Land of Athlora

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2015

Author

esliesma

• *Chapter 2 - Eighth Birthday
  Nov 4, 2015
• *Chapter 1 - Brothel
  Nov 3, 2015
• *Prologue - Era of the Gods and Beyond
  Nov 2, 2015

Reviews

Community Reviews(8)

• esliesmaRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Thank you for submitting my first review Jormungand. I am glad that you enjoy my novel.
  Ossicor thanks for the review and  for giving me tips. I’ll try to keep that in mind  as I write and I may go back and edit some of the previous chapters.
• RyokoRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  To be honest dispite it being smaller than some huge novels I've read it has so much more substance to it and this will be one of my favorites for a long time and I sincerely hope you continue it at some point :)
• tienunrealRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Writes very unique stories and best of all actually commits to writing instead of just dropping off the face of the planet like so many other authors on this site.
  My recommendations to improve this story is to flesh out the world more, its probably really annoying to write all those details, but I think it could really improve the story. Maybe just set aside a chapter or 2 to  go over all the continents where everything is and the politics of the world.
• darkness422Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  i am really loving this story along with your other one and was wondering if you were going to continue this one?
• JormungandRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  I love the story and it is really rare to find story that neither reincarnation nor transfering to another world type of story. Furthermore, it is a girl MC!!
  about the grammar i cant say anything because i am bad at it myself... but your ff is really easy to understand X D
  original story and the tragedy you put in there so beautiful and sad >.<
  Please continue on this FF!!!
  Ps : For those ppl who cant stand at MC not OP and also cant stand on tragedy type of story  please do not read it LoL
• osiccorRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  great story overall however i find that i can’t connect and feel anything for the character. You spent a lot of time developing plot and describing the action. However, you spent less time on the MC herself like
  what are her thoughts
  what are her emotions
  what are her ambitions
  …
  Following your story for now, you seems to have great potential
• Unchained-ZRoyal Road

  ★★★ 2.5

  I am so disappointed in the MC mindset really it seems somewhere in the point of the story shes gonna die for that minset, and how come she not using her second set of teeth it would have helped her in her battles but shes gives off that feeling that shes gonna be betrayed in the near future and so i think you should slowly change her mentality every time she kill a person/monster so she can get stronger and not be distracted so much by everything shes done its infuriating. Oh yeah have her fight more instead relying on her magic so she doesn't get overconfident of her magic skills.
• WolfieRoyal Road

  ★ 1.0

  (Just in prologue i found over 25 and some were eye gouging type, in first paragrapth of the first chapter found 3 so ... no just no)
  Not to mention plot holes. Like really? They have invented barely nothing during a few milion years!? Since civilisation was good enough to wage the WORLD WAR against the frost giants and not starve to death, and then we have few MILION years worth time skip before action takes place .... just mind damn dinosaurs went extinct just 66 milion years ago.
  PS: Do not rage, this is not a spoiler, all plot comment based on the prologue.
  PPS:  Not to mention that name of the mc managed to appear 5 times within 4 lines when all that was described was her journey ... NO, just NO.