Lewy Body: The Demon in the Mirror [RRCM Winner June 2023]

Information

Status

Completed

Year

2023

Author

Aest Belequa

• Chapter Six
  Jun 26, 2023
• Chapter Five
  Jun 26, 2023
• Chapter Four
  Jun 20, 2023
• Chapter Three
  Jun 17, 2023
• Chapter Two
  Jun 12, 2023
• Chapter One
  Jun 8, 2023

Reviews

Community Reviews(10)

• AcciaRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  A well thought out narrative with both hartwarming and freezing truths to be told!
  Pieces of the picture you had, but didn't know, fit together with pieces you know you no longer have. This gradual and bitter revelation shows how sometimes the little you can do, can only be done too late.
• AtlasTelamonRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  This story is only six chapters long, but I can guarantee it is well worth the time you'll spend reading it.
  The characters you only get to know for a few chapters feel real. Lou, the perspective character, adores his wife, daughter, and grandkids. He has a well-earned and peaceful life, but this isn't the only aspect of his character. He often recalls his experiences in the past and relationships he has as well as his daily habits or hobbies. This is what makes him feel real. This is what he slowly begins to lose as dementia sets in.
  The symptoms of Lewy Body are well-researched and executed. I can understand why Lou would do the things he does. There are no happy endings, only the cold, hard bitterness of life.
  I recommend this story. Maybe consider making a review as well if it has impacted you in some way. This story deserves more love and attention.
• C.M.M.IdyllwildRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  "Unreliable narrator" taken to a beautifully heartbreaking extreme; the entire story is told from the point of view of an old man slowly succumbing to dementia. Flawless technical execution (no errors in spelling, grammar, etc.) with a sophisticated timbre and compelling narrative. Once again makes me wish there were a "Literary" tag that could be applied.
• Eli'sPencilRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  I would leave an advanced rating but I simply can’t. I am speechless. This is one of the best stories I’ve read in my life and I will never forget it.
  Thank you for writing this, I am inspired to tell stories that give readers the same feeling I have now.
• FeroneRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  I'm not crying, you're crying! It's just the rain, indoors, yeah. Indoor rain. That's a thing. No tears here.
  In all honesty I very much enjoyed this short story and liked how the internal monologue each morning was shortened each chapter, a very effective method that filled me with dread.
  Well worth the read.
• Gameknight2169Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  This story is not some long epic. This story is simple, yet effective and touching. This story is about dementia.
  Lou is an octogenarian who loves his wife Abby. Whenever Abigail brushed her hair, he could see the demon in the mirror. They’d shared the apartment for as long as he could remember. Just him and Abby.
  And each time the starting section of each chapter repeats, each time he wakes up, it becomes a little simpler. The writing is just a little less descriptive, a little less vivid, until you're barely left with any sort of a story at all.
  Because this great story about dementia is simple.
  Every day, the world loses a bit of its color, and you forget a little more about the setting of the story. You forget names, then places, then people, then time, and everything slowly slips away....
  This is a simple dementia story.
• Paco LopezRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  This story is a gentle reminder of the finite things in life. The people we love, the connections holding us together, the time we share together, the time we have to spend and the memories we have to hold. Losing any of them is a terrible loss. This story is a gentle reminder of what we must do everyday and that is to persevere. It is a reminder that we will lose it if we do not try to stem the loss.
  Wonderfully written, well executed, informative and as I said a gentle reminder of what we have to face as well as what our families face.
• UnholyBadgerRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  I would give a more detailed review but can't. This story scares me more than anything. It feels genuine and real and has upset me more than any horror story. The repeating but in the beginning is what really hammered it in. I went back over each variation to see what changed. I saw parts slowly fade away till nothing was left. This made me uncomfortable and that's an achievement. I need to go hug my grandma.
  Good job
• WoolenBlanketRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  This poignant tale, though brief, carries a profound weight. Dementia, a subject rarely explored in fiction, evokes a sense of dread and helplessness. Though I had known of this story for some time, I hesitated to actually read it. The reason for my reluctance quickly became apparent — I already knew its inevitable conclusion.
  While I could convince you to read this short work, its impact lies in its brevity. For those unfamiliar with the devastating effects of dementia, this story offers a glimpse into the heartbreaking reality of watching loved ones slip away, their memories fading, and their identities unraveling. The emotional toll is immense, leaving one to grapple with a profound sense of loss and despair.
• ZenkarnRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  This is not a story you will read to feel happy about yourself. You will not feel good, nor warm, nor pleasant. However, you will come out of this reeling at how such a simple premise can be done with amazing execution.
  It's not a story you can really talk about, but know this. The story is told well, with characters you can see. Your mind will fill in the blanks, and it's hard not to picture the scene with the emotion the author paints.
  Read this. You won't regret it.