Jewel Of Dragonsfire

Self-Published

Description

**** The story will revolve around the main character, but will also be told from the point of view of other characters throughout the story

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ZarquonRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I am going to balance out the 1-star rating above. That doesn’t seem fair a critique at all. There seems to be good effort, an interesting plot, worldbuilding, and the author explicitly noted that the LitRPG elements will come in more later. Don’t be demotivated - keep writing! I think some chapters suffer from blocky paragraphs, but I otherwise enjoy Asharan’s characterising so far.
NeoblackheartRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
The story as of 10 chapters in doesn't have any of the content the tags claim. Also each chapter seems so short that you feel like your spending more time clicking next page than actually reading. I won't lie I kinda just glanced at the last 3 chapters to see if anything pops up. It doesn't.
Suggestion would be to take all 10 chapters and condense them down to like maybe 3.
On a positive note the writing is good. Will likely come back after 20 or 30k words to see if the story has taken a better turn.