In Harry Potter with OTS System

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2021

Author

Dvelasquez

• CHAPTER 10 – Finally, Hogwarts!
  Jan 31, 2021
• CHAPTER 9 – Platform 9¾
  Jan 29, 2021
• CHAPTER 8 – Picking my wand
  Jan 28, 2021
• CHAPTER 7 – Time Skip (Part 3)
  Jan 27, 2021
• CHAPTER 6 – Time Skip (Part 2)
  Jan 25, 2021
• CHAPTER 5 – Time Skip (Part 1)
  Jan 23, 2021
• CHAPTER 4 – My first magic book
  Jan 23, 2021
• CHAPTER 3 – Finally, real spells!
  Jan 21, 2021
• CHAPTER 2 – Looking through my new system
  Jan 19, 2021
• CHAPTER 1 – I died!? What!? My Guild!!
  Jan 19, 2021
• PROLOGUE
  Jan 19, 2021
• What's an OTS and what's Tibia? Find it here!
  Jan 19, 2021

Reviews

Community Reviews(10)

• konradRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Overall score 5/5
  I just like it, bite me bro I have nothing else to say it's just a really nice read. I see no point in writing more than that but unfortunately an advanced review needs to have at the very least 200 words so I guess I'll just keep writing here some random stuff a bit like what I am doing right now just for the sake of buffing up my word count a bit like xianxia authors do for whatever reason.
  Style score 5/5
  Easy to read, the paragraphs are not overtly long, easy on the eyes. It's perfect for the kind of read it is
  Story score 5/5
  It's Harry Potter, that's nuff said, even so the author has the clear intention of giving the story his own twists and foes and stuff. Nice.
  Grammar score 4.5/5
  I think I've seen 1 grammar error which was more like a very slight lexical error, will prolly eventually change the score to 5/5
  Character score 5/5
  Truth be told the secondary characters are a bit well... secondary they kinda stay in the background but that's alright also as of the day I'm writing the review we haven't even been introduced to the big 3 so eeeh... I think it's fine.
• Ap0c4L1PS1SRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  The story till now is interesting and the grammar is good.
  The system seems interesting and the mc is relatable.
  If this novel keeps this quality I think a lot of people will like it.
  So if you read this review give this novel a try.
  Good look with the story :)
• Tra234Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Loved it, please write more, please. It's hard to find a good fanfic that I actually like, but this one is well written with a good spin. Please don't give up because of some being negative the rest of us would love to know what happens next. It's so fustrating to get into a story and it jus ends, it's actually a little bit depressing.
• PokermastrerRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Perfection, it lacks all flaws that other harry potter fsnfics make, no unreasonable explination of magic, just mind based spell casting like it always should be, i olny worry about future of the story, as introduction of runes and expalination of they functions and mechanics may be an challenge,
  There is also power scaling, mc have potential to grow far beyond of archmages, so novel either ends after mc gets too overpowred or author will need to develop this story into an crossover
  There is also potential to story and character based complx storytelinf, even if mc will become op, becouse this is harry potter fanfic, and for example, there may be possibility for voldemort wanting to start nuclear war when put in corner.
  System is not unreasonable, adds character to the story instead of dramatically lowering its quality like in most cases. Feels like pet of the story that actually have right  and reason to be here, instead of being an excuse for autor to explain hiw things works, there is dynamic and maguc theory instead of system doing everything.
  Also grammar and writting style is good, clear and enjoyabke even for someone who is not skilled in english like me, I enjoy reading it in English, and this is highest ratę i can give, sometimes are so bad that translator can not translate them, much less I.
  The only true problem so far is propanky hiatus, everything else perfect
• chazziRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  A harry potter fanfic, MC has some "out of context" abilities, could be described as an "author world" with some of the changes or new things author has introduced into the HP story.
  It seems english might not be the authors first language as evident by the occasionally mis-used words.
  Its an ok harry potter fanfiction, there are defintely better quality fanfictions out there but still a decent read if that sort of things interests you.
• Free FoodRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  The title of the story is very straightforward and tells exactly what you will get when you read the story. Some readers will like it and those that don't will very soon know.
  Story includes:
  Random Omnipotent Being, OP MC, MC with system, child MC, childish sentient System, cold blooded murder
  It's an OK story.
• BrianAftonRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  This Story has a bettter spin take on an isekai to HP world. where the MC is not a "IMMA GET IN THE WAT HAVE HARRY AND BE THE PROTAG OF THE STORY WHILE ALSO NOT BE!!"
  In this stoty the mc is accually just a guy that wants to enjoy his new life while slo getting stronger to protect his friends. while also not disrupting the main plot "Too much". As of ch.65 only book 2 plot has been alterd.
