Inscription [Old Draft]

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2023

Author

PrismaArchives

• Chapter 3
  Jan 7, 2023
• Chapter 2
  Jan 6, 2023
• Chapter 1
  Jan 5, 2023

Reviews

Community Reviews(2)

• Little HelpRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  This story follows Trey, a student who's only a few months away from hopefully entering the acadamy of his dreams. Coming from a questionable background and living in a dangerous environment, it's his chance of getting out. Unfortunately, things don't turn out quite so easy for him.
  The story pretty much drew me in from the very start. The writing focuses on scenes that are important and interesting, with a constant pull that made me want to go on. As things progress, elements of the worldbuilding are weaved into the narrative in a way that feels very organic and unhindering to the flow of the story. I have pretty much no issues here, it's really good.
  I also very much like the characters and how they are written. When new characters are introduced, it always feels like there is a depth to them that the story doesn't immediately let on. By having things they know and say linger through the subtext, their later actions then follow naturally from the realm of expectations that were set up. That is especially true for the main character, whose later moves, even if extreme, don't come from nowhere but have been carefully set up through nuance before.
  The style is easy to understand and follow; there is no confusing parts and it's perspective-consistent. Overall, some repitions and formal grammatical errors exist, though it improves over time. They were such that they didn't really take away from my own reading experience though.
  Personally, I think the story and characters are the strong suit of this work, and they combined to make me want to read on and on. I would recommend this to anyone who likes fantasy academic settings and that delinquent vibe ob just being "one job away" from finally making it. I really like both and think they are well executed so I'm happy I got to read this!
• FlossinduneRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  But it is a world that has been presented in a way that the surface has barely been scratched.
  Story: The story is an intriguing one. A underdog tale of a guy trying his best with what he has, and what he has is a lot of knowledge about crafting gems. Growing up in the bad part of town, well, second worst part of town, Trey has a lot of skills that lean towards the roguish, and it causes him to take some paths that are less trod by protagonists. It's done very realistically, though; he was given a bad hand and sometimes you have to take a lot of flack for just a little bit in return.
  The story is on the grim side, but it sets the tone of the world very well. This place will not care for you, and it's up to you to get ahead.
  Style: The style is consistent throughout, with the first chapter being a little shakier before it finds its stride. It's written in the first person style with Trey, the protagonist of the story, being the sole focus. The writing does well to convey his tone and feelings and what kind of person he is, which I'll get to later in the review.
  Grammar: There aren't many problems with the grammar of Inscription. Sometimes word choices felt odd, or a comma was in a strange place, but overall there were only a few places that made me pause before continuing.
  Characters: I would struggle to call Trey a hero, but I think he fits an anti-hero role quite well. His backstory is more alluded to than told, what with casually mentioning slum lords in conversation and lying his way through interactions where he's on the dubious side of the law. He's confident, but knows what areas he's bad at and tries to extricate himself out of those situations, which I feel is a reasonable response.
  The interactions between characters are natural, especially with the "protective older sister" character of Liz. It's in dialogue where Trey's personality shines, and it's shown throughout the story I've read so far.
  Overall, this story is a good one. What I would like to see mor