Magnum Opus

Self-Published

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Description

Before Kyle Greenar was the great Magus Jade Eye, he was just a normal villager from the province of Rock grove. Spending his formative years working on his family's farm, where High Magus Theta Jade happened to be passing by. She saw his talent for magic and decided to take him as a disciple, taking him back to her guild Jade palace. Where he dove into the study of mysticism and the craft of magic head first. Spending hundreds of years to reach the heights of a Great Magus. But on the precipice to becoming a High Magus he was betrayed by his fellow disciple. Follow Kyle Greenar as he takes his new lease on life and follows a different path of magic.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2019
Author: nita112

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Rating: 3.6/ 5.0
Views: 264

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Community Reviews(2)

DraconisViridisRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
First, the grammar has more than a few whoopsie-doodles. There are moments where I have noted the exact opposite of the conveyed meaning to be the intended meaning.
The grammar has also affected the portrayal of the characters. When you cannot immediately grasp who is saying what, it can be quite frustrating to follow a conversation.
The style has no major problems so far.
The good news: the story is really decent. It's simply hidden behind poor grammar.
ContradictionRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
Back to the past second chance novel. Nice take on it where the mc gets his future knowledge piecemeal instead of all at once. Also it's more like life experience rather than knowledge of events.
At this point in time it looks like its headed to some sort of school or academy arc.
The reason I have rated this story as a subpar work, isnt because I think it's a bad story. I think the author has piss poor punctuation.
Throwing a period into the middle of a run on sentence is not a viable solution. Literally every paragraph has misplaced periods or commas. Every phrase "might as" has been turned to "mise".
Its even gotten to the point where multiple people speak in the same paragraph rather than hitting that enter key when it's a different person talking.
I think theres something here, mostly because I'm a sucker for second chance novels. But having grammatical errors every paragraph is hurting the readers chance to understand your ideas. Lucky for you, that's an easy fix.
Download grammarly.
Or read what you've written out loud.
Have a proofreader.
Then all your issues should be fixed. As of now though, this is a rough story. Avoid unless bored.