  More chaps please. You can also set up a patr-eon for unedited chaps?
• flamethrowRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  minor spoilers ahead, nothing revealing about the plot however.
  tl;dr : Good story if you have a bit of time on your hand, but not without its flaws (but is there a fanfic without flaws?)
  Overall, I quite liked the story and the ideas behind it. The execution isn't perfect; In my opinion, the system barely should be considered as LitRPG, since all it really does is give him some spells, sell classes (that do nothing but give more spells) and items (that make the spells more powerful or ... you guessed it, give more spells).
  There's some quests in there, but it just feels like something that give him points when he isn't as strong as the story demands (so he can get more spells lol) and not really all that relevant to the story. I honestly think all of this can be accomplished without a system; the MC could have been granted a spell book from an OTS when he was reincarnated and it would'nt have been all different. I think the story would've been better served with a 'real' system with stats, perks and skill (or spell) mastery in the interface; or by going the other way and doing without a system at all. This middle ground I think, annoys both LitRPG lovers and those who do not.
  As for the MC, I kind of got attached to him even though he's oftentime non-sensical and as the system likes to remind him; just plain dumb. He makes plans for his future and progression and simply forget he even made them when the time comes to execute them. He is also quite lax which isn't all that relatable. He is kind of powerful for HP world, but he knows that he is far from powerful enough to beat eveyone else; and even though he can get that powerful, he simply decides not to because "there's no hurry".
  But there is my dude, you're not Harry Potter, nothing says only Voldemort can kill you, you don't have JK's plot armor. What's the use of having a system since birth if you're not really gonna use it. It's kind of frustrating to read tbh, he has all of that 'potential' and simply decide
• 42offsideRoyal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  TL;DR: If you can get past the flaws, this is a fun OP HP fanfic story with a bit of litrpg.
  First off, this is a Harry Potter fanfic, with an OC insert who has the powers from some old MMO I've never heard of, but which apparently has a very active and creative modding community.
  This doesn't start as a first year with HP. He's a first year at the same time as the Twins, George and Fred. He's also an orphan, so don't expect any backstory beyond the first chapter.
  The MC comes off as somewhat flat, yes, but he's entertaining anyway, which is the point. He's not unlikeable, not evil or twisted, which helps considerably.
  The other OC's (and given the year, there's a LOT of them) actually come off  a little less flat than the MC, but that may be because of lower screen time.
  The story goes just fine, without seeming to jump around with lots of viewpoints or jarring timeskips. The story is linear timewise, without going back and forth much at all, or re-telling the same scene several times from different people's perspectives. (Which I personally hate and some authors just love to do.)
  It's done in the style of most HP fanfics, nothing too remarkable about the setting or style.
  The big problem with this story is the grammar or editing. In particular, the author uses italics for ALL dialogue, and encloses internal dialogue in {}'s. See for instructions on how to fix that, assuming the author still hasn't. Even with that (straightforward if not simple) fix, there's still plenty to complain about. Using the wrong word (expulsed instead of expelled, etc) misspellings, and other minor grammar mistakes are fairly common. This story didn't have an separate editor, and it really shows at times.
  The worst part of this story is, of course, that it's incomplete, and unlikely to be completed. It's a good story.
• arre131Royal Road

  ★★★ 2.5

  This story is not terrible, the concept itself is not terrible. Perhaps picking a more well known game would have been smart so more people can relate. But other than that the core concept could really have been intersting in interacting with the story.
  Apart from the content it is a story written with a lot of shortcuts, you have to fil in a lot of stuff in your head since there is not much describing of enviroment or peoples reactions. He grows strong a bit to fast and that is just accepted by all apart from slight surprises. Decpite him clearly being stronger and more knowledgeable than Dumbledore and Voldemort put together when they were his age.
  The story also lacks reasoning when it comes to the main plot of the first year at Hogwarts. It does not actually explain why things are happening and lacks real struggle.
  The characters are not deep which is a big flaw here. The main character is a man only driven by getting stronger, not for any specific reason. His interactions with the system is one of the stronger parts when it comes to characters. The system itself is one of the only characters of the story that has some dept. I wish the interactions with other characters would be more than just random passings of time, and short interactions of training.
  The story is a bit clumsy but not terrible. Grammer is not great, a lot of misstakes there which can sometimes impact the story itself by creating missunderstandings