Kind Demon King

Information

Status

Ongoing

Year

2022

Author

TheBarak

• 13-When it rains, it pours
  Nov 21, 2022
• 12-Reason for not saying no
  Nov 19, 2022
• 11-Consequences of not saying no
  Nov 17, 2022
• 10-Not so kind faces
  Nov 17, 2022
• 9-Daughter, adopted
  Nov 15, 2022
• 8-Maiden
  Nov 13, 2022
• 7-A mission
  Nov 11, 2022
• 6-Freedom
  Nov 9, 2022
• 5-Any plan that works is a good plan
  Nov 7, 2022
• 4-A nicer contact
  Nov 5, 2022
• 3-First contact with locals
  Nov 3, 2022
• 2-Fallen Soldier's Armor
  Nov 1, 2022
• 1-An ending, a beginning
  Oct 30, 2022

Reviews

Community Reviews(10)

• Benaiah FrazeeRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Okay, so this is the first time i'm writing a review and mainly I'm only writing it because no one else has written a review for this story
  First, it's pretty well written.
  Second I love the mentality of the main character nothing ever really faze him.I do wish that he would either decide that what happened in his previous life no longer matters or come to an actual resolution on his trauma, I am fully aware that that may not actually happen.Because this main character does read like an actual human being not a caricature, but I would like to see it head in one of those two directions.
  Hope this helps you're doing good.
• LittleSkellyRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Disclaimer: This is part of a review swap
  This story follows what appears to be a soldier who's transported to another world after dying. It focuses on race discrimination or in this case, that of beastkins. Very interesting premise and one that I don't think a lot of stories on Royal Road have done.
  Of course, I do have some troubles regarding the rating of this story. Let's go with the bad ones first.
  Grammar: The thing about the story is that it can be a little difficult to read in certain parts. Grammar isn't too bad, but can be a little messy. I can't say it messed up my reading as my tolerance for grammar mistakes/errors is pretty high. That and I am not a native speaker so it's best to consult other reviews or feedback.
  Style: The style is a lot more confusing. There can be certain places where it feels like a whole section seemed to have been skipped. This isn't too bad, but there doesn't seem to be a consistent way to indicate where it happened, making the reading flow a bit difficult.
  The structure of the story is a bit confusing. There are often large spacing with each paragraphs? Lines? Sentences? often grouped very closely together. I'm not sure what it's supposed to indicate.
  There are many parts where the dialogue lines are put into what looks like another paragraph when it shouldn't be. Making it looks like another person is speaking. I'm not sure how true this one is because I was reading on a phone for many of these chapters so it can look pretty confusing.
  The onomatopia of sounds might need a bit work to separate that into something readers can clearly indicate as sound effects and not someone shouting Crash!
  Story: This is one of the stronger aspects of the story. I like how the story involves race discrimination and how the story is likely heading toward a path where the mc is going to be helping the beastkin with resisting the injustices within their world.
  There are some things that need to be worked on such as clearly showcasing more of the
• PawnsRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  in short, the story is not bad but feels like a mess, or a first take, a draft version of a good story. it feels strange to read with dialogue all over the place and the chapters feel so small that it is like a summary. it is your typical mush of isekai Litrpg dark trope with a style that can cause a lot of readers who seek perfect grammar dip immediately, but it has potential at least.
  The character feels like it is built to be played in-game rather than having actions on their own, and those actions feel as if the author made them as if he were writing the chapters.
  the grammar is not bad, yet it feels strange to read without stopping and going "what the?" every few sentences. but I saw worse so I don't really have a problem with it.
  as for the story it feels again like a game but there is no description, and it is all left to the imagination which can be good for some readers, and very bad for others.
  to be honest it really feels like a first try in a famous troup, but the author is still going on so I assume it got better later on, that what I hope at least.
• Richard4gamingRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Overall the story is very good. A bit of a darker story, but still entertaining with some light moments. I like the protaganists inner toughts, having been broght into a world after loosing his own and dealing with his sence of failure (since he failed to protect his world). i am very much enjoying the story so far and i am very interested in how it will progress, chapters are a bit short, but that just shows that the story is good enough to make me wanna read it more. The only thing that makes me turn away from it is grammar. There are a lot of typos and sentences that you (the reader) will have to somehow figure out what they were suppose to mean. i don't want to be too critical about it, especially since the story is so good, but it really does make me not wanna read further. If the story is hard to read, people might not read it even if the story itself is great. Alright serious mode off, as stated earlier, story is great, keep it up, don't drop it (please don't im invested in this) Looking foward to new chapters!
• APerturbedReaderRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  TLDR; This book has its problems but is by no means a bad read.
  Style: The style is somewhere between novice and adept. The author tends to flip between POVs without warning and it can be very disorienting before you learn to recognize when and where they like to shift. The combat style is very rough in the beginning lacking much of the blow by blow in favor of speeding up the combat. This definitely weakens the story but it does improve as the author develops.
  Story: The main character comes from a world that is part Warhammer and part starship troopers without the fascist government. The MC gets reincarnated into a believable medieval fantasy world where they have slavery because it’s medieval.
  character: The characters don’t all feel the same and each has their own personality to some degree. The main character for once doesn’t just have the “get strong” mentality that screws up so many other stories. He does have a bit of an OP taste but considering he was effectively a space marine in his past life it’s alright in my book. One issue I do somewhat feel is that some of the characters are too quick to trust especially when given their backstories, but I’m not sure if that is the author interfering or them just trying to speed up the story.
  Spoiler:
  Another nice piece is that the MC isn’t the only character to be pulled and reincarnated which adds a little more flavor and room for exploration of the characters. Naturally this isn’t shown until much later but I get the feeling the author is pretty good at tying his characters together.
  Grammar: This is by far the most disappointing part of the review and the main reason why so many will have a hard time getting through the story. Each chapter will have at least one or more grammatical errors some of which are quite jarring and will pull the reader out of their immersion. A good example would be the author replacing words like “my” with words like “your”; or maybe when they leave out clarifying words which would defi
• DaijenaRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  So to be straightforward, the story has some of the typical isekai tropes and anyone obsessed with correct sentence structure and grammar will have a stroke. If you ignore these two issues you have a solid story with a nice pace. Fantasy with magic, Dinosaurs, magical racism and delicious stat gain by hard work. And the mc is balanced, neither a idiot nor a genius that becomes god somehow, as such the usual plot armor feels none existant. The mc is also actually likeable.
• Trumpet_42Royal Road

