INFINITY INVENTORY

Self-Published

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Description

{Cover art by *Wong40k*}

My name is Anik Arvish. I am just a normal 18 years old boy going to my home. What could go wrong in my normal day-to-day life. Right! Right!!

*crush*

wha!!!!

"where am I" unknown

"I don't have any system or golden finger than who is talking in my head "

" Why a zombie attacking me but first where the hell the zombie came from"

"Just a useless being at least give a skill "

"huh I have to play gacha lottery noooo!!! my luck is bad "

"huh! I have gotten a decent skill what is it"

[(Infinity inventory)]

"what the hell kind skill is that"

{The above story description isn't exactly similar to chapters}

"....."talking

'.....'thinking

[......] unknown (read the chapter to know)

Information

Status
Hiatus
Year
2023
Author
Aryamansun07

Tags

ACTIONADVENTURECOMEDYSUPERNATURALMALE LEADPOST APOCALYPTICLOW FANTASY

Royal Road Stats

Rating
3.3/ 5.0
Followers
29
Views
11,501

Chapters(31 total)

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Community Reviews(1)

  • vorlefanRoyal Road
    ★★★★ 3.5
    Overall: It has potential to be a good story, it only lacks further refinement in the wordsmith. I hope you continue to write and improve as more you advance. I know its a challenging to write in other language rather than your mother language, as I also faces the same battle, but its a nice road to take in this part of being a writer.
    Style: Its a bit confusing of how the story is written. With switching in POVs. Stacking in only one, or using it wisely could in fact improve the story, but it need to be done with cautions. I recommend the book, The Name of the Wind as study book, because it does it with a poetic touch.
    Also, it would be good if you use the 'table element' in the writing editor, to make the display of items and stats of the system, it would be more easier to read and follow the story.
    Grammar: There are many errors, like tensing, grammatic. I suggest you to use some grammar check, like grammarly or qullbot to identity it.
    Story: It could benefit for more context in the first chapters, of his exposition to the new world. Explore his inner thoughts, chaotic emotions as he needed to face challenges. I mean, add depth and flesh to connect the reader, making it more believable.
    Character: The character lacks more uniqueness in his voice and mannerism, he is a bit plastic in the sense of being "much common". Also, the lack of inner-thoughts and emotional points about him, make it harder for the reader to connect and wish his well-being. It was too sudden his calmness amidst the "apocalyptic world", too "perfect" his actions. If you added flaws, tensions in his actions, mistakes in taking wrong decisions, distrusting the system at first, thinking he was getting crazy, it would add that flavor of: "WOW, that's it, I'll probably take the same kind of decisions, now I wanting to see more."
    All in all, keep up a good work.