Lily Ex Machina [COMPLETED]

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Lily Voirgaire is a girl born with extraordinary talent in a field of magic largely considered useless. She was content with that, happy simply to work diligently towards her goal, her dream of becoming a machinist, a creator of non-magical constructs. She loved her work, and she was good at it. She would spend every day working to get better at her craft, and would eventually become the best machinist in the land!

That was what she thought. That was what was supposed to happen.

But then an accident leaves her with a grave injury and tosses her leagues from her home city. This is the story of her journey.

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Lily Ex Machina was completed in April 2017. To read the currently in-progress sequel(Seeking Elysium), please click >>HERE<<

[Rated 17+ for slight gore, cursing, and slight sexual content. THIS WORK CONTAINS STRONG HOMOSEXUAL UNDERTONES.]

Information

Status
Completed
Year
2015
Author
AcquiHime

Tags

LITRPGFANTASYADVENTUREMAGICFEMALE LEADROMANCE SUBPLOTSTRONG LEAD

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Rating
4.3/ 5.0
Followers
1,170
Views
1,978,962

Chapters(153 total)

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Community Reviews(10)

  • AceckertyRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    It was amazing, it had emotional scenes that broke my heart, really good world building, and a thumbs up for the magic system, it's such a unique idea! The way it builds up is awesome as well, all in all this is a book that I feel anyone who likes fantasy would like, it is a unique look on how the world would be if magic was on earth from the start.
  • BlockturtleRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    So far this has been going great by my standards. There are good, and bad parts to this story, but those are just opinion-based portions of the story as a whole.
    The development of the main characher 'Lily' is well-done though I'm not sure what kind of path she is going to be set on in the future.
    The level of general enjoyment, and/or personal satisfaction certanly makes this fiction qualified to be given a high rating, and I hope that this stroy will continue to grow.
  • RandomEnchanterRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 5.0
    Very good introduction to an interesting story topic. Looking forward to more chapters.
    The only improvement point that i would mention would be to have a bit more in depth detail about various topics. IE in the prologue, explain the gauntlet, Lily’s looks, her room/apartment etc. Give the reader a picture with words (or put in a picture) the author does a good job of this with the key points in the story but extra doesn’t hurt.
  • TasonRoyal Road
    ★★★★★ 4.5
    The grammar is great, smooth writing and excellent grammar work make this a great read.
    Of course the story itself is great which only further improves the grammar. The characters are solid and fun to read along with. The world and what we've learned of it so far, though small in ways, is enjoyable and leaves me wondering what else they may have made.
    The steady change of the main character through her experiences only strengthens the story in a firm way without pushing things to fast or slow.
    Read through many chapters in one go and now I'm looking foreword to the next one to come out.
  • AlgozRoyal Road
    ★★★★ 4.0
    I'm impressed... this Is really a great story for this site. It isn't perfect, but my god, It's a lot better than a lot of stories on this site that have more readers
    The MC power is really interesting, my only problem (and that Is just personal preference, nothing else) Is that I would like her power to be only inorganic/non sentient beings. I didn't really liked the whole "change how I can be aware while sleeping" and the "erasing my hate of moths" thing. I don't know if you will use this more later on, but I personally hope you don't.
    the rest of the MC power Is really cool, doesn't sound incredible powerful, and I really like how she made her arms and legs.
    I can't comment a lot on grammar since I'm not a pure english speaker (my second language, self taught) but for me, It's really good, with no problems with commas, paragraphs and other stuff.
    characters, they are really interesting, I just wished that the MC backstory would be more explained (like what she encontered In her studies and what other people thought of her because of her power.
    my only true negative about this story, Is that chapters feel too short. I understand that writing can  be hard (hell, I have some good ideas, but can't even put them on paper, that's why I only read), but try to write longer chapters.
    I hope you can give more and more chapters for us to read.