  ★★★ 2.5

  The "Kind Demon King" has potential, there's nothing wrong with the plot so far even if it is nothing special, neither is the grammar all that bad. But it has that quality to it, it's hard to describe, but the writing feels... immature. There is just this 'je ne sais quoi' about the sentence structure and flow of the writing that just detracts from my ability to immerse myself in the story and enjoy it. Like I said, nothing wrong with the story itself really, I just couldn't get into it and there's so many amazing stories on this site that I felt no desire to continue. I hope this review doesn't discourage the author, because that is not my goal, I hope they can find people to enjoy the story they have to tell and that they can continue to mature as a writer. "Kind Demon King" just isn't for me.
• KittyJinglesRoyal Road

  ★★ 2.0

  The writing feels like a stream of consciousness, so there's a narrative voice and the content sounds interesting, but I couldn't get past the grammar issues and the rough unfinished feeling of the work overall.
  Like I get that a lot of stuff on Royal Road isn't exactly a final draft, but personally it was too distracting despite being really hooked by the prospect of darkness and redemption and all that good second chance power progression dinosaur Isekai stuff
  Like maybe do the story a solid and just run it through a grammar checker because the character sounds like he's going to have a solid arc and it's a likeable but flawed protagonist and really doesn't he deserve that?
• RalmonRoyal Road

  ★★ 1.5

  I don't know about the story overall but the first chapters feels haphazard. It is like the author just make things up as they go along, without going back to smooth things out.
  The characters are flat and bland as far as I can see. They barely react to anything or express any emotions. Their dialogue are atrocious too.
  But the greatest fault is the writing and storytelling. The author just can't tell a story at all.
  The writing is very choppy. The flow between words and sentences is nonexistent. It is like the author is writing each sentences without considering how the sentences would feel strung together. Try reading aloud and you will see how unnatural the writing is. Not to mention that constant grammar errors.
  And the storytelling... it is barely there. Description is almost nonexistent. Emotions is not conveyed at all. Actions are, at most, just hinted at. It doesn't feel like it is trying to tell a story to the audience at all.
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  This really nothing more than a first draft of what would be an actual story/novel. The ideas are put down but there is barely any rewriting done to polish what is there.
  As is said: The art of Writing is Rewriting.
• WeavervaleRoyal Road

  ★★ 1.5

  Overall 2/5: This needs a substantial rewrite just on spacing and grammar.
  Character 2/5: I was was too distracted by the presentation. If this was fixed then I could really go after seeing this improve a lot. However, I was seeing a lot of I statements which didn't really match up for what I'm looking for on a story. Now I like a good character intro but there's a lot of 'I did x'.
  Grammar/Style 1/5:
  Really? My major gripe is that it doesn't have room to breathe. I can deal with some bad grammar. I cannot deal with a block of text. That is my entire screen followed by a block of texted my entire screen.
  This is easily fixable too!
  I'm going to illustrate how here: this is from chapter 10, second block of text.
  Easy fixes for readability ahead.
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  "Soon may the Wellerman come." Larve, who was sitting on my shoulders, patted my head like she was banging on a drum. "To bring us sugar and tea and rum."
  She continued the song, playing with my hair. It had been several days since I started traveling with her.
  Guess that made… fifteen days since I arrived here?
  And for the first time since I came here, I came across a settlement. I noticed signs of tool use on the trees as we got closer but I never came across a human.
  It wasn’t a real surprise as the village looked very small. I saw only 3 and 4 houses, all of them small. It was apparent that this place was rustic and self-sufficient, with most houses made of wood and a few of stone.
  "Hop, there you go." I gently set Larve down on the ground. "Let's see if they’re kind enough to let us stay for the night."
  I honestly would have preferred staying outside instead of interacting with others. The fact that I had only small amounts of coins I took off the cultists didn’t help me either. But Larve was a small child. It probably wouldn’t take long until she fell ill if we kept moving like this.
  I took her hand and approached a man chopping wood.
  If this is updated, then I'll update my review. This is as of 10/26/2024.