Knight’s Fate: Knight and Princess

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Description

When war finally ended, the Arcadians sought retribution from the nightmares they had suffered from demonkind. A noble Princess had taken her mother's mantle in order to uphold peace between the two races so humanity could co-exist with their fellow demons in a kingdom without strife, but war paved the road to peace in blood and such path is but a fragile thread awaiting to be ignited by the flames of hatred. Another great war awaits, but will she be able to avert it?Second iteration of the Knight's Fate saga chronologically speaking. Yes I'm starting from the second because the first was an utter failure when I tried to write it, it just didn't fit the mood of a fantasy novel unlike this one. Though don't worry this doesn't mean you can't enjoy this one before I write the first. This is the first story I've actually published so I appreciate any feedback, be it good or bad just let me know what you think.

Information

Status: Completed
Year: 2021
Author: MyamotoHK

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Rating: 4.6/ 5.0
Followers: 63
Views: 86,891

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Community Reviews(3)

ChaosverserRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This story is very well written and deserves a review. Author, you've done a great job and the first chapter is fun and interesting. I liked the part in chapter zero where the two characters exchange sword strikes. Keep up the good work!
Writing a story can be difficult, but consistantly posting like you have is even more difficult. Don't ever get discouraged, you have talent as a writer and just need to keep grinding. I'm happy I got to read your story.
PotatoeRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
As a fan of history and adventure stories I must say this piece had me particularly interested, it caught my attention with how well our author stablished rules of their own world and how the characters abide to said rules from spellcasting to technology to even history itself!
Now for the review itself, while I believe my points are more of my personal taste, I do believe anyone who likes a nice storytelling without any of those boring and oversaturated tropes should read this story as it rewards the reader (in this case myself) for knowing what the rules are for the world itself which makes this even more amazing.
Style: I honestly like the way the story is presented, I'm just unsure how it'll finish, but as long as the author keeps it up, this can go for a maximum score just by how good this is.
Grammar: A few mistakes here and there, but nothing too bad to make it unreadable. Though I'd really prefer if there was an edit for the earlier chapters as it can get pretty confusing who is talking to who or thinking what.
Story: Almost a perfect score because the world building is very solid, interesting and it makes me want to know more about this fictional utopia (World of Arcadia, get it?)
Character: The only problem I have is that I don't know much about them, while they do feel like characters living in this fictional world, it's missing some more personal exposition for them. However the later chapters slowly explore more of their ego and sense of self, which makes me excited to read more.
In short, I believe this is a story worth following. It feels like the beginning of a great journey for the unknown and this is what modern literature has been missing, just the sense of freedom to travel around a fictional world, even if said world is beginning to crumble.
crazy cupcake wizardRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
This one is a bit different from what you'll usually see. There are many stories here, fantasies and Lit-RPGs and the like, that nowadays the only way people rate a story positively is how 'differently' they make it from the rest.
The story you'll see here, however, takes a different road. It decides to try to do what made those other stories so popular in the first place. A small band of traveling characters, A set of long-term goals, and a setting and world that takes itself seriously in its traditional ways.
Because it decides to be vanilla in its premise, the judgement of it now has to be a lot harsher, since there isn't any obvious gimmick to grab your attention. So the question to ask here is simple: Is it a good story? Why, that's what I'm here to answer!
To put it simply, I do think that the story here is 'good', as long as you come in knowing what to expect. If you want a serious story, I'd honestly reccomend it. It's a fantasy you can sit right along with the characters and go along a journey with. But there are a few issues (none so big I wouldn't want you to try this; keep in mind.)
First, the atmosphere. I feel that the setting around the characters needs just a bit more detail in the most intense moments, to really put you into it. The same goes with the who 'heat of the battle' thing. Having the story in the third person makes this more difficult, but there are already steps taken to fix this, such as showing how the characters shout in pain, how they'll show coordination and positioning as they decide how to fight, etc. But even still, I'd like for a bit more 'emotion', like ragged brathing in the middle of a prolounged battle, arms that shake as they lift a sword in exhaustion, or even the expressions of the masses of people that our main characters are about to go against. It's a difficult balance, making fight scenes fast and yet engaging, but I feel like our dear author is already further down that road than most, and so I talk about this in hop