  • BlazingSeraphRoyal Road
    ★★★★ 4.0
    This was an enjoyable read, but there were some discrepancies between the beginning and end.
    Style: I think I enjoyed the style? It wasn't eye catching, but it wasn't bad either.
    Story: I gave it a 3/5 because of the weirdness between the beginning and end of the story. It was good once it got passed the 1/3 of the way mark, but there were certain elements introduced that never got touched on again.
    Grammar: I didn't notice anything out of place.
    Character: I really enjoyed the characters and their development, but I'm taking off 0.5 because the MC did some weird things that seemed a bit out of place at times.
  • Virtuosic NoirRoyal Road
    ★★★ 3.0
    Pros
    -Main character is original, well-established and fairly likeable
    -Overall satisfying plot despite bumps here and there
    -Remarkable dialogue/conversation that is engrossing and delves readers into story
    -Well-established steampunk setting
    -Strong depiction of emotional/fluffy scenes that definitely hit the readers deep down somewhere
    -Delivers messages relevant to current society despite portrayal in a dynamic that is usually not accepted socially, which is remarkable
    -Unrelated to quality of story but overall dedication and expense in reader enjoyment is also an important factor
    Cons
    -A rather subpar antagonist
    -Character diversity is lacking, particularly until a rather late part of post mid-story
    -Writing tells more than it shows, which implies missed potential especially with author's skill in dialogue
    -Timeframes and pacing are rather clunky
    -Writing can be inconsistent; description can use some work, and filler/info-dumps can be more well-established
    -Author shows aversity to long-term conflict and suspense is rather minimized
  • kitsunecommuneRoyal Road
    ★★★ 2.5
    The writing left something to be desired. It was relatively fine technically but I just lost more and more interest the further I got in.
    By the time the second Lolli was introduced, I had lost a good portion of my passion for it, and that kinda just killed the last of it.
    If you like that sort of thing combined with a decently cool mechanic system though, you should read it
  • jacobpaigeRoyal Road
    ★★ 2.0
    If you liked Arifureta, then this one's worth considering. I have trouble recommending it otherwise.
    Style: Perfectly fine, nothing really stands out one way or the other.
    Story: Lots of minor problems that snowball into an experience that's hard to maintain an interest in.
    1) The MC goes from being a normal person to being a sociopathic, mass-murderer in less than one second (literally) with the only explanations being either magic or a psychotic break (author hasn't said as of chapter 44).
    2) She taught herself to fight the most dangerous creatures in existence based on half-remembered beginner martial arts training manuals that she read several years ago, something that any competent fighter would tell you is total bs. It might be enough to win amateur fights but she'd get her ass handed to her by anyone capable who was at or near her power level.
    3) She's somehow able to react to things that are happening far to fast for her to be able to process them, with no explanation as to why. This is a pretty common one since most authors just assume that the only thing preventing people from being unstoppable killing machines is a lack of OP equipment.
    4) The power creep is extreme. A monster mentioned in the first arc as being one of the toughest to handle, a legendary existence that requires large groups of humanity's finest to even have a hope of defeating, is toyed around with and then killed by a new party member on her first day on the job with the very clear message that anyone else in the party could have done the same if they hadn't been holding back to see what the new girl could do.
    5) Others that escape me at the moment.
    Grammar: Quite good. Mistakes are rare.
    Character: Its hard to say. The mild Mary Sue aspects make it difficult to like the MC and the flaws in the personalities of the others might well be intentional given their inherent nature. The biggest problem here is probably the sociopathy thing again, but that too might be intentional as its been br
  • Mikolas_CageRoyal Road
    ★ 0.5
    I managed to read through this story to chapter fifty-something and couldn't read any more. Not only are the characters fairly two dimensional, they act like badly written anime characters. There are a huge amount of inconsistencies compared to reality. The final nail in the coffin was not only the implied relationship between a 20 year old and someone who "only looks like a 14 year old" but also the addition of an ACTUAL 13 year old having an implied orgasm. So like my title says: paedophilia with extra steps.