.
Character is well... I'm not gonna put anything for that since the characters are animals and they can barely think for themselves and only go by their instincts on what to do. I'll leave it at 2 1/2 stars until you introduce intelligent lifeforms that can think for themselves. The mc so far though isn't Overpowered or immortal (yet) so that's a plus.
So far you waxed up on this story and it looks squeaky clean so far.
DarknesslillyRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
I enjoyed the idea and the story I really wish you would continue it. ^